Talk:World Professional Billiards and Snooker Association/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 09:09, 9 October 2020 (UTC)

Shall review for the GAN October 2020 Backlog Drive. MWright96 (talk) 09:09, 9 October 2020 (UTC)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * The percentage symbol should be spelt out per MOS:PERCENT
 * Done.


 * "which organises the professional Snooker" - the word in bold does not need to begin with a capital letter
 * Done.


 * "and English billiards through World Billiards" - a full stop is missing to end this sentence
 * Done.

Overview

 * "The governing body for the non-professional games" - aspect of snooker
 * amended to "aspect of snooker and billiards" (could delete the "and billiards" though)


 * "Barry Hearn's Matchroom Sport owns 51% of World Snooker, and the WPBSA is the next largest shareholder with 26%." - the two sources attached to this do not mention shareholders. ANother source is needed for this particular claim
 * Reworded more in line with the archive for source 4.


 * Also, another violation of MOS:PERCENT in the sentence above
 * Amended.
 * "In January 2020, World Snooker rebranded as World Snooker Tour." - World Snooker was rebranded
 * Amended.
 * When was Archer president of the WPBSA?
 * Added.

History

 * "rather than the challenge system that had been in place from 1964[20] and in" - there is a comma missing inbetween "1964" and the citation
 * Done.


 * "The PBPA disaffiliated from the BA&CC from 1 October 1970[22] and was renamed the WPBSA" - a comma is missing between "1970" and the citation
 * Done.

Promotional activities

 * "a major growth area for the sport[25] and in other territories including Germany." - a comma is between inbetween "sport" and the citation
 * Done.


 * "Amnesty International criticised the announcement, due to concerns about the human rights in the country." - the word in bold isn't needed
 * Done.


 * "and 2013 it initiated the "Cue Zone into Schools" programme," - and in 2013 initiated
 * Done.


 * "the WPBSA announced the creation of an All-party parliamentary group for Snooker," - the words in bold don't need to begin with a capital letter
 * Done.


 * Explain who Conor Burns is to the uninitated
 * Amended; let me know if it needs further change.
 * Change made is acceptable. 17:08, 9 October 2020 (UTC)

Criticism and controversy

 * "The body has received criticism in the late 2000s." - the word in bold is not needed
 * Amended.


 * "John Higgins has been particularly vocal in his opinion that World Snooker has not done enough to promote the game in new territories," - the words in bold need to be replaced by their past tense equalivents
 * Amended.