Talk:Wipeout Fusion/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: IDV (talk · contribs) 19:16, 19 February 2017 (UTC)

I'll take this one.--IDVtalk 19:16, 19 February 2017 (UTC)

Infobox

 * The designer parameter is for people. According to the background/release section, it seems this parameter should just say Colin Berry.
 * Thanks for spotting that, I completely missed this! Added Colin Berry. JAG  UAR   20:20, 21 February 2017 (UTC)
 * Multiplayer should be lowercase.
 * Fixed. JAG  UAR   20:20, 21 February 2017 (UTC)

Gameplay

 * Overall, the game contains 45 race tracks, 32 ship models, 26 different weapons. and 26 different weapons
 * Fixed. JAG  UAR   20:20, 21 February 2017 (UTC)
 * I don't speak British English myself, so ignore this if I'm wrong, but is the semicolon placed correctly in The other two race modes are "Zone" mode; which revolves around survival as the player's ship automatically accelerates to extreme speeds, and time trial mode, where the player may record best lap times.? I would expect it to go after "accelerates to extreme speeds", separating the two items in the list (zone and time trial).
 * Semicolons and hyphens are sometimes used more frequently in British English, but in these cases you're right, and I have used them when I shouldn't have in this article. I've moved the semicolon after the "accelerates to extreme speeds" sentence. I think I may have rushed writing this. JAG  UAR   20:20, 21 February 2017 (UTC)

Background and release

 * The release dates aren't mentioned here, and aren't sourced in the infobox. They should be added to this section with sourcing.
 * Added release dates here, and sourced them. According to IGN, it was released a day after 18 June, not the 17th, so I've changed it to that. It's unheard of when gaming publications pin the release dates off by a day or two. JAG  UAR   20:20, 21 February 2017 (UTC)

Reception

 * Again, if I'm wrong, please ignore this, but I'm unsure about the semicolon in Rick Sanchez of IGN felt disappointed with the game's visuals; opining that its graphics - a comma would feel more natural to me.
 * You're right, I don't know what I was thinking here. Replaced with a comma. JAG  UAR   20:20, 21 February 2017 (UTC)
 * stating that the game's visuals had improved by "110%" - since the previous Wipeout game? Since the last public showing of this one?
 * The review says "Wipeout Fusion is the true sequel to Wipeout", which makes no sense as he doesn't specify which one. It's logical to say that he's referring to its predecessor, Wipeout 3, so I mentioned that. JAG  UAR   20:20, 21 February 2017 (UTC)
 * and pop-up issues. - might be more understandable for people who are not really into games if it's changed to "graphical pop-up issues" or something similar.
 * Done. JAG  UAR   20:20, 21 February 2017 (UTC)

Things I noticed that aren't part of the GA criteria

 * (collectively referred to as 'teams' in-game) - I would probably simplify this to ("teams").
 * Done. JAG  UAR   20:20, 21 February 2017 (UTC)


 * I would merge the two short paragraphs in background/release - one-sentence paragraphs make for a "choppy" reading experience.
 * Done. JAG  UAR   20:20, 21 February 2017 (UTC)


 * I would similarly try to do something about the short Metacritic paragraph.
 * I've rephrased it slightly, but I can't expand it as it's a summary sentence. I only put those at the beginning of a reception section to summarise the game's average score, but let me know if you want me to remove it or merge it into the next paragraph. JAG  UAR   20:20, 21 February 2017 (UTC)


 * It's a good practice to archive all web sources while they're still alive - GameZone could very well update their website and break all links to their articles, for instance.
 * Archived all, except GameSpot which couldn't be archived for some reason. JAG  UAR   20:20, 21 February 2017 (UTC)

Comments
Looking pretty good! I just have a few minor issues, as well as some questions about the usage of semicolons. I'll put this on hold for a week - if all issues are addressed by then, I'll promote the article to GA.--IDVtalk 13:40, 21 February 2017 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review, ! I've addressed all of the issues. This game is the black sheep of the series, so ultimately it's the shortest and last covered of the topic. It's a shame that it didn't get the press it deserved, but suffice to say I won't be taking this beyond GA. Thanks again! JAG  UAR   20:20, 21 February 2017 (UTC)
 * Excellent, I'll promote it to GA now! --IDVtalk 20:31, 21 February 2017 (UTC)