Talk:Woman's Club of Evanston

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Hey team,

Great work so far - this is a great start. The infobox is especially nice!

I look forward to seeing you flesh this out a bit. I'd especially like to see this tied into other women's movements and organizations which were active at the time.

Let me know if you have questions, and when you're ready, remember that you can ask Ian, our content expert, for feedback.

-- Jdfoote (talk) 17:16, 24 October 2016 (UTC)

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Interesting topic and choice. I agree with Jeremy and say it could use a little bit more fleshing out. Perhaps there is a newspaper article about the Club somewhere in the Tribune, or even Evanston Review? Just add one or 2 articles to make it a little bit more "plump" and I would say that you're good to go.

Also, I saw a little typo under History. I think instead of open you meant to say opened.

Final comment is regarding your structure, or more so your wording. From my understanding Origins and History are pretty similar. Maybe rather than blending everything in, the article could benefit from a clear distinction between the building and the club itself.

Maybe this would be better? Tell me what you think :) - Lisa

The Clubhouse -- Origins -- Architecture The Club -- Historical Activities -- Current Activities/The Club Today

-- Lisalarbi (talk) 14:16, 28 October 2016 (UTC)

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I think your article has a lot of really interesting information and the infobox is well done. I think the lead paragraph is simple and to-the-point while still presenting the pertinent fundamental info. The Architecture section seems to me like it should have more content to justify a full heading. I think the heading 'Current building' could be rephrased, since the club didn't have an intentional building before this one besides someone's home. Maybe 'Official building' would be more clear. There was a grammatical issue that stuck out to me-- "During World War I, the club was open to entertain servicemen, sponsored Red Cross knitting and sewing groups and provided an ambulance for the Red Cross in France." For the sake of parallel structure, I'd say "...the club was open to entertain servicemen, sponsor Red Cross knitting and sewing groups, and provide an ambulance for the Red Cross in France" instead. It would be nice to see more examples when you say "since its inception, the Woman's Club of Evanston has been involved in promoting culture and the arts" and if there are enough examples available, maybe this would deserve its own subheading? The heading "The Club Today" also strikes me as strange, maybe change that to "Current" or something. The current mission statement could be moved from 'Social club' to 'Current' to give current a little more content and even out the sections. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Isarob705 (talk • contribs) 19:32, 28 October 2016 (UTC)

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Overall, the article feels pretty strong. I think you guys did a good job sounding unbiased and linking to both outside sources and other Wikipedia articles. You might add a little bit of info, just five or ten words, in the intro section summarizing the point of the club to help explain why it was added to the National Register. The History section fleshes that out well, but the intro might be stronger if it includes a little bit of that information.

The architecture section is really short and feels almost unwarranted. You might try to find more information about the architect, Ernest Mayo, or any notes on the actual construction of the building, rather than just the materials it's made out of. If that info is hard to find, you might just merge this with the Origins section, especially since the "Current building" sub-section already talks about the construction.

The History section is well-detailed and does a good job explaining the importance of major events in the Club. I would probably change the first phrase, "From the beginning," to something less casual and generic, like "From its founding." Also, the History section seems to use "Woman's Club of Evanston" to refer to the social club, all the way up to the last sentence, when the "it" clearly refers to the physical building rather than the organization. If you could clarify when you're referencing the building or the organization, that might make it a little less muddy. Other than that, the History section is great.

The Club Today sub-heading is also pretty short, and could probably be added to the end of the History section.

A lot of your sources are from the Woman's Club of Evanston web site, but I don't think that's a huge problem, since you use a few other sources as well. You might try to find one or two more neutral sources like newspapers, but like I said at the beginning, you guys did a good job of keeping an unbiased and neutral tone. Sorry if this is a lot, but hope those suggestions help.

CaptainsComingLookBusy (talk) 19:42, 28 October 2016 (UTC)

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Strengths: Overall, it is a well-organized article using a clear structure and reliable resources. The architecture part is concise but clear to me what the Woman’s club looks like since it includes all the essential descriptions. I also like The club today part, which is also brief but let people know that Clubhouse serves for diverse events. The Origins and History parts are very detailed and comprehensive, which list the prominent changes and evolvement of Woman’s Club of Evanston throughout those years. Your page holds a neutral point of view. There are no words or phrases that don't feel neutral.

Concrete suggestion: In the Lead section, it only says that The Woman’s Club of Evanston is a historic house in Evanston, Illinois and is the headquarters for the social club of the same name.

However, I think you should clarify what the Woman’s Club of Evanston is for in the Lead section instead of simply describing how and where it is. Actually adding one sentence to mention its purpose should be fine.

Copy-editing of the text:

Social club Originally an informal group, the club drafted an official constitution the following year, stating thier purpose as: “To secure better homes, wiser motherhood, better laws, truer citizenship and a nobler womanhood by promoting the physical, social, mental, moral and spiritual development of its members."

Their---its

For all your quotations, the period should always go after the double quotation mark.

Architecture The Woman’s Club building is in the late 19th/Early 20th century revival style.

late 19th/Early 20th---late 19s/early 20s

Thanks from the authors
Thanks to everyone for their suggestions! We've gotten a lot of help and advice from WikiProject National Register of Historic Places on this article and some of their members have already passed through and made some edits, so please feel free to do the same for copyediting and grammar. If it sucks, it'll get revised eventually anyway haha Foodnaptime (talk) 18:59, 31 October 2016 (UTC)