Talk:Workforce development/Archives/2013

Copyright infringement
You must be careful not to directly copy text from your sources. For example, the sentences "The sector-based approach has been used successfully in Massachusetts in the healthcare industry to address the direct care worker needs of long term care (Extended Career Ladder Initiative-ECCLI) and to reduce the nursing shortage (Nursing Career Ladder Initiative-NUCLI), and to tackle the workforce needs of manufacturing, biotechnology, financial services, and other industries through the BEST and BayStateWorks initiatives" and "Sector-based initiatives are targeted to a specific industry, with solutions that are tailored to satisfy the needs of the industry. The goal is to create education, training programs, and other support mechanisms that are customized to the workplace of the specific industry. Thus the program fits the needs of both industry employers and workers who want to improve their skills and advance their career development" are copied directly from this source. Because the source is under copyright, this is copyright infringement. If you copy word-for-word, you need to put quotation marks around the material. See here for an explanation of how to avoid plagiarism of this sort.Please go through the article and locate material that is directly copied and do one of the following: 1) Add quotation marks around it; 2) paraphrase it; 3) remove it. I'll have someone come by to help you assess the rest of the article and work on fixing the issue. Awadewit (talk) 23:44, 14 November 2010 (UTC)
 * I'm not the one Awadewit asked, but I removed the first of those passages as a blatant copyvio, which is removed on sight. The second one too closely follows the structure of the page on which it is based and copies distinctive wording but I am leaving it in the hope that it will be rewritten quickly. Haven't looked at the rest of the article either, Aw probably has someone else in mind for that as I'm far from an expert article writer. :) Franamax (talk) 02:46, 15 November 2010 (UTC)
 * Based on a note at my talk page, I have gone ahead and removed both the copied and strongly derivative content that remained. I'm happy to work with contributors who want to talk about how to implement information from copyrighted sources within Wikipedia's policies. --Moonriddengirl (talk) 14:07, 15 November 2010 (UTC)

Suggestions
--Sage Ross - Online Facilitator, Wikimedia Foundation (talk) 18:10, 3 December 2010 (UTC)
 * The first thing that stands out is the lead. Considering how large and detailed this article has become, the lead doesn't do enough to summarize it.  It should probably be expanded to about 3 paragraphs, summarizing all the key aspects of the article.
 * The article should do more to indicate why the article is arranged the way it is, e.g., by explaining who came up with the categorization of sector-based vs. place-based... are these terms widespread among workplace development experts, or is this a categorization one or a few people have introduced to try to bring order to a more organic range of strategies?
 * The section titles as questions are not standard Wikipedia style; they set something of a how-to or guidebook tone, instead of a more purely descriptive approach to the topic.
 * Similarly, many of the sections are arranged into steps... first this, then this and lastly this other thing. That contributes to the how-to tone; it would be helpful perhaps to be explicit in the text about who has defined these particular steps.


 * Thanks for your suggestions. I've tried to implement them in this version of the article. Please let me know if you see further details to change. Speon (talk) 03:31, 8 December 2010 (UTC)

Untitled
This page is being created by the WikiProject United States Public Policy. We will be working on it through the next month and hope to greatly enhance its quality soon. Speon (talk) 05:43, 31 October 2010 (UTC)