Talk:Work (Iggy Azalea song)/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Azealia911 (talk · contribs) 23:14, 1 September 2015 (UTC)

First of all, welcome back Marc! I see you've been away for a little while, always nice to have someone return after a month-or-so break. As you can see, I've split my comments up in a way that mirrors the articles layout for ease, any green text means I'm quoting something from the article. I hope we can work on getting this to GA!  Azealia 911  talk  17:46, 2 September 2015 (UTC)
 * Thank you!  Cool Marc  21:29, 2 September 2015 (UTC)

General comments

 * You use "Work" a lot when talking about the song, it becomes quite repetitive, and sometimes stops the flow of sentances, EG, Her rapping pace on "Work" varies from fast intricate rhymes to slow, sounds so awkward to read. Try using synonyms like the track or the song

Lead

 * is the debut single is incorrect, technically "Beat Down" is her debut single. I suggest "is the debut solo single".


 * Remove the comma from the first use of album, in the first sentence.


 * The T in The Invisible Men should be a capital.
 * Remove (2000), it's generally only used for album years.


 * Jonas & Francois → Jonas & François

Background

 * During December 2012 and January 2013 → During late 2012 and early 2013


 * by Iggy Azalea → by Azalea


 * Remove the repeated (2014)


 * Remove the repeated (2000)

Composition

 * Remove (2013), again, a song.

Release

 * This section uses far too many dates, 11 to be exact. Try cutting them down, EG was then made available in Canada and the United States on 16 July 2013 and 23 July 2013, respectively can become → was then made available in Canada and the United States in July. There's such thing as too much detail.


 * "Work" served as Azalea's debut single, → "Work" served as Azalea's debut single as a lead artist,


 * Remove (EP) considering you only use the abbreviation once.


 * EP → extended play, per comment above.

Critical reception

 * Kellan Miller of XXL said "Work" was → Kellan Miller of XXL deemed the track as


 * Is the full stop after Respect. deliberate?
 * Yeah. That's how the magazine is titled, much like the "!" in Exclaim! or E! for example.  Cool Marc  21:29, 2 September 2015 (UTC)


 * I'd remove the entire third paragraph to be honest, the section is bursting with single reviews and it doesn't seem to add much, just a couple of album reviews and more of the same.
 * I actually found the last paragraph to be most insightful, so I've done a lot of trimming on the previous two instead.  Cool Marc  21:29, 2 September 2015 (UTC)

Commercial performance

 * No mention of the songs performance on the Hot Rap Songs chart? I know you're not allowed to use a chart box for it per guidelines, but there's nothing stopping you discussing the songs performance.
 * I've went into quite some detail about its parent chart Hot R&B/Hip-Hop Songs already, and felt had I included Rap songs in prose it would encourage IPs to include it in the chart box.  Cool Marc  21:29, 2 September 2015 (UTC)


 * Remove the certification provider shorteners like (BPI) and (MC), they're linked in the cert box so there's no confusion.

Background and development

 * Jonas & Francois → Jonas & François


 * Add a comma after of the song


 * Add a comma after (1994)

Release and synopsis

 * Vevo → VEVO

Reception

 * Any comment about the result of the three UK Music Video Awards that the video was nominated for?

Live performances and Selena Gomez cover

 * Remove and Selena Gomez cover from the title, it's pretty undue considering it's also a live performance of sorts.


 * Speaking of the SG cover, there seems to be undue weight in her mentioning, do we really need three reviews of her performance of someone elses song? I'd make the section all one paragraph, and simply add on Selena Gomez covered "Work" during her Stars Dance Tour in 2013, in a mash-up with her song "B.E.A.T.". A writer for MuchMusic deemed it "a badass rendition".[104] to the end of the first bit.
 * I found the reviews bits for it quite trivial and unprofessional so I've removed them altogether.  Cool Marc  21:29, 2 September 2015 (UTC)


 * The sentence about the iTunes festival need sourcing.
 * I've added in a few other missing references as well, and updated the section a little. You might want to spot check that.  Cool Marc  21:29, 2 September 2015 (UTC)


 * Remove (1992), again, song.


 * Remove wearing a white jumpsuit airbrushed with an image of Al Pacino from the film Scarface (1983)., it's trivial.

Credits and personnel

 * Move the liner notes section to the top of the section.

Track listings

 * I'd swap the two columns around, considering the solo single came first.

Release history

 * The remixes EP was also released to CD
 * That appears to be promo CD that DJs used for club play and are now selling secondhand? As far as I know 911.com are the equivalent of eBay? Had an official CD been released it would at least be visible at main retailers like Amazon or Best Buy, even if sold out.  Cool Marc  21:29, 2 September 2015 (UTC)