Talk:Woodland Sketches/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 20:05, 28 September 2021 (UTC)

I can take a look at this! —  Ghost River  20:05, 28 September 2021 (UTC)

Lede

 * Rather than referring to it as a "collection of short piano pieces", and you can correct me if I'm wrong, I would say it is "a piano suite", as the term is more precised and is used elsewhere in the article
 * "by an aspect" "by a different aspect"
 * All done. GeneralPoxter (talk • contribs) 21:50, 28 September 2021 (UTC)

History

 * "which he later disposed of" "of which he later disposed"
 * "Earlier that year in April" strange flow. Either just "Earlier that year" or "That past April"
 * "in the fall of that year" "that fall"
 * Comma after "The suite grew popular and"
 * ""[claim] an identity as an American composer."" ""[claim] an identity as an American composer"." per MOS:LQ
 * All done. GeneralPoxter (talk • contribs) 22:06, 28 September 2021 (UTC)

Pieces

 * That this section is simply a list feels a bit awkward. To see if that was commonplace in GAs of classical suites, I checked String Quartets, Op. 50 (Haydn) and saw that the equivalent section was titled "Overview" (which I think makes more sense, as having "Pieces" followed by "Music" is somewhat redundant), and that it mentions broad characteristics of the set of pieces as a whole, much like you have under the "Music" header but before the subheads.
 * Done. I moved the section in Music before the subheads to the new Overview section, and renamed the Music section to Pieces for clarity. GeneralPoxter (talk • contribs) 22:06, 28 September 2021 (UTC)

Music

 * ""are suggestive of extramusical ideas without telling a specific story."" ""are suggestive of extramusical ideas without telling a specific story"." per MOS:LQ
 * Done. GeneralPoxter (talk • contribs) 22:06, 28 September 2021 (UTC)

No. 1 to No. 5

 * "a spare melody, based on a simple one from the" "a spare, simple melody based upon the music of the"
 * I wanted to specify that the melody was not just based on the Brotherton music in general, but on a singular Brotherton melody. GeneralPoxter (talk • contribs) 22:06, 28 September 2021 (UTC)


 * ""saves it from blandness."" ""saves it from blandness"." per MOS:LQ
 * "As does "To a Wild Rose"," "Just as "To a Wild Rose","
 * Native American "motives" or "motifs"?
 * The original title of the source is "motives", but it seems the latter is more commonly used these days, so I changed it to motifs. GeneralPoxter (talk • contribs) 22:06, 28 September 2021 (UTC)


 * "Measures 1 to 8" "The first eight measures"
 * All but the first point done. GeneralPoxter (talk • contribs) 22:06, 28 September 2021 (UTC)

No. 6 to No. 10

 * ""ever composed for the pianoforte."" ""ever composed for the pianoforte"." per MOS:LQ
 * Done. GeneralPoxter (talk • contribs) 22:06, 28 September 2021 (UTC)

Reception

 * ""have an inescapable fragrance, tenderness, and zest."" ""have an inescapable fragrance, tenderness, and zest"." per MOS:LQ
 * "along with three" "as well as in three"
 * All done. GeneralPoxter (talk • contribs) 22:06, 28 September 2021 (UTC)

General comments

 * One picture, relevant and in the public domain
 * No stability concerns in the revision history
 * Copyvio score looks great at 11.5%

That's all I've got! Mostly minor tweaks, save for one section that could be shuffled around a bit. Putting on hold now, and let me know if you have any questions! —  Ghost River  20:20, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the GA review! I believe I have addressed all of your points now, so please let me know if you need any follow up. GeneralPoxter (talk • contribs) 22:06, 28 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Looks all good now, happy to pass! —  Ghost River  22:10, 28 September 2021 (UTC)