Talk:Women's health in China

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I am working on a revision of this article. I will up date the information using more current information. The reorganization of the the article will situate healthcare in China an how economic reform in China has effect healthcare specifically for women with regards to access, supply, and quality. I will expand and encompass the maternity issues to include family planning and effects of STDs with in the healthcare system. I would appreciate any feedback I can get right now I am currently collecting research as to be completely thorough providing the best information possible. If anyone knows of a pertinent article or other reputable sources addressing the healthcare issues in China specifically regarding women please comment with a link or advice on where I might look. Jdoulas (talk) 05:55, 6 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Women's healthcare in 20th century China has that certain scent to it - it's the in-text citations and the slanted quotation marks around “China” that give it away for me... could be someone's paper for school. -- BD2412 talk 04:14, 2005 May 19 (UTC)
 * I still can't find direct evidence of plagarism. Could be a school paper. I guess I'll give it the benefit of the doubt. – Quadell (talk) (bounties) 18:22, 17 February 2006 (UTC)

Title change suggestion
I think "Women's health in China" would be a more-encompassing title than the current one. It would allow discussing both health outcomes and health care delivery systems. I propose changing the title. BerikG (talk) 20:05, 30 March 2013 (UTC)

Feedback
This article needs a short paragraph on the pre-reform period. The general outlines of the health policies and outcomes of this period are well-known, and can be summarized on the basis of some of the sources used for this article (i.e. without reading new sources). I suggest calling that section "Healthcare in the 1949-79 period." Secondly, the Economic Reform section is not only too long (since it has little on healthcare and is only a background section) but also the single long paragraph needs to be broken up into shorter paragraphs (an idea per paragraph). The citations need to be fixed, conform to Wikipedia style. Links to other Wikipedia articles need to be added. BerikG (talk) 23:08, 19 April 2013 (UTC)

Peer Review
Overall I felt that your paper delivered a lot of good content. However a few edits should be made to improve readability, organization and style. You should try to include some links to other pages within the body of your article. I would also recommend using the standard wikipedia citation format and add some pictures.

I would make the following changes to your body paragraphs:

Economic reform
This section has a lot of great information, but should probably be broken in to a few sections instead of a large block of text.

Healthcare reforms
I would recommend changing the title from "healthcare reforms" to healthcare policies.

I would also recommend including more information on cultural information that may have some part in health of women. The cultural and societal norms could also be included in other sections.

Reproductive health
I would change the title of this section to Women's health outcomes and include the information you gave in the previous section. You may also want to create subsections within this section to address cancer, HIV and other illness outcomes for women that you mentioned in the previous section. Jasdeepsgill (talk) 05:03, 20 April 2013 (UTC)

Response to feedback
Thank you for all your feedback I will take it all into consideration and make the changes necessary. I will absolutely break down the big body of text after looking at my article now I do agree that big block of text does look overwhelming. I do know that more editing is necessary and am working on that. Jasdeep thanks I will include a section on HIV I think there is good information that would add to that discussion. I also like the change to healthcare policies that does make more sense and is much more inclusive. Jdoulas (talk) 23:42, 21 April 2013 (UTC)

Feedback cont'd
The article is too brief and needs to be built up and elaborated with a focus on Health Outcomes as a section that consists of several subsections (as suggested above). You need to locate a few key additional articles in order to do so. The citation style in the text, the references, the links to other wikipedia articles all need to be fixed. BerikG (talk) 05:43, 26 April 2013 (UTC)

Expanding the "women's health outcomes" section
I’m considering expanding the sub-section “reproductive health,” especially to include more cultural perspectives on how women’s reproductive health in China is significantly impacted by their role/status within households (e.g. recent news events on the pregnant woman who committed suicide after being denied a c-section by her familyYilin7456 (talk) 01:06, 21 September 2017 (UTC)). — Preceding unsigned comment added by Yilin7456 (talk • contribs) 01:00, 21 September 2017 (UTC)

Peer review
, great job on this article! I definitely learned a lot that I didn't expect to learn (especially about post-natal health and suicide). The structure you use and the clarity of your writing are both excellent. I suggest updating the lead as you go so that it reflects the rest of the article. Also, consider adding a sub-heading before your contribution to the "Healthcare policies" section to distinguish the actual policies from their effects. Keep adding links as you go. Most importantly, keep developing the "eating disorder" section with specific facts and further implications, and clarify the time period that the information is relevant to in the post-natal health and eating disorder sections. Awesome job and good luck going forward! --Marycneal (talk) 03:32, 26 October 2017 (UTC)

I agree with the statements made above--the article is well structured and flows well. Just as some general comments to potentially help guide your next steps, I suggest supporting statements and sections with more than one reference (in particular the “HIV/AIDS” and "Prenatal health" subsections, both of which currently only cite one source). Some areas/sections for further development include the "Eating disorders" subsection and "WTO membership" subsection. These are great start, but I believe they can be expanded even further! I also found that several statements, such as the last sentence of the "Suicide" paragraph, make broad, argumentative statements, but they are not followed up by specific pieces of statistical or other forms of evidence. For this specific example, for instance, I would provide statistical evidence that explains why rural suicidal rate “is related to the more extreme forms of patriarchal oppression in rural areas.” By doing so, that might increase the neutrality and comprehensiveness of your article. Please don't hesitate to contact me! Aleong809 (talk) 07:59, 26 October 2017 (UTC)

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