Talk:World War I/Archive 12

Error in Introduction
"Largest war in history"? Are we forgetting the war that took 60 million lives only fifteen years later, my niggas? —Preceding unsigned comment added by 71.79.40.102 (talk) 04:41, 23 March 2009 (UTC)

Biased article
There is pro-Serbian biased information in this article. Please recheck sections about "liberation" of Bitolya. Macedonia was inhabited mostly by Bulgarians at that time, therefore it is strange that there could be things like "bulgarization" of the populace etc. Please compare the info in this article with more info regarding the Macedonian question. Please use independent sources like Encyclopedia Britannica and not sources originating from Balkan countries - especially such from Serbia, Macedonia and Romania. Those countries (especially the later two) have policy for changing and adopting Bulgarian history to match their own agenda. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 84.21.223.180 (talk) 13:34, 3 September 2008 (UTC)

Spinnaker gybe (talk) 03:58, 3 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Maybe we should have one discussion on bias. Unfortunately I did not read previous issues before I created my own bias issue requesting the article be flagged for bias in noticable text at the top of the article. Please see "How do I flag this article for bias".  My concerns were with vilifying words, statement of opinion as fact, omission of key information from the summary of causes of the war, relegation of important information to the links, errors in the relation between cause and effect, and making comparisons between Germany's, Italy's and Japan's unification in the German Unification link. Regards.

Article has too many opinions and latent biases. ex. The author suggests that Russians mobilized to protect the subjugation of slavs, when one could argue that Russia did so to create satellite states (which is obviously did in the future, i.e. USSR). Other examples concern odd biases against Germany in which German actions are explained with motives based only on conjecture. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 161.253.29.185 (talk) 23:27, 17 February 2009 (UTC)

Cause of War
Hey everyone, a possible cause of WWI could have been Germany, who had only been a country since the late 1800s, felt small compared to the massive empire of Britain and wanted to expand its borders by adding colonies. Also, Germany could have felt surrounded by massive armies and navies to the North (Britain), West (France) and East (Russia). Also germany may have felt that it had been left out of the colonizing of the non-europeen world and felt it had a right to "catch up". Introduction The war on the Western Front was so dreadful for French soldiers due to a number of reasons. First of all, there was new science and technology being developed and the generals looked to utilise these on the battlefield. Secondly, the soldiers everyday life in the trench would have been horrific. Also, in Flanders, where most of the fighting took place, there were major geographical features that the soldiers had to contend with. In this essay I will be discussing these issues and explaining why they would make the life of a soldier so bad, I additionally will be discussing major battles such as, the defence of Ypres Salient and the Battle of the Somme. Finally I will research a particular soldier and record information about him.

Science and technology Most of the countries in the First World War were very large industrial countries and the war began just a few years a after the industrial revolution. Due to these factors, the countries involved were booming with new sciences and technologies. These new sciences had dramatic consequences on the nature of the warfare and because the technology was very revolutionary, the Generals did not know the best way to utilise them.

One of the major new technologies was the machine gun, the first one used by the British was in the wars against the Zulu warriors, the gun that they used was called the Maxim gun. In one particular battle five Maxim guns killed 5,000 Zulu’s, this proved how devastating the machine guns could be and because of this all of the nations involved wished to exploit them. The Maxim gun had the firepower equivalent to 100 rifles and it needed six men to operate it. In comparison the main gun that the British used was the Vickers 303, this could fire 600 rounds per minute, had a range of 4,500 yards. This, statistically, was the best gun compared to the other nations: the German Machinegewher only fired 500 rounds per minute and it only had a range of 2, 400 yards. The French Hotchkiss only fired 550 rounds per minute and only had a range of 2,000 yards. As the British had experience with the Maxim gun and they supposedly had the best machine gun, you would think that they would be able to use the Vickers 303 very successfully. Despite this, they could not use them very successfully simply because the nature of the war was completely different. In the First World War the British were attacking but in the war against the Zulu’s they were defending. As the machine guns weighed a lot they were too heavy to be carried and therefore could not be used in attack. As I previously mentioned the new machine guns were very devastating, this was also apparent in the First World War. As the Germans had built their trenches knowing that they did not want to fall back or progress further they built them so that they were well fortified, this caused a problem for the British Generals. The Generals found that the only way that they could a attack the German front line was by sending the troops over the top, thus making themselves easy targets for the German machine guns. The generals only other option was to try and destroy the machine guns with artillery yet the German trenches were very well fortified so the shells did not produce the desired effect. On most occasions the machine guns would kill many men even whole regiments, for example the 1st Newfoundland Regiment were massacred by German machine gun fire and a war diary sates that they suffered most of their casualties in between their own front line and their own line of barbed wire. The new machine guns were truly horrific, they killed so many men because of the fact that the generals relied so much on the artillery, they believed that the artillery would destroy the machine guns yet this was not the case. The artillery did not destroy the machine guns and consequently the machine gunners had easy targets.

The artillery was another innovative weapon and it was used in a very excessive manner during the war, in Belgium there is still huge amounts of evidence that proves just how much the artillery was used. Whilst in Belgium you see enormous areas of land that are littered with large hilly mounds, these mounds give you a clear idea of the number of shells that were fired. The artillery was used in this undue amount due to the fact that the Generals could not think of any other tactics to use, their only tactic was to bombard the enemy for a certain period of time and then send the troops in. This tactic showed how single-minded the Generals were as they relied so heavily on the accuracy of the artillery. Another thing the Generals did in order to compensate for the poor accuracy of the artillery was to fire incredibly excessive amounts of shells, when in Belgium you also see how far away some of the craters are from the target. The artillery used in the First World War was highly inaccurate, they were also a new invention and consequently they were not perfect. They had a number of imperfections which included: the fact that they are incredibly inaccurate, they have a very large recoil, many of them take a very long time to assemble and they were very hard to transport. The artillery came under two categories, the cannon type; long-arc fire, head on impact and the Howitzers; high-arc fire, vertical impact. The main purpose of the artillery was to try and cause as much damage to the enemy as possible from as far away as possible. In order to achieve these goals the artillery had to be massive, in order to cause enough damage the shells had to be extremely large and they had to be packed with lots of explosives. Also, if the shells were large then the chamber would have to be very large as well, furthermore to make sure that the shells travelled far the artillery would have to have a huge propulsion rate. The British used the Rail Gun which was a Howitzer, its shells weighed 138 lbs, and its range was 5,800 yards. The French used two types of artillery, they used The Paris Gun, a type of cannon, its chamber was 30m long, it weighed 138 tons and it had a range of 75 miles. The French also used the Schneider Obusiers, its shells weighed 3,100lbs and it had a range of over ten miles. The Germans used the Big Bertha, its shells were 2,200lbs and it had a range of over nine miles. The Austrians used the Skoda 30.5cm, its shells weighed 846lbs and it had a range of 13,124 yards. The British Rail gun was the smallest type of artillery however it was the easiest to transport, they made it like this as the British objective was to force the Germans back so if they were to do that they would need manoeuvrable weapons. The main detail about artillery was the sheer number of shells that were fired from them and due to this enormous amount of shells fired many of the soldiers suffered ‘shell shock’. This was a physical and mental condition were a soldier’s brain would go into a state of shock and the soldier would eventually have a mental breakdown. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 92.6.244.174 (talk) 20:53, 28 March 2009 (UTC)


 * I think considering the number of people in the world with PhDs in this subject, we could all do without your quite poor A-level essay pasted in as a source. Thanks. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 90.240.22.92 (talk) 21:38, 15 April 2009 (UTC)

role of the US
It may be just me, but the following two quotes from the article seem contradictory to me:

Numerous other states joined these allies, most notably Italy in April 1915, and the United States in April 1917

The United States was never formally a member of the Allies but became a self-styled "Associated Power".

Although the first sentence only says that the US joined the allies, it led me to believe they became a member of the Allies, whereas later in the article this turned out not to be the case. Bolle Hond (talk) 11:58, 24 September 2008 (UTC)

Missing a song that should be listed on this page
In the section where you list songs/poems that refer to WWI, I couldn't help noticing that "1916" by Motorhead is missing. That just seems odd to me, considering that you do have a song by Iron Maiden listed. Anyone who hasn't heard "1916" should do so, and I mean ANYONE. It's hardly got any drums. It's almost all cello with some organ or some such instrument in the background. It's slow, somber, graceful, and it pays homage to pretty much everyone who has ever died in any war, though it refers to what is likely the Battle of Somme (the day not half over, and then thousand slain, and now there's nobody remembers our names, and that's how it is for a soldier). To the people administering this page, please consider adding "1916" in the list of songs.216.116.87.110 (talk) 22:12, 8 October 2008 (UTC)

That German Declaration (again)
The document shown in the article is not a declaration of war in the ordinary, international sense. (Note that no foreign country is mentioned). Rather, it is an internal German declaration of a Kriegszustand - in effect a nationwide state of siege (except in Bavaria, which had extensive privileges and had to declare its own state of siege). The chief significance of such a declaration was that it allowed for press censorship and various other restrictions on personal liberty. It is a purely internal legal instrument, assuming wartime powers for the government. Norvo (talk) 22:19, 16 October 2008 (UTC)

Princip and the Assasination of Archduke Franz Ferdinand
It should be stated that Gavrilo Princip was trained by the Black Hand: an underground terrorist group for the independence of all South Slav peoples. I believe that would be more correct than "Young Bosnia". Also, while a minute correction it would probably be best to state that Archduke Franz Ferdinand's wife, Sophia, was also assassinated.

Catalyst101 (talk) 16:21, 23 October 2008 (UTC)
 * All that is in the linked articles. No real value in having it here.  The Black Hand article is actually pretty good, but grossly lacking in citations.  Perhaps you'd like to pitch in there?LeadSongDog (talk) 17:12, 23 October 2008 (UTC)

I highly doubt a 21st century English Indie Rock band could be involved in the events leading up to World War I.- Moshe Constantine Hassan Al-Silverburg | Talk 01:49, 14 December 2008 (UTC)

I seriously hope that is a joke —Preceding unsigned comment added by 88.108.3.66 (talk) 15:10, 3 January 2009 (UTC)

Books
I’d added the following item to the Books – Fiction  section: 1920 Dips into the Near Future (1917) by John A. Hobson. It was torpedoed, apparently by someone called LeadSongDog, who claims that it’s “spam.”

It’s not spam. It’s anti-war literature from the war by a famous (or infamous) British economist, and went through at least two editions after first being published as a serial in a well-known magazine. If you remove this item you’ll have to remove many others of less distinguished pedigree.

One suggestion: make a new category:  Books - Against the War. It could include both books written during the war like the above and books critical of the war written afterwards. Onlinetexts (talk) 09:07, 30 October 2008 (UTC)
 * If you can provide proper referencing for the book, that might be different. As is, you've just got a link to the ariwatch.com website, the same website you plastered across several other articles too. We refer to that as spam LeadSongDog (talk) 06:04, 6 December 2008 (UTC)

It's not about a book, it's an important Italian film directed by Mario Monicelli that won the Venice film festival in 1959, The Great War (1959 film). Please, add it to the list. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 88.23.24.184 (talk) 16:56, 20 December 2008 (UTC)

Command of the Sea
I've moved the following from the article:
 * Paul Kennedy pointed out that both nations believed Alfred Thayer Mahan's thesis of command of the sea as vital to great nation status; experience with guerre de course would prove Mahan wrong.

...because although the links imply citation, in fact there's no such thing. This is essentially a POV piece of text: nothing proves that either nation had the stated belief, and nothing proves the opposite. --Rpeh•T•C•E• 22:50, 3 November 2008 (UTC)
 * That claim (with some rewording) goes back at least to the 9 March 2006 version of the article. Back then the article had few inline citations to the references.  In that version, the reference listed but not cited is Kennedy, Paul M. "The Rise of the Anglo-German Antagonism, 1860-1914" (1981) Implicit reference is made to Mahan, Alfred Thayer. "The Influence of Sea-power upon History" Boston: Little Brown, (1890).  The maintenance of naval supremacy is our whole foundation. Upon it stands not the empire only, not merely the commercial property of our people, not merely a fine place in the world's affairs; upon our naval supremacy stands our lives and the freedom we have guarded for nearly a thousand years. - Winston S. Churchill, first lord of the Admiralty. 10 November 1911 (quoted in Lambert, Nicholas A. "Sir John Fisher's Naval Revolution", p.15)

UK English
Taking up LeadSongDog's gauntlet, let me agree. It's a mainly European conflict, & I default to Britlish (is that a word? ;) ) for Eur matters; also, U.S. participation was small & late. (Don't howl, see it in perspective. ;D)  TREKphiler   hit me ♠  16:10, 6 November 2008 (UTC)


 * Seems perfectly reasonable to me. Does that mean we should move the article to First World War as well, since that is the more common name in "Britlish"? Parsecboy (talk) 16:27, 6 November 2008 (UTC)


 * I don't think there's a very strong argument for a page move. Chris Cunningham (not at work) - talk 20:00, 6 November 2008 (UTC)


 * Folks, you have misunderstood our guidelines. They do not say that topics with a strong tie to Europe should be written in British English; they say that topics with a strong tie to the England (or, in most interpretations, the U.K.) should be written in British English. This was in no way a British civil war. The first stable version of this article was in American English (though it's not crystal-clear), so I think the "first major contributor" rule should apply here. In any event, let's keep the banner down until more people chime in. Best, Samuel Webster (talk) 09:20, 26 December 2008 (UTC)


 * (ec)Which is the "first stable version" and the "first major contributor" for this article? I believe it predates the edit history which commenced December 2001, yet the article has been under more or less continual edit since that history has been kept. Should we refer to the version which first gained "A" class? Or use the more common-sense principle that most of the English speaking participants, authors, references and readers were from the then British Empire. Further, the variety of English used by the other European nationals (when they did use English) was almost always closer to BrE than AmE in that era. In either case, the tag is a proactive measure to identify the choice made to an editor who doesn't wish to go through hours of painstaking reverse analysis of the article in order to determine which engvar to use. One or other of the tags should be chosen.LeadSongDog (talk) 21:10, 26 December 2008 (UTC)


 * You raise a number of important points, some of which I strongly agree with. Let me respond with a number of points/theses of my own, which won't directly address all of your points, but which I think will help. Upshot: I think you've raised enough general points -- i.e., points that speak to much more than this particular article -- that this discussion should be moved elsewhere. More on that at the end.


 * 1) Wikipedia's spelling/dialectic guidelines don't work very well. I'd contend even that they're "broken". The primary problem is the contradiction between A) the guideline that says go with the first stable version (or the style used by the first major contributor), and B) the guideline that says that if dialect drift occurs over time (that is, if #A has been violated unnoticed), the dialect to which an article has drifted, if it's been there for a while, will override the dialect of the first stable version. This is sort of like saying: Northern Ireland belongs to (what later would become) the Republic of Ireland, but if enough Brits steal land and settle there, and stay there for long enough, and get away with it, Northern Ireland shall belong to the U.K. #A and #B contradict each other, and this contradiction is the primary cause of dialect wars here on Wikipedia.


 * 2) Slapping up a Union flag -- or an American flag -- will rub a lot of people the wrong way, depending on the article, and I'm starting to think we may want to reconsider the use of these dialectic templates (something that should be discussed on the template page). This is especially true when it can be seen as an attempt to "lock in" dialect drift; drift which, according to one part of Wikipedia's guidelines, never should have happened. (And, regardless, having a national flag be part of the template is a mistake. My Irish father might well say "why the hell is the bloody Union Jack lording over an article about World War I?" A silly reaction perhaps, but we should be sensitive to people's feelings about empires, past or present -- the American flag would cause similar reactions among many. But this is perhaps a minor point.)


 * 3a) I appreciate your desire to "set" the dialectic of this article, and agree it saves others much time. But it should be done correctly. My analysis shows that the article should be in American English, since 1) that's how it started out (and remained in American English for a quite a while), 2) this was discussed some time ago (though I can't find where just now), and no consensus was reached, and 3) the dialect hasn't drifted anywhere else yet (though it's mixed: Cromwell, if I may, has invaded, but not yet taken much territory). So if any dialect template should be put up, it should be American.


 * 3b) You mention a different principle, which you refer to as a common-sense principle. The use of common-sense is often discouraged on Wikipedia (half-joke; half-smiley face -- but only half!); and, in the case at hand, I think you're incorrect on a number of points. First: I see no evidence that "most of the English speaking participants, authors, references and readers were from the then British Empire"; more importantly, that "the variety of English used by the other European nationals was almost always closer to BrE than AmE in that era" is irrelevant, according to current Wikipedia guidelines. What matters (since this isn't about an English civil war, an English politician, an English city, etc.) is the dialect of the original contributors, and this was clearly mostly American. Moreover, the dialectic used by current contributors who are non-native speakers -- and remember, the English Wikipedia has many contributors who aren't native speakers of English -- varies widely. I'm German (though I have an Irish parent), and I use American English (because, as a linguist, I think it's more suited to international use, but that's a different story). Most Germans I know use American English (though it's only a slight majority). I now live in Scandinavia. Swedes born in the 1970s or later generally use American English (especially academics); Norwegians, regardless of age, generally use British English. And Eastern Europeans generally use American English. The French strongly prefer British English. It's really quite varied across Europe. And there were many non-Europeans involved in World War I, from whose countries there are many Wikipedia contributors.


 * So, in sum: why don't we try to solve the more general problem of the Wikipedia dialect mess first? In the meantime, let's not have a dialectic "flag" here, or put up the American English tmeplate -- if we really need one -- since it's the more sensible choice. Or, perhaps best: create a new dialectic template:,  , or the like.


 * Pardon any lack of clarity. A bit rushed. Must head out for a few hours. I'll try to check back later tonight (European time). Samuel Webster (talk) 19:32, 27 December 2008 (UTC)


 * Thank you for the clear and reasoned response, much of which I agree with. The guideline is broken in several ways and serves a purpose which is itself broken. The approach I contend WP should follow is "Dialects are a real part of a world-wide activity. WP does not pursue technical means of "l10n". Wikipedia is the encyclopedia that anyone can edit, not just accomplished linguists. Edits will use whatever mix of variations the collaborators happened to individually choose, even within sentences. Deal with it. Embrace the variety. Do not change one valid dialect for another." Unfortunately this is not the approach ENGVAR uses, so within the present approach we have to establish which variant to "lock in" independently for each article to prevent conflicting ENGVAR. The use of templates to communicate that selection between editors may not be the only way, but it certainly fits the method of collaboration used at WP. I'd support changes to those templates to remove or shrink the flags, which serve little if any purpose. I'd also support your suggestion of dialect-under-discussion templates provided they had a time limit parameter to eventually close the discussion.  I'd propose an additional we-chose-to-mix-dialects template which would serve well for articles like this one. Without seeking to forum shop, further on the general discussion should probably be pursued at Wikipedia_talk:Manual_of_Style which is the talk page for ENGVAR. The flags-in-templates discussion should go to the respective template talk pages. LeadSongDog (talk) 18:43, 30 December 2008 (UTC)


 * Interestingly enough WP:ENGVAR cites European Union institutions as an example of where British or Irish English is called for. If we have to pick a variety I would go for British English on the basis that of English-speaking nations, the War had by far the most profound impact on the UK. I also think there is a slight bias towards British English as things stand - "armour" predominates over "armor" and "defence" has a slight edge over "defense". I do, however, agree that the MOS's insistence on one kind of English or the other is flawed and certainly not something to worry about right now. The Land (talk) 19:08, 30 December 2008 (UTC)


 * I support the use of British English as WW1 is mainly a European affair and British English is the European variant of English (used by EU and Council of Europe ect), Irish and Maltese English is the same as British English when Written. WP:ENGVAR says it can be changed if there are strong national ties, I do believe that there are many strong national ties from the UK/ British Empire to this article compared to the US. For the reason I believe we should change the article to British English. Also I'm not trying to dig at Americans, but they didn't join the war until around 3/4 through, so it would seem silly to wright this article in American English when there involvement was much less significant compared to the UK's. Ijanderson (talk) 08:51, 7 March 2009 (UTC)
 * WWII was not "mainly a European affair". I think you meant to state WWI instead of WWII. Arguably, the WWII article should be changed to AmE but this one should remain BrE....this American's opinion. ⋙–Berean–Hunter—►  ((⊕)) 12:12, 7 March 2009 (UTC)

US Entry into the War
The article mentions Woodrow Wilson mourning the loss of the RMS Lusitania. What is not mentioned here, but is resourced in the article about the RMS Lusitania, was that it was delivering American armament shipments to Britain to fight in a war it had vowed not to enter -- and that it had done so with a civilian carrier, technically considered to a war crime, by all means. Jack Reed said it best, "Why is America entering the war? Profits." —Preceding unsigned comment added by AnarchistAssassin (talk • contribs) 13:31, 9 November 2008 (UTC)


 * Let me better extrapolate on this. The following sentence, from the article, is historically wrong: "When a German U-boat sank the British liner Lusitania in 1915, with 128 Americans aboard, U.S. President Woodrow Wilson vowed, 'America was too proud to fight' and demanded an end to attacks on passenger ships." This is the *CORRECT* version: "After committing war-crimes by using civilian vessels for transporting arms, Woodrow Wilson declared war and expanded Manifest Destiny into Europe."  Or, maybe we should just write EVERYTHING out of the history books, and deny that the Manifest Destiny attitude of Imperialists never existed, despite it being mentioned by our history books. Otherwise, Wikipedia is a trashy mag. "I read the world war 1 article, and it said that Germany started the war with America!" Yeap, factually incorrect, but thanks, loseeeeeeers!  —Preceding unsigned comment added by AnarchistAssassin (talk • contribs) 13:10, 21 November 2008 (UTC)

Under the Hague Conventions, nuetral countries were allowed to sell ammunition and weaponry to combatants. Germany sold weapons and ammunition to the Boers in 1900 and to the Russians in 1905 and yet Germany never felt that she was violating any nuetrality laws. The Germans did buy weapons and ammunition from America during WW1. They were transported to Germany via Submarine, the Duetchland. Unfortunately for Germany the super large Duetchland submarine was not economical and only two such shipments were made. Of course the British would take full advantage of their enormous fleet. This was allowed under the international law at the time.76.94.18.217 (talk) 09:07, 28 November 2008 (UTC)edwardlovette76.94.18.217 (talk) 09:07, 28 November 2008 (UTC)


 * Selling weaps never qualified as a war crime. Do you mean selling only to Britain was? And it wasn't Wilson or the U.S. which was "using civilian vessels for transporting arms", it was the British. Also, just to be clear, all the freighters used to deliver weapons & ammunition across the Atlantic to Britain, whoever produced them, were "civilian vessels", not owned or operated by HMG or RN. (Some of the troopers may've had RN crews, but that's not what Lusitania was.) They worked under RN orders, but with merchant crews, & that has led to accusations the Germans committed war crimes by sinking them. This is also untrue (& would be in WW2, also, tho the same claim was made, for the same reason), because a) they were armed & b) they were instructed to report sighting enemy submarines. Either of these 2 things, let alone both, made them de facto naval auxiliaries, not protected by the "cruiser rules" designed to protect unarmed merchantmen (like Lusitania) which didn't report sightings (unlike Lusitania?) & weren't carrying military equipment or troops (unlike Lusitania)....  TREKphiler   hit me ♠  20:09, 28 November 2008 (UTC)

Of course the ships were primarily if not entirely, civilian. It was 'civilian' private manufacturers who were producing AND shipping these weapons. They were not produced by the U.S. government nor shipped by the U.S. government nor shipped by the British government. It was simply a matter of profiteering, which is completely legal according to the Hague Conventions of 1899 and 1907. Germany could have and would have purchased a similar amount of weaponry from the U.S. except for the fact that the British Navy had naval supremacy. When WW1 started, the Germans had about a 9 month max supply of saltpeter and nitrates for making gunpowder and high explosives. They banked on a short 6 month campaign and almost ran out of high explosives. Read 'Hell's Cartel' by Jeffreys about the I.G. Farben cartel which was able luckily for the Germans to manufacture synthetic nitrates and synthetic ammonia for explosives production.76.94.18.217 (talk) 03:09, 12 December 2008 (UTC)edwardlovette76.94.18.217 (talk) 03:09, 12 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Also, given pro-Allied bias in U.S., there's small chance weaps'd be sold to Germany...  TREKphiler   hit me ♠  03:23, 12 December 2008 (UTC)

Hello Trekphiler. There was a large German-American population in America. There was also a large Irish-American population in America. It was because of this diversity of ethnicity in America that Wilson said Americans should 'be nuetral in thought as well as in action'. There are some wonderful books available for free at archive.org on WW1. These are rare books that you will never find in a library. Many of the books published in America during WW1 were pro-German and many were pro-Allies. I recommend you read 'Evidence in the Case' by Beck, 'J'accuse' by Greiling, The vandal of Europe by muehlon. Beck explains international law in detail because he was U.S. solicitor general of the u.S. I also recommend books by james Gerard. He was American ambassador to Germany from 1913 to 1917. Also keep in mind that if the U.S. really had a pro-allied bias, it would have immediately declared war on Germany for violating Belgium's neutrality because the U.S. as a signatory to the Hague Conventions of 1899 and 1907 had declared that 'treatys were inviolable'.76.94.18.217 (talk) 03:56, 12 December 2008 (UTC)edwardlovette76.94.18.217 (talk) 03:56, 12 December 2008 (UTC)
 * I don't dispute that. Recall, tho, the money was in Br/Fr banks, not Ger ones. It's why there was such a willingness to go EZ on Br/Fr on repayment postwar. Also, AFAIK, Ger had no (or less) ability to pay for weaps, & slim hope of delivery if bought from the U.S. (so little point). Even shipping nitrates was a problem, whence (as already mentioned) the Haber process. And "bias" doesn't mean "active support". Nor could Wilson, or Congress, dismiss public opinion (which Churchill & Japan both seemed to in WW2). More to point, tho, despite the (admittedly large) Ger immigrant community (recall Centennial? My grandparents were part of it, BTW.), the Brit/Anglo community was enormously larger. Not to mention British propaganda was better.  TREKphiler   hit me ♠  04:53, 12 December 2008 (UTC)

I would agree with you that financially the Germans had little chance of winning. First of all, then as now, London and NYC were the centers of finance. Secondly, by way of the British Navy, the Germans were cut off from virtually all trade with the rest of the world. This was legal under the rules of war at the time. The british had the strongest fleet in the world and took full advantage of it. The blockade was legal. Just as the U.S. blockaded the South during the Civil War and the British had blockaded Europe during the Napoleonic wars. The Germans financed WW1 primarily thru loans(anticipating that they would get large indemnities from the allies as they did from France in 1870) not taxes. The allies on the other hand, used a mixture of tax increases and loans. This is why Germany suffered hyper inflation in the 20's. It was not because of reparations. It was because they were over-leveraged(just like the U.S. is now). Germany never did pay very much of the reparation bill. I believe they paid about 15 or 20% of what they were supposed to pay. And much of what they did pay, was paid with American loans to them in the 20's. The evidence in the case from the beginning was that Germany had refused to let the matter of the Serbian Ultimatum be taken to arbitration. And also the years leading up to the war, Germany was the ONLY country in Europe to oppose efforts at disarmament and courts of arbitration during the Hague Conventions of 1899 and 1907. Read the German ambassador to America, von Bernstorff's 'My three years in America'. He states in the book that Americans were forever asking him why every country America negotiated with agreed to 'arbitration' for settling international disputes except for Germany.76.94.18.217 (talk) 05:53, 12 December 2008 (UTC)edwardlovette76.94.18.217 (talk) 05:53, 12 December 2008 (UTC)

Another Bias page
I have read a lot history of the years and this is just another example of bias entries and distorted facts. I have studied World War Two history for over 30 years and consider myself fairly knowledgeable in the historical content and events that occurred during that period. When reading this page, it seem obvious that the page is written in such a bias manner that leaves little or no room that, “Britain and its empire nations” were the only contributors. In fact when reading the three entries on the US involvement, it leaves the reader with the impression that the United States sent a few divisions in the closing months. In reading this and knowing a little about this War, I started to conduct a little research on the US involvement during WW1 and compared it to the entries that have been contributed on this subject. As most British bias pages, my findings were correct. Facts and figures have been distorted and or completely left out. In reviewing the entry on the Puerto Rico involvement, this is a false and untrue statement. The Jones act did not impose citizenship on the people of Puerto Rico. When the reader reads the entry, he comes away thinking the US imposed Citizenship so they could draft men from Puerto Rican. This is the furthest from the truth. The Jones Act was actual created well before WW1 and was actively discussed prior the conflict. Although it was not passed until 1917, it has no bearing on the subject matter, as 236,000 Puerto Rican men registered for the draft, just like every other man living in the US, citizen or not. Of which 18,000 served, mostly in the Panama Canal Zone (6000) and remaining amount in homeland defense. Of the Puerto Rican men that serve in Europe (combat) most if not all were currently living in the main land US and served with men that were not even Citizens. I suggest that this entry be rewritten or removed based on its relevance to the subject. In reviewing the American involvement and granted “late entry” into the War. You really need to look at the timing, 1917, BEF and French forces, basically a stalemate after 2 ¾ years of fighting on the western front. The British and French had already lost more men then Germans at that time, peace was made with Russia and Germany was back to a single front. The US enters April 1917 and starts sending troops and equipment. Over 4.3 million men are called and serve. This page does an injustice to the memory of the 116,000 that died there. There is no mention of the dough boys, which still remains a phase that most people can relate with. There was actually a time when the Americans were landing 10,000 troops a day in France. This is an incredible feet in 1917 (logistically)and yet there is no mention. There is also no mention of the 866,000,000 GBP that was loaned to Britain during WW1. Payments were made until 1934, but then stopped and remain unpaid to this day. Britain, on today’s exchange owes the US over 4.3 billion USD of unpaid debt, again no mention. The US provided funds, ammunition and food towards the British war effort. This, as in WW2 almost always goes unmentioned. As if it was the duty of the US to provide this support without question or repayment. In closing, this page lacks the current events and truths that can be found with a little research, as there are thousands of books and documents related to this period. I am not asking that this page debate the American involvement as a leading cause for the end of the war. I ask that you include facts and let the reader decide. By leaving out key points and statistics you move the reader to your way of ideas and beliefs. That is not what these pages are about, it is about history, the way it happended not the way you tell it. My Great Grand Father fought in the Highland Light Infantry(HLI-Flanders 1914)and was wounded, I am very proud of his service and dedication to my country. But I also I think, Americans are just as proudJacob805 (talk) 09:33, 11 November 2008 (UTC)

No, your just bias against the British. Edit: And on that, Wikipedia is almost always bias towards the US. Also, did you even read the section on "Entry of the United States"? it clearly states all what you have said. 88.109.119.161 (talk) 14:09, 11 November 2008 (UTC)


 * I am British, so how can I be against the British, what I am against is the mindset that you follow, that the British empire was this and that and we change history to reflect our views. That is wrong. Give credit where credit is due. If not for the amercians my german would be perfect and you are also incorrect, the page WW1 make no mention of what have writtenJacob805 (talk) 14:16, 11 November 2008 (UTC)


 * Alright, well show us your sources, and we can change the page to make it have a more world centric view rather then an british empire based one. Also being British means nothing when it comes to being anti-british or not. Otonabee (talk) 05:05, 27 December 2008 (UTC)

69.31.240.92 (talk) 03:50, 3 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Maybe we should have one discussion on bias. Unfortunately I did not read previous issues before I created my own bias issue requesting the article be flagged for bias in noticable text at the top of the article. Please see "How do I flag this article for bias".  My concerns were with vilifying words, statement of opinion as fact, omission of key information from the summary of causes of the war, relegation of important information to the links, errors in the relation between cause and effect, and making comparisons between Germany's, Italy's and Japan's unification in the German Unification link.  Regards.

“The US enters April 1917 and starts sending troops and equipment. Over 4.3 million men are called and serve. This page does an injustice to the memory of the 116,000 that died there. There is no mention of the dough boys, which still remains a phase that most people can relate with. There was actually a time when the Americans were landing 10,000 troops a day in France. This is an incredible feet in 1917 (logistically)and yet there is no mention… There is also no mention of loans…Payments were made until 1934, but then stopped. I am not asking that this page debate the American involvement as a leading cause for the end of the war.”

Actually the loans are mentioned and that the payments were stopped. You should read the WW1 article on Wiki, it gives some insight into it and I don’t think that there would be any objections to you adding in some more details. Over half of the 116,000 died from the flu and accidents etc, a large number of them in the USA. There were 252,624 Dominion and British Empire Colonists that died in WW1 of which there is no mention plus there were many more hundreds of thousands of UK deaths. Why not say something about the injustice to their memory? A total of over 9 million that served and yet no mention. The 4 million Americans that were called up are mentioned in this article (under two million made it to France) as well as “doughboy” and even a picture of one. However, there is no mention of the “Diggers” who contributed very much from start to final victory and which is still a name that most people can relate to. The Americans used mainly French and British equipment. The 10,000 US troops arriving in France everyday day is actually mentioned twice, the second time is inappropriate since it is already mentioned and is out of place with the topic of the paragraph.

You are right about the incredible logistical feat in 1917 of moving 10,000 troops a day not being mentioned. As a Brit you should really insist that this be included since it was British ships that made this possible. In addition during this time the British were also moving about 4,500 British troops to France every day for 5 months from the UK and other fronts.

The Americans are also the only ones mentioned, except for some French units, in the Allied attack on the Hindenburg line. There is no mention of four British Armies that also attacked, and broke the hindenburg line which prompted the Germans to ask for an immediate armitice, or the Fifth British or five French Armies or one Belgium Army that also triumphed over the enemy in the last months of the war.

Don’t worry about the Americans, they’re big boys and can look after themselves, it’s you not accounting for yourself that should concern you mate.

I’m biased so you should perhaps research the final stages of WW1 and reasons for victory for yourself. Just a couple points to help you on your way.

On October 6th 1918 Haig visited Foch who was reading a newspaper. Foch pointed to the paper and said “Here you have the immediate result of the British piercing the Hindenburg line. The enemy has asked for an armistice.”

In the third week of October the Allies were very concerned with the AEF and it’s lack of progress. So much so that some, such as Clemenceau, were appealing for Pershing’s removal. It took the AEF at the Argonne three weeks to finally take the objective that Pershing had assigned them to take on the first day. I would say that the problem was not with the troops but with the General.

I guess since the British and French were both making headway against the enemy some allies at the time found no reason that the Americans should also not be able to make significant advances. Perhaps their view was a bit unfair since the Americans were very unprepared and still inexperienced in 1918.

“If not for the amercians my german would be perfect”

You shouldn’t ask Americans to teach you German. They speak American.

Brocky44 (talk) 19:44, 18 January 2009 (UTC)

Brocky44, if you had half brain son, you would be lonely. Most if not all your comments are bias and unfounded. Most of what I mentioned in my talk page, that you felt free to copy, was not written in the article at the time I posted it, check the dates before you start flapping. Once again this is a perfect example of POV and poor and that. Brocky please be so kind to explain, that if the war was won, why loan, why 4.3 million men, why did 116,000 die. Please reference your statement on most died of accident and flu????? I would like see this...or is more Bias wind. This article should quote the over 3,000 British and equally French solders were charged with desertion, of which the British shot over 300. If you like to see the reference I can post it as well.

Here is you answer on US navy Power During WW1.... again you full of hot air.

ISBN: 978 0 8130 2987 0 741 + xix pages, photos, maps, index $100 Published by Florida University Press, 2007.

This is the first overviews and assessment in many years of America’s WWI era navy and its involvement in The Great War. Most readers of this review know much about the politics of American intervention in the 1914-1918 conflict, as well as many details of the formation and operations of the two-million strong American Expeditionary Forces commanded by General John J. Pershing. Much less is understood about the contributions of the US Navy under Admiral William S. Sims, Commander of US Naval Forces in Europe.

The US Navy entered World War One much better armed and prepared than the US Army. It had years of experience in deploying and operating far from home bases. In 1917, it was the third or forth most powerful naval force on earth and on the brink of becoming a first class naval power. The navy boasted 17 dreadnought and 23 pre-dreadnought battleships. The naval construction program of 1916 provided for construction of 156 new ships including 10 battleships, six battle cruisers and numerous lighter cruisers to be laid down by mid-1919. Naval war planning was also well advanced. Unfortunately this planning was for a war in the Western Atlantic and Caribbean, an area largely out of range of European navies already fully engaged in European waters.

The declaration of war overturned all this planning and sent the scurrying navy in new directions. Dreadnought and cruiser construction was delayed in favor of urgently needed destroyers and other light craft to combat the mounting German U-boat menace which threatened to cut indispensable supply line to North America. Within a month of the congressional declaration of war, Destroyer Flotilla Eight crossed the Atlantic to join the Royal Navy anti-submarine patrol force in Queensland (now Cobh), Ireland. In May, the Cruiser and Transport Force was formed to convoy American troops to France - a task it performed without loss of life for nearly a million Doughboys. Obsolescent battleships and cruisers were usefully employed in protecting trans-Atlantic supply and troop convoys. In June, the first naval aviation units reached France. By November 1918, the Navy had expanded from 80 thousand men and 12 thousand reservists to 560 thousand men and officers. Eventually, some 16 thousand sailors and 500 naval aircraft operated from bases in England, Ireland, France, Gibraltar, Corfu and Italy. In December 1917, five American dreadnoughts jointed the Grand Fleet at Scapa Flow. A second battleship division followed and was based at Bantry Bay in Ireland. By May 1918, the first of 121 American wooden 110-foot subchasers were operating in European waters. Two months later, the US Navy began laying the first of 56,610 mines in the North Sea anti-submarine barrage.

The USN experimented with many new weapons and concepts during WWI. Unfortunately, most new gadgets for detecting submerged submarines proved ineffective. The fleet train supply and maintenance concept developed by the navy prior to the war was implemented in part with the purchase and construction of several very capable tenders equipped with machine shops and foundries and able to make major repairs on combat vessels far from home bases. American dreadnaughts, unlike Royal Navy battleships, were also equipped with machine shops and foundries, making them remarkably self-sufficient in overseas waters.

In addition to detailing US naval operations, logistics, training, policy and personnel welfare, the author also provides insightful biographic information on the principal naval leaders and on command relationships within the US Navy and among the US, British French and Italian navies. Unlike Pershing (who was instructed to build an independent US fighting force), Admiral Sims as a matter of US policy put his men, ships and aircraft under command of the senior Entente officer in their operating areas. By drawing on British experience, the US Navy was able to make an early and effective contribution particularly in promoting and supporting effective convoy operations which eventually broke the back of the German submarine offensive. Other American contributions to the air and sea wars are less clear cut and more controversial, particularly as regards the massive 34 thousand square mile North Sea mine barrage. Nonetheless, US Navy command relationships with European navies, the British in particular, were cordial and productive despite policy disagreements revolving around British resistance to American calls for aggressive attacks on German home bases.

Brocky44 And you were saying.... Please do us all a favor, only state fact and truths... if you bias and don't know your facts, keep your POV to yourself and save us all time. Jacob805 (talk) 23:13, 4 February 2009 (UTC)

You do know that it’s not nice to make derogatory comments don’t you?

Nov. 5 a week before your Nov. 11 comment the WW1 article had a picture of a doughboy, mentioned 10,000 US troops arriving each day (twice), mentioned the loans and mentioned 4 million draftees. You can go back farther to determine the dates that these points were first introduced if you like, I think those points have been there for at least a couple years. No need to take offense. Everyone makes mistakes. I was just pointing out what the first poster that replied to you said was correct. I think this is a good case to show that this WW1 article is so large and rambling that someone in a hurry to get through it could easily overlook something.

If most or all my comments are unfounded please feel free to be specific and point them out. I didn’t copy anything from your talk page. I compiled some sentences out of your large paragraph above, what is wrong with that?

Now, you said “Brocky please be so kind to explain, that if the war was won, why loan, why 4.3 million men, why did 116,000 die.” I think you need to do a little research on WW1. The war was won Nov.11 1918 and the US declared war spring 1917. Neither the article or I or anyone else ever said otherwise. Where did you get the idea that the war was won before the loans or before the US entry? 53,402 KIA and 63,114 other deaths - flu, accidents etc. for a total of 116,516 US deaths in WW1. It is easily found info. I think your number of 3,000 charged desertions for British and equally French are low. If you would like to see that and executions in the article feel free to enter it. I don’t object, others might as this article is trying to reduce in length and this might already exist on another wiki article. If you do post it do you not think it relevant to post the number of US desertions? If you can’t find the number charged maybe the info that over 100,000 doughboys deserted during the Battle of the Argonne and an order was given to shoot any man who ran away will suffice. This kind of topic can get a bit sticky and cumbersome when the length of war of four years for the Allies versus four months for the Americans is considered. All men have a breaking point. On second thought, for the sake of the length of this WW1 article I think this topic should not be included here. Perhaps somewhere else.

Do you not think that the British should be mentioned in the Allied attack of the Hindenburg Line especially since they’re the ones who broke it? I am curious as to why you are anxious to include in the article unfavourable facts about the British but are not so inclined to push for inclusion of other British history the like that is already included for the Americans? Are you bias?

I didn’t ask any question on US Navy Power during WW1 and have researched this topic long ago so you are the one who wasted your time and alot of space for nothing. Why did you go off on this tangent anyway? There was no mention of the US Navy anywhere by anyone. BTW Your cut and paste said “In 1917, it (US) was the third or forth most powerful naval force on earth” Do you know who the most powerful on Earth was at that time? If you need any help with your facts just ask. Brocky44 (talk) 19:22, 10 March 2009 (UTC)

Tannenberg question
I'll agree with some of the other posts here that this article is a bit of a jumble. I'm mostly a commas and spelling guy though, so I'm not taking on a significant rewrite. I would like to point out what I think is an inaccuracy in the article, however. It says that Tannenberg "diverted German forces intended for the Western Front," but as I recollect (mainly from Barbara Tuchman), the armies left at Tannenberg to face the Russians were manifestly *not* intended for the Western Front. It was, in fact, part of the German plan to quickly defeat the Russians and *then* move those armies West. The article seems to imply that the Germans hadn't anticipated a Russian advance, which is certainly not true. Generations of high school term paper writers could be led astray! Think of the children!

Afraid I can't conjure up a citation at the moment, but I'm hoping that someone with more time will take a look at this in the future. —Preceding unsigned comment added by CrackWilding (talk • contribs) 01:51, 12 November 2008 (UTC)


 * I fear you have it backward. Schleiffen's plan always called for massive forces to rapidly smash the French (and if necessary the British) while weaker forces worked with the Austro-Hungarians to hold back the Russians, who needed (it was projected) six weeks to fully mobilize. In the end, for various reasons, Moltke did make the (perhaps momentous) decision to redeploy approximately ten divisions from west to east. The Mink Ermine Fox (talk) 19:09, 2 January 2009 (UTC)


 * Agreed with the above, please see:

When the Germans began their offensive they (as the Schlieffen Plan suggested) positioned a smaller force on the direct German-French border and sent the main bulk of their troops into Belgium. The Belgium fortresses were under strength and needed large regeneration. The problem was that many Belgian officers had been trained in France where an attacking war was preferred, so there was a large amount of field troops but not enough stationary in the fortresses. Also Belgium was worried about which direction it was to be attacked from, so its troops massed in the middle in readiness to head of an invasion from any side. Also Belgium had no navy, it was set to be an easy target for the Germans.

When the Germans entered Belgium they were not expecting to face any major resistance, however the Belgians were defending fortresses along the border, the main one of which was at Liège. However, the German Heavy Artillery (which was not fully known about by the Triple Entente until its usage) outgunned this fortress and on the 17th September 1914 it was defeated and the German army continued its march through Belgium and into France. Exaggerated reports of German atrocities began to reach Britain further increasing support to send troops to help the French (although there were mass executions and persecution, many accounts were embellishing the truth).

Russia had mobilised much faster than expected and because of this, Colonel Moltke had to divert 2 units away from the northern offensive in France and instead use them to repel a Russian offensive which culminated in the Battle of Tannenberg, this was a resounding victory for Germany, but it moved troops away from the Western Frontier and also began a war on both sides for Germany.

Another problem was that Moltke had moved more troops away from the Northern France frontier to the Germany-France border to try and initiate any opportunity for a surprise attack through the Lorraine region. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 92.11.11.23 (talk) 23:44, 13 February 2009 (UTC)

Andorra
In the introduction to this article it states that Andorra remained neutral during the war. However in this article it lists Andorra has being an Allied country which declared war but did not take part. Which is it? David (talk) 22:10, 12 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Good catch. The History of Andorra cites a September 25, 1958 NY Times announcement that Andorra was no longer at war, the delay due to the lack of an invitation to sign the Treaty of Versailles. I checked that newspaper's archives and found an article from January 17, 1919, quoting a French newspaper complaining about the exclusion of Andorra and San Marino from the peace talks even though they had declared war. On the basis of those two citations, and since the assertion of neutrality is unsourced, I'm going to remove it. ·:· Will Beback  ·:· 23:37, 12 November 2008 (UTC)

Paragraph on alliances
I've just read the paragraph early on the page, which describes the two alliances involved in the war:

The war was fought between two major alliances. The Entente Powers initially consisted of France, the United Kingdom, Russia, and their associated empires and dependencies. Numerous other states joined these allies, most notably Japan in August 1914, Italy in April 1915, and the United States in April 1917. The Central Powers, so named because of their central location on the European continent, initially consisted of Germany and Austria-Hungary and their associated empires. The Ottoman Empire joined the Central Powers in October 1914, followed a year later by Bulgaria.

Nothing to argue with there, and I wouldn't want to get into trying to list every warring nation. But I wonder if it is worth mentioning Serbia and Belgium in there as well, as it was their respective invasions that started the war. I don't know if both were formally part of the Entente though. Saying that, neither was the US - I believe that they were officially an "Associated Power" to avoid having to put their troops under French command.

I'm inclined to edit the paragraph as below, but I'm not sure on the wording. I like "precipitated" because the attack on Serbia triggered the Serbian-Russian alliance and in turn the Franco-Russian alliance, which brought in Germany. The attack on Belgium in turn brought in Great Britain. So it doesn't seem a stretch to say that those two invasions "preciptitated the war". Any comments, better ideas etc?

The war was fought between two major alliances. The Entente Powers initially consisted of France, the United Kingdom, Russia, and their associated empires and dependencies alongside Serbia and Belgium, whose invasions had precipitated the war. Numerous other states joined these allies, most notably Japan in August 1914, Italy in April 1915, and the United States in April 1917. The Central Powers, so named because of their central location on the European continent, initially consisted of Germany and Austria-Hungary and their associated empires. The Ottoman Empire joined the Central Powers in October 1914, followed a year later by Bulgaria.

Actually, replace "whose invasions" with "the invasions of which". Otherwise it reads like Belgium and Serbia invaded other people.

Brickie (talk) 13:29, 14 November 2008 (UTC)

Missing Front: Patagonia
Image text (at the very beginning of the page)

LOCATION:

Location: Europe, Africa and the Middle East (briefly in China and the Pacific Islands)

but should read

Europe, Africa and the Middle East (briefly in China, the Pacific Islands and Patagonia)

Don't forget the naval battles of Colonel and Falklands!
 * Since they weren't actually in Patagonia...no. (I consider it the land, not the ocean...) "South Atlantic", yes.  TREKphiler   hit me ♠  02:30, 14 December 2008 (UTC)

Toolong tag
Rather than reintroduce the tag, please see /Archive_6 and /Archive_5 then discuss. For a topic of this significance and complexity most encyclopediae have longer articles. The 166K shown for this article includes a very substantial reference list, which is not counted in the 100K threshold (which is outdated in any case). LeadSongDog (talk) 16:35, 24 November 2008 (UTC)


 * 100K is not "outdated" at all: even the guidelines at WP:LENGTH (which are staggeringly permissive) make it evident that this article is very long indeed. On my current system editing the full page is almost impossible, and this cannot be that uncommon. This was brought up yet again in /Archive 10, and handwaved away. None of the arguments used (that the article is "important", for instance) explain why this is fundamentally incompatible with the WP:SUMMARY format. I'm going to work on cutting this down (as best I can, what with the horrendous performance issues) but I don't expect that if it is re-tagged again that this will be summarily dismissed without a compelling argument. Chris Cunningham (not at work) - talk 10:44, 25 November 2008 (UTC)


 * Why would one wish to edit the entire page? Check your setting at "My Preferences"/"Editing"/"Enable section editing via [edit] links" so you can edit one section at a time, including the lead. The guideline at WP:LENGTH, in discussing articles of more than 400K, says "Avoid arbitrarily splitting mainspace articles unless there is a demonstrated technical problem loading the page on at least one major browser." Looking at Special:LongPages (which uses a crude measure including references, table of contents, etc) we see that there are 140 longer articles, some by a substantial margin. Checking the true length (less tables etc) this article is only 107K long. Still, I'm not fundamentally averse to splitting. It's just that for articles with complex referencing a split almost always loses references and so turns into an ugly mess. If you can do it in a way that avoids that happening, I'd love to know how.LeadSongDog (talk) 22:39, 5 December 2008 (UTC)


 * WP:Summary style should work fine here. No need to split up the article.Ferrylodge (talk) 04:07, 17 March 2009 (UTC)

Commander Rupinder Jazzar
The opening paragraph of this article contains some statements on Commander Rupinder Jazzar. These seem irrelevant and incoherent, and certainly don't belong in the opening paragraph.

JOZeldenrust (talk) 03:28, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * It was vandalism, thanks for letting us know. Regards, Woody (talk) 13:21, 4 December 2008 (UTC)

Side Notes
I think the song "Over there" should be mentioned, as well as the use of flamethrowers. You should also mention how the HMS Lusitania was transporting munitions and contraband. The Sussex Pledge should be mentioned too. The last things I'd add are war bonds, and meatless and wheatless nights. And the reason for the war was everyone's treaties tied them all together so two nations declared war on each other and dragged everyone else in one by one. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 96.253.105.177 (talk) 21:37, 5 December 2008 (UTC)

lack of information concerning Royal Flying Corps officers
According to information received from the British National Archives: "If members of the Royal Flying Corps did not see service overseas until 1916.... no regimental number (would) be recorded, (particularly) if the person was an officer.  The Air Ministry maintained these records and they have not been transferred to The National Archives." So how would a person get such information? —Preceding unsigned comment added by 70.66.72.64 (talk) 23:46, 7 December 2008 (UTC)

Harvard referencing
I've finally started this conversion to permit two-level referencing to work properly. Titles appearing in the Notes section need to move to the references section. Best done with two edit windows open. See the sequence of edits recently and then feel free to dig in. Edit pattern is, e.g., and  were done in two separate windows. Mostly copy from inline, paste to the other window in alpha sequence, edit the inline to make it Jones and edit the references to make it yadayadayad without pages parameter. If somebody wants to automate this, I suspect it would be useful other places.LeadSongDog (talk) 22:08, 8 December 2008 (UTC)


 * OK, the harvnb references are in place for all the books cited and they all have at least one of OCLC or ISBN provided. Other sources still need to be changed to harvnb, but it's progress. LeadSongDog (talk) 06:20, 15 January 2009 (UTC)

US war boilerplate
Currently at hte foot of this article there is a boilerplate for major conflicts that the US has taken part in. While it is true that they were in this war, I feel that this should be removed as leaving it in as the only national boilerplate on this page, if we were to leave it then similar boilerplates for the British, German, Austro-hungarian and French emipers should be placed at the end of this as well.Otonabee (talk) 18:51, 23 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Agreed. It's undue weight for U.S. involvement.  TREKphiler   hit me ♠  01:06, 24 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Removed. The Land (talk) 17:47, 28 December 2008 (UTC)

Civilian casualties
Why aren't any civilian casualties listed in the infobox? The way it is now gives the impression that no civilians died in the war, which is of course not true. 96T (talk) 22:49, 25 December 2008 (UTC)

Parsing this necessarily LARGE subject
This article has grown to a size which is unwieldy. Perhaps it may help to compare the way a similar article has been parsed, e.g., World War II ...?

Maybe something in the way that the WWII-article is organized organized can suggest a better model in a process of streamlining that overview of the First World War?

In like manner, it could be that some of the WWI-article sub-sections should be mirrored in an expanded overview of the Second World War? --Tenmei (talk) 18:59, 26 December 2008 (UTC)

First World War
 * 1 Causes
 * 1.1 Arms race
 * 1.2 Plans, distrust, and mobilization
 * 1.3 Militarism and autocracy
 * 1.4 Balance of power
 * 1.5 Economic imperialism
 * 1.6 Trade barriers
 * 1.7 Ethnic and political rivalries
 * 2 July crisis and declarations of war
 * 3 Chronology
 * 3.1 Opening hostilities
 * 3.1.1 Confusion among the Central Powers ‡
 * 3.1.2 African campaigns
 * 3.1.3 Serbian campaign
 * 3.1.4 German forces in Belgium and France
 * 3.1.5 Asia and the Pacific
 * 3.2 Early stages
 * 3.2.1 Trench warfare begins
 * 3.3 Naval war
 * 3.4 Southern theatres
 * 3.4.1 War in the Balkans
 * 3.4.2 Ottoman Empire
 * 3.4.3 Italian participation
 * 3.4.4 Fighting in India
 * 3.4.4.1 Indian independence movement
 * 3.5 Eastern Front
 * 3.5.1 Initial actions
 * 3.5.2 Ukrainian oppression
 * 3.5.3 Russian Revolution
 * 3.6 1917–1918
 * 3.6.1 Entry of the United States
 * 3.6.1.1 Isolationism
 * 3.6.1.2 Making the case
 * 3.6.1.3 U.S. declaration of war on Germany
 * 3.6.1.4 First active U.S. participation
 * 3.6.2 German Spring Offensive of 1918
 * 3.6.3 New states under war zone
 * 3.6.4 Allied victory: summer and autumn 1918
 * 3.6.5 Allied superiority and the stab-in-the-back legend, November 1918
 * 3.7 End of war
 * 4 Technology
 * 5 Trying to comprehend
 * 5.1 Soldiers' experiences
 * 5.1.1 Prisoners of war
 * 5.2 Military attachés and war correspondents
 * 5.3 Opposition to the war
 * 6 War crimes
 * 6.1 Genocide
 * 6.2 Rape of Belgium
 * 7 Aftermath
 * 7.1 Later conflicts
 * 7.2 Peace treaties
 * 7.3 New national identities
 * 7.4 Social trauma
 * 7.5 Macro- and micro-economic effects
 * 8 Cognate names for the war ‡
 * 9 See also
 * 9.1 Media
 * 9.2 Animated maps
 * 10 Notes
 * 11 References
 * 12 External links
 * _______________
 * ‡Bold italic emphasis added 29 December 2008 by Tenmei

Second World War
 * 1 Background
 * 2 Chronology
 * 3 Course of the war
 * 3.1 War in China
 * 3.2 War breaks out in Europe
 * 3.3 Axis advances
 * 3.4 The war becomes global
 * 3.5 The tide turns
 * 3.6 Allies gain momentum
 * 3.7 Allies close in
 * 3.8 Axis collapse, Allied victory
 * 4 Aftermath
 * 5 Impact of the war
 * 5.1 Casualties and war crimes
 * 5.2 Concentration camps and slave work
 * 5.3 Home fronts and production
 * 5.4 War time occupation
 * 5.5 Advances in technology and warfare
 * 6 Historical era
 * 7 See also
 * 8 References
 * 9 External links

I think you're right that the TOC for this article is bloated. There is quite a lot of material which is only marginally relevant to this article and should be split off into other articles. There are also quite a lot of sections which are far too short to warrant inclusion on their own. Some sections are simply laughably weak - look at the section on "Eastern Front". There some which are really imbalanced. For instance, we have four sections on why the USA joined the war but one sentence on why the UK did. This always tends to happen when there is a big article which isn't realyl being maintained very well. So I agree, and think the answer is a substantial rewrite. The Land (talk) 20:43, 26 December 2008 (UTC)
 * A mirror of this posting at Talk:World War II produced a helpful response from Nick-D -- see diff. --Tenmei (talk) 05:55, 27 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Looking a this in a broad overview, there are several sections that can be cut altogether (notably the four sections on why the USofA joined). Examining the headers, it would appear that these two articles are structured completely differently.  WWI examines the actions of each front separately, while the WWII article examines the larger conflict as a whole in chronological order.  It still covers all of the necessary information, but the formatting is much better.  May I suggest that we reformat this article along broader chronological lines rather than individual fronts analysis? Cam (Chat) 18:04, 27 December 2008 (UTC)
 * I think a front-by-front approach is equally viable. The Land (talk) 19:37, 27 December 2008 (UTC)
 * I think the chrono approach is easier to follow for the casual reader.  TREKphiler   hit me ♠  21:58, 27 December 2008 (UTC)
 * As a reader with no more than a casual knowledge of WWI, I would agree that a chronological approach is probably easier to follow. As an editer, I heartily support the hiving off of sections into daughter articles, with a brief summary and a pointer remaining here. BrainyBabe (talk) 00:09, 28 December 2008 (UTC)

Here's a possible structure for the entire article, based off of the format of H.P. Willmott's World War I chapter headers:
 * Background
 * Causes of War
 * Course of the War
 * The Outbreak of War: 1914
 * The War becomes Global: 1915
 * Western Front
 * Eastern Front
 * Other Fronts
 * African Front
 * Asian Front
 * The Attrition Battles: 1916
 * Western Front
 * Eastern Front
 * Mutiny and Revolution: 1917
 * Western Front
 * Eastern Front
 * The Tide Turns: 1918
 * Western Front
 * Eastern Front
 * Aftermath
 * Impact of the War
 * Casualties
 * Ending Treaties
 * National Identities
 * War Crimes
 * Advances in Technology and Warfare ‡
 * _______________
 * ‡Bold italic emphasis added 29 December 2008 by Tenmei

this would format the entire page along similar lines as the one for World War II, as well as better organize and condense the massive article. Cam (Chat) 04:58, 29 December 2008 (UTC)
 * In my view, the Wilmot format is superior a priori in comparison with the otherwise admirable organizing model of the article about World War II. As we now know, neither contemporary combatants nor scholars adequately appreciated the scale and consequences of "modern" warfare in 1914; and the subsequent step-by-step process through which everyone came to recognize that technology had changed the face of battle is conceptually significant.  The "learning curve" of the participants was significantly different in WWI as compared/contrasted with the "learning curve" in WWII.  For this reason, I would imagine that the narrative and analytical arc of an article about WWI will be necessarily different in a number of crucial respects?  In addition, Cam's proposal has merit because it arises from a context anticipated by WP:V.
 * H. P. Willmott, H.P. (2007). World War I. New York: Dorling Kindersley.  10-ISBN 0-756-62967-5; 13-ISBN 978-0-756-62967-0; OCLC 52541937


 * Perhaps consensus will prefer the parsing logic of another author; but the revealed strategy here implies an approach and a process I hadn't quite managed to grasp on my own. I see this as a helpful step forward; and in future, I would hope to figure out how to employ something similar to Cam's strategy in other contexts. --Tenmei (talk) 06:18, 29 December 2008 (UTC)
 * The Willmott approach, as described, looks sensible to me. I'd make only one change, moving "Advances" above "Impact", because it's more a part of the war (& the previous sections) than an aftereffect. TREKphiler   hit me ♠  22:28, 29 December 2008 (UTC)
 * I also concur that is a sensible way to go about it. I would make one change: I would put the "Treaties" section in the chronological account, i.e. add "1919-22: The Treaties" as the last chronological section. To Trekphiler's suggestion, I am not sure 'technology' should go above 'impact' - in fact I think there is a strong case that 'impact' should focus first on the long-term, political and cultural impacts rather than the military ones. However I would say that throughout the chronological account we must refer to both technological progress and to casualties, cultural impact etc where appropriate, as well as the 'aftermath' sections. The Land (talk) 23:02, 29 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Agree completely we should mention advances passim as they come into play. I only say "advances" before "impact" to keep more/less within what I see as the chrono coverage implied by the structure; putting the "advances" last, IMO, minimizes the ongoing nature of the changes, while the "impacts" are felt postwar, not during. Not to say some of the "impacts" (aviation, camo, aircraft carriers, machineguns, so on) wouldn't be felt postwar, too...& that might do with mention, also. A ref to sub war/ASW, certainly, given the Battle of the Atlantic... And, if people think it's merited, a mention of the argument WW1 & WW2 are just one long war, sep by an interregnum (something I think Van Der Vat raises in Atlantic Campaign).  TREKphiler  <sup style="color:#1034A6;"> hit me ♠  02:49, 30 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Indeed he does. Cam (Chat) 06:42, 30 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Van der Vat, Dan. 1988. The Atlantic Campaign: World War II's Great Struggle at Sea. New York: Harper & Row. 10-ISBN 0-060-15967-7; 13-ISBN 978-0-060-15967-2; OCLC 18164630


 * A crucial difference post-WWI is that the participants in other wars, not only WWII, were keenly aware that the very idea of a "world at war" was a fait accompli, an already achieved and documented reality. Prior to WWI, neither combatants nor scholars had envisioned the possibility of "world war" -- and indeed, the earliest cited references to "world war" are not found earlier than 1918.  In that context, the current Wikipedia article seems superior to Wilmott's organizational structure in at least two or three respects:
 * Confusion among the Central Powers ...?
 * ... And if Gen. Pershing were a Wikipedia contributor, don't you think that he would argue that any article about WWI needs to encompass the "Confusion amongst the Allied Powers" -- especially amongst the touchy personalities of the Allied commanders ...?
 * Cognate names for the war ...?


 * WP:POV? -- ASIDE: Perhaps it becomes timely and appropriate to explain that my personal point-of-view in analyzing this article is informed by an interest in lessons not learned from military analysis of the Russo-Japanese War (1904-1905) ...? From that perspective, the mild exchange of views between The Land and Trekphiler does miss a plausibly significant aspect of the First World War, especially during 1914-1915.
 * I would not hesitate to remove all the sctions you have just mentioned. Of course, the difficulties in running the war of all powers should be referred to (not least the fact that British politicians often seemed to be fighting a totally different war to British geerals). The Land (talk) 10:04, 30 December 2008 (UTC)


 * From today's hindsight perspective, I would want to argue for a re-assessment of Wilmott's Advances in Technology and Warfare. Rather than being part of the war's " Aftermath "-section, I would argue that this subject deserves to be re-positioned as a subset of the " Causes-of-War "-section. The General Staffs on each side in 1914-1915 misconstrued the potential effects of technological advances in warfare; and the results of those misjudgments were profound and tragic. Despite reports and analyses from military attachés observing both sides of the Russo-Japanese War, the General Staffs of the major powers mis-applied 19th-century strategic presumptions to a contest in which 20th-century technological advancements would ultimately prove decisive. These errors in judgment on all sides were significant factors in the decisions to go to war. No less important, these errors affected the progress of the stalemate war which unfolded in 1914-1915 ....
 * I think that runs the risk of being too clever after the event. We can't really say "The cause of World War I was that people back then were too stupid to know things that become obvious after you spend 100 years analysing thier experiences...." The Land (talk) 10:04, 30 December 2008 (UTC)


 * In other words, despite the admitted flaws in this article, it is important for us to acknowledge the very good work which went into crafting it. --Tenmei (talk) 07:17, 30 December 2008 (UTC)


 * (outdent) That structure looks good, but I think that a separate section on the war in Africa and Asia is needed (while the war in Asia was over in a few months, modern scholarship has shown that the fighting in Africa involved hundreds of thousands of Africans and lasted until the end of the war). Also, on which 'front' will the Ottoman Empire's wars be classified? - as the Turks were simultaneously fighting the British and Russians in Palestine and the Caucasus, they don't fit neatly into that structure. Nick-D (talk) 09:03, 30 December 2008 (UTC)
 * I would suggest that in each year we add additional headings for other relevant Fronts (plus, of course, naval battles) The Land (talk) 10:04, 30 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Given The Land's entirely correct remarks on the misjudgments, I'd be very willing to see "Advances" moved. I have a problem with it being in "Causes", tho, since I don't see the tech misjudgments as causal to the war itself, absent some evidence it led the generals govts to start something; enormously influential on its course & outcome, yes.   TREKphiler  <sup style="color:#1034A6;"> hit me ♠  01:52, 31 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Sounds good. I'll put those in under 1915, just to fit in thematically with the title of the section (The war becomes global). Cam (Chat) 18:34, 2 January 2009 (UTC)

Austria-Hungary wanted "revenge" ?
Hi. I was reading this article for causes of WW1 and I have a question. It states that Austria-Hungary wanted revenge on the Kingdom of Serbia as one cause of the war. I also looked at the link to the assassination of the Archduke and it states that the Kingdom of Serbia was at times a supporter of assassination against Austria-Hungary especially in the Balkans. I believe that the use of revenge is inappropriate. Today we would call the Kingdom of Serbia a sponsor of terrorism. Take for example Afghanistan and the Taliban. Was not it right to go after Bin Laden and who ever supported him. And what about today's policy of not negotiating with terrorists; I think today nations like that would simply be sacked to rid the world of terrorists. Since their government was put into place through assassinating their own monarch, how trustworthy could they be (the Kingdom of Serbia). Sounds like a hotbed of terrorism to me. If a British monarch was assassinated in the same circumstances, I would not call it revenge; I would call it justice. My question is, why the word "revenge". I know I am judging events with the morals of today, but I don't see why it is not appropriate to wage war on a nation that is intent on inflicting terrorism on and trying to destablise its neighbours.

I would also categorise the Kingdom of Serbia as being either unwilling or unable to curb the terrorists operating within their own borders, so in my mind they forfeited their sovereignty rights. I would say more but I will wait for other's comments.

Please pardon any spelling errors (iPod written) and no I have no ancestral to the Central Powers. Also pardon me if I break any wiki conventions (first wiki post) Respectfully Spinnaker gybe (talk) 08:45, 30 December 2008 (UTC)


 * This comes from the general need of a rewrite. As you can see, we're discussing such a rewrite above, and this article should smooth itself out within the next month or so. Cam (Chat) 00:03, 4 January 2009 (UTC)

How do I flag this article for bias?
Hi. I have read the beginning portions of both WW1 and WW2 articles and have found the WW1 posting to be loaded with bias due to wording, and burying important facts in the links. This is based on information provided within the article itself and the links provided. In contrast, the WW2 article for the most part sticks to the facts; we all know who the bad guys are in WW2 so the writers of the WW2 article don't have to convince anyone who the good guys are I suppose :-).

One has to realize that most people do not take the time to go into the links to get the facts they need to make up their own minds. For example, the first cause given for starting WW1 I German Unification. The first thing that pops to mind is a bunch of nationalist Nazis marching down the street. Using your own facts, it was French attempts to reduce the German Territories' influence that was the cause. How can you blame the German's for wanting to form their own nation. And besides,  it is none of France's business.

Also, you make it seem as if one guy was killed and Austria-Hungary was so trivial enough to seek "revenge". It's like saying the US was seeking revenge for 9/11. Given your own link's information, the Kingdom of Serbia was equivalent to a sponsor of terrorism committing numerous acts of terrorism; certain not a normal interaction between states now or then. Again, 9/11 comes to mind. Since Britain and France were allies of Serbia, does this make them supporters of terrorists at the time? Maybe you should put that as a cause in the main article.

Also in the German unification link the comparison's to Italy and Japan are nothing but an attempt to villify Germany in WW1 using later events, WW2.

This kind of article presenting opinion as fact is not acceptable posing as encyclopedia caliber material. Please add in noticable text at the top of the article that complaints have been made concerning bias about this article. I will pursue my complaints with the dispute mechanism otherwise. Spinnaker gybe (talk) 05:34, 2 January 2009 (UTC)


 * You add . ~ Richmond 96   t  •  c   05:36, 2 January 2009 (UTC)


 * ...and should expect to see the tag removed. You say that "the first cause given for starting WW1 I German Unification"; this is a commonly identified as one of the factors which ultimately caused the war - no 'blame' is necessarily associated with this given that it did greatly disrupt the European order, and there's also a consensus that French desire to seek revenge for their defeat in the War of 1870 played a large part in causing the war. Similarly, the results of Austria's decision to seek revenge against the Serbian Government is almost always identified as the factor which caused a general war to break out. Removing this material would introduce bias. Nick-D (talk) 07:11, 2 January 2009 (UTC)
 * ....And would decrease the factual accuracy (and therefore the quality) of the article as a whole. Cam (Chat) 18:03, 2 January 2009 (UTC)

May I say first that I do not intend to insult anyone with what I am about to say. Also I sometimes use humour in order to make a point so please do not take my jokes as belittling.

My first comment to Cam's claim of German Unification being commonly identified as the cause is this. Just because something is commonly identified does not make the assertion not biased or the truth. For example, the earth was at one point commonly identified as being flat. You can still maintain that the earth is flat if you wish, but I should have the right to contest that assertion with evidence of my own. If Galileo Galilei's did not contest this "commonly identified" notion, the people of the world may still be believing a lie. On wikipedia, if something is contested, the article should have a notification that it is being contested for what ever reason.

My second point is this. You may think German Unification was the cause, but I offer up another root cause; European Imperialism. Note that I am not making the connection that Britian was the lead agent of Imperialism and therefore Unification of the United Kingdom is the cause of WW1. To do so in my opinion would be wrong and a statement of opinion not a statement of fact. If there were not desires for European nations to satisfy their imperialism, we would not have had a conflict at all.

Also noting German Unification as a cause does assign blame if you omit important facts from your summarisation. Facts like Serbian Nationalism and their beyond-the-norm actions to obtain their goals.

When writing history, one should use language that does not have any value judgements associated with them. Words like "resentment" and "revenge" have negative connotatons, at least in my mind. I have no idea what faith you are, but as a Christian, these feeling are sins. Revenge implies that you get personal gratification or enjoyment from it. In some cases, revenge means you have attained unethically damages beyond what justice would have provided. The same can be said about resentment.

If you want to keep using words that are value judgements, I suggest the following: Please have as a cause the British's "opportunism" in using the crisis to diminish German influence and the Canadian's "stupidity" to have gone to war mindlessly as the Brits lackey. One should also mention that the war was made worse by US "greed" because they sold arms to both sides; today we call this war profiteering. To the credit of the States, they seemed to have realized their mistake and enacted the Neutrality Act.

Again, I ask for this article to have a warning for bias until it has been reworded.

Spinnaker gybe (talk) 00:07, 3 January 2009 (UTC)

Can anyone tell me the credentials of the writers of this article? Spinnaker gybe (talk) 04:01, 3 January 2009 (UTC)


 * I don't see any need to remove material on what are common explanations for the causes of World War I or replace it with nonsense. Anyone can edit Wikipedia, and you can tag the article as being biased by adding at the top of the article, but this tag will be removed as you seem to be trying to whitewash material you disagree with - please review About for information on Wikipedia's policies.  Nick-D (talk) 04:54, 3 January 2009 (UTC)


 * No, we can't tell you the credentials of the writer of this article, because that's the whole point of Wikipedia. You have to prove yourself here, not by what you've done outside of Wikipedia. Cam (Chat) 05:27, 3 January 2009 (UTC)


 * I have placed the usual POV template as per Spinnaker gybe's issues and request for "how to tag", and also placed a fact template on his main objection re German unification, which I agree with (i.e. that that's not the only/primary cause); that 1871 also marks the defeat of France and taht German unification was signed into being in conquered France is also conencted to the revanichist agenda mentioned separately, which it shouldn't be. There are too many sweeping, and sometimes rather banal, statements in the opening paragraphs and much is said that phrase-by-phrase needs citation tags. I admit to being a Taylorite and am generally hostile to most cliches and generlizations of hte kind found in popular rehashes of the war, and two main intertwining factors beginning in 1848 tend to outweigh completely the incidental events of 1871 which were part of a larger process that began in 1848 and earlier. To whit, the rise of nationalism and democratic ideals on the one side and the swirl and complexity of diplomatic intrigue and treaty/alliance-making on the other; the interaction of the two almost led to "total war" a good dozen times or more in the half-century leading up to 1914. globalize is also a consideration as, since "history is written by the victors" it does tend to be POV and also written from one perspective (in this case, that of the Entente). There are too many dispuating historians' views on the causes of teh war for any one collection of them to be stated as if fact; all should be stated as opinions, with the sources of those opinions cited/"facted". Opinions and analyses are not facts, they are theories, and most often they represent political agendas. Taylor notes that even in the weeks after the Austrian ultimatum to Serbia, and Russia's counter-mobilization, Britain was still deliberating which side to take; it was German sinkings in the North Atlantic that tipped their hand. Granted, Taylor's views are not widely held in the historiographical community, especially not by "national historians" but he's not alone in having differing views/analyses....another would be Solzhenitsyn, and of course Count Tolstoy, to name only "celebrity historians". Not sure Toynbee's opinions....to Spinnaker gybe I recommend you look fro Taylor's An Illustrated History of the Great War, which is short and more than a bit tragic in spots, with some interesting vignettes, yet even in brief form Taylor doesn't pull punches; he points to the diplomats and the generals as being at fault for precipitating the war, yet at the same time his other work - much longer, very dense and hard to read The Struggle for Mastery in Europe 1848-1918 - lays out the gory details of the diplomatic danse macabrs which produced the Franco-Prussian War and the Great Eastern Crisis and the Balkan Wars; I believe it was his analysis which first styled World War I as "the Third Balkan War", i.e. the sequel to teh First and Second Balkan Wars. Ultimately it was about the arms race - build guns and somebody will want to shoot them. I'l rest my own thoughts here, I've only provided them to demonstrate how different POVs can be from the "mainstream" views in the article at present...which, frankly, read like a high school textbook, and not that intersting a one either. I may yet place more fact templates (Spinnaker gybe - those are and they're requests for item-specific citations) and perform some more tweakings, though I don't have any texts here and given the volatile nature of this article would rather not make major edits, even semantic edits, without having citations to back them up. Well, except here on the talkpage, that is. Nationalism, imperialism, militarism/industrial politicking and diplomatic intrigues are what led to the war, and it cant' be saddled on Germany alone; Germany, as Taylor points out, thought it had agreed only to an armistice at the war's end; it was instead saddled with blame for all that had been done, and punished....and so we have the rationale (in Taylor's analysis) for what Germany became in the next decades after....for those interested Taylor's The Origins of the Second World War tend to put the blame for that war on Britain and France.....another factor in diplomatic terms, equal to and maybe more important than the affairs of the German and Austro-Hungarian Empires, was the Eastern Question, the jockeying for surgical dismantlign of hte Ottoman Empire....it all depends on which country you're looking at this war from, also; the Russian POV is very different from the British or French, for instance.....Skookum1 (talk) 05:38, 3 January 2009 (UTC)


 * And re the credentials of the editors here, that's not the issue so much as the credentials of the sources used: see WP:RS and WP:Weight.Skookum1 (talk) 05:38, 3 January 2009 (UTC)

Thanks Skookum1. I'll get the book; it seems like it will be an interesting read.

BTW. I am born and bred in the Commonwealth. I used the "stupidity" label on myself; I am a Canadian. In fact, before I read this article, I was expecting to have my bias against the WW1 Germans confirmed, but after reading the facts presented, even I can see what is going on here. Cam's attitude about removing the tag without having provided sufficient evidence is also of concern. Are people allowed to just highjack wikipedia or something? I sure hope Cam is not on the dispute board because his neutrality is seriously in question.

Here are my concerns. First Wikipedia should tag every history article with the neutrality warning. I dislike for example human rights abusers. Can some neo-nazi make the claim that I am biased? You are darn right he can! And he would be right!

Secondly, I am afraid that this article would not pass an academic review at any self respecting history faculty. That is why I asked about credentials. I don't have a degree in history myself, but I am quite sure there are some rules to insure impartiality. Wiki says it is an encyclopedia and I am quite sure encyclopedia writers have rules as well. If you do not wish to follow these rules, maybe the writers should write themselves a book instead. My specific objections are with the use of vilifying words, statement of opinion as fact, omission of key information from the summary of causes of the war, relegation of important information to the links, errors in the relation between cause and effect, and making comparisons between Germany's, Italy's and Japan's unification in the German Unification link.

My objection to the comparision between the WW2 Axis powers is because we should not be judging Germany in WW1 using what happened in the future in WW2. And besides, you could just as easily add the United States into that comparison as well; they fought wars and used diplomacy to form their nation. It is like me using the fact that the Serbians committed genocide after WW1 to prove that they were bad people at the start of WW1. This is a blatant attempt at vilification as well as an error in cause and effect.

Spinnaker gybe (talk) 19:11, 3 January 2009 (UTC)


 * With regards to the "commonly-identified causes aren't necessarily true", you are correct that this is often the case. However, the job of an encyclopedia is not to evaluate these claims&mdash;simply to point out what they are.  If you want to evaluate the causes of World War I, then write a book about it (as many already have).  Our job is to simply serve as a method of conveying what are commonly identified as the causes&mdash;not evaluate them.


 * That said, you are correct about the ensuring of impartiality. In fact, this issue has been encountered in other MILHIST articles (notably World War II, pop over there and input on the discussions if you get a chance).  At the same time, however, to ask for the credentials of those who wrote this article is 1) impossible, unless you want to track down hundreds upon hundreds of editors from across the globe and 2) violates the whole theory of wikipedia, in that ANYONE can edit it.  Quite frankly, I don't care whether it would pass "an academic review at any self-respecting history faculty"&mdash;that's not the point of the 'Pedia.


 * Again, the issue with noting every single little cause of WWI is that it takes a huge amount of space - as I've said, entire books have been devoted to the subject and still not come close to accurately and comprehensively summarizing the causes. We can't point out every single cause and keep this article to a reasonable length at the same time (again, see several threads up for the discussion on reorganizing the article to condense it).  To simply put "German unification and the resulting after-effects" would  suffice for this article.  A separate article on German unification could go into much more extensive detail about its relation to WWI.
 * And lastly, how is my neutrality in question? Cam (Chat) 23:59, 3 January 2009 (UTC)

Cam2 quote - "::...and should expect to see the tag removed." Nick-D quote - "I don't see any need to remove material on what are common explanations for the causes of World War I or replace it with nonsense. Anyone can edit Wikipedia, and you can tag the article as being biased by adding at the top of the article, but this tag will be removed as you seem to be trying to whitewash material you disagree with - please review About for information on Wikipedia's policies.  Nick-D (talk) 04:54, 3 January 2009 (UTC)

I quote Cam's and Nick-D's entries above. It is obvious you have made up your mind as to the validity of the bias claim even though legitimate objections have been made concerning language. Maybe that is why history should be written by people sensitive to these "meaning" of language issues. Note that your collective second comment refers to my objections as "nonsense" and "whitewash". Hardly impartial given that you provide no evidence of your own that it is nonsense or whitewash. Ooops, I forgot about the "commonly identified" argument which is a common misconception amongst even myself sometimes. Besides a point by point cross-examination is the appropriate action, not a "It's not going to do any good" response. "We are the masters of this page; RESISTANCE IS FUTILE" (That's a joke if you don't get it :-)). Obviously you do not believe in judicial procedure or you are unable to have "sight through other's eyes".  Note, I am just trying to change your approach to critcism.  I am a devil's advocate by nature and I am sorry if anyone is offended by my previous arguments.

If you want, I will go and change every word, sentence, and paragraph I feel is inappropriate, but I would rather reach a concensus. I don't want to get into any wiki word changing war with you and besides I think the page is protected :-). Heck, every ridiculous war for no good reason, should be avoided. I do believe what you are suggesting (Me getting into a wiki word changing war) is unproductive and infantile.  Have we avoided WW3 or are we still on the road to doomsday?  Another joke!

I suggest the main page sticks to what we can agree are the facts and leave these judgements or different points of view to the links. I still think the Neutrality tags, worded differently however, should remain regardless of the outcome.

69.31.240.92 (talk) 02:03, 4 January 2009 (UTC)

Sorry, I wrote the above entry.

Spinnaker gybe (talk) 02:04, 4 January 2009 (UTC)


 * Well, in reference to your one set of comments:
 * ''My specific objections are with the use of vilifying words, statement of opinion as fact, omission of key information from the summary of causes of the war, relegation of important information to the links, errors in the relation between cause and effect, and making comparisons between Germany's, Italy's and Japan's unification in the German Unification link.

I've only scanned the article briefly but I see all kinds of instances of WP:OR and WP:Synthesis in just a casual scan of it; over-simplification and pat judgements, which abound, certainly qualify. The notion that Italian unification led to the war, or Japanese unification (! - which happened a ''long' time before), if they're in there, are twaddle and also more than a bit propagandistic/jingoistic, as is the claim that German unification led to the war. that's like saying US unification led to the attack on Pearl Harbour, because if it hadn't happened Japan wouldn't have had something to attack in that direction. All empires were expanding, growing, squeezing up against each other (except the Ottoman, which was desperately trying to keep itself together and until only a few years before the war had believed itself to ahve been backed by Britain and France, only taking up Germany on its willingness to support because France and Britain were prepared to sell Constantinople out to the Russians - which, in fact, was one of the Russian war-aims, as Taylor points out...btw two other good books to read are Constantinople:City of the World's Desire by Philip Nansel and A Fez of the Heart, by I can't remember who). As for your observations of errors in the relation of cause and effect, and other statements of inerpretation-as-fact, you can add to statements you want to see source for, and in the edit summary you can state your reasons why, or objections to it, e.g. OR or synthesis or POV. As for the POV tempalte, Cam can't jsut remove it; now that I've placed it it's supposed to remain until there's consensus that the POV issues have been resolved....and I totally diesagree with the comment that I don't care whether it would pass "an academic review at any self-respecting history faculty"&mdash;that's not the point of the 'Pedia. Well, yes it is, actually, but the point is to arrive at a better history than availble in academia by integrating all the varoius sources of facts, and correlating/comparing different opinions, so as to provide amore balanced version of history than you'll find in most academic courses (which, depending on the country you're in, adn the ideological/ethnic biases of the professor/textbooks, is almost invariably POV and usually more lie than truth). Wikipedia gets dissed because of trivialism and shallowness and "bad history"; conscientious editors shouldn't make excuses for it by saying "that's not the point of the 'pedia". What is, then? This - Wikipedia - is winding up as the "source document", the common public history of the digital era; it's the place that all other sources are integrating through; trivialism and pandering to comic-book oversimplification do not serve its ultimate ends. WP:Be Bold, spinnaker gybe, if you don't like wording, change it, if you have a better cite, use it, if you find a conflicting opinion, include it. And, by the way, I'm Canadian too...of the tow Taylor books, if you've got the stomach, I recommend teh longer one (Struggle for Mastery in Europe) and for background to the dance of the Great Powers in general, find Colin McEvedy's Penguin Atlas of Modern History (also in Pelican).Skookum1 (talk) 03:16, 4 January 2009 (UTC)


 * I'm not saying it shouldn't be there, it just shouldn't be there for the reasons Spinnaker identified. Just because it mentions German unification does not mean it's biased.  Your reasons for putting it up are more concrete.  As for the Taylor book, I actually just got that one for Christmas, so I'll definitely take a look at it - thanks for the recommendation!. Cam (Chat) 07:22, 4 January 2009 (UTC)

I ask for some advice from all. How long should I wait before I write a neutrality statement which I suggested for all articles of history? A week if no response? I haven't noticed any objections to the idea so can I go ahead and write up a draft? I am an engineer and cannot claim to any mastery of language. It would contain ideas about bias intentional or unintentional, etc. I assume that if there is not a challenge, everyone is in agreement that the warning is warranted.

Spinnaker gybe (talk) 05:37, 5 January 2009 (UTC)


 * All Wikipedia articles are covered by the general disclaimer, the Content disclaimer (which includes a statement that "Wikipedia is a work in progress, and many articles contain errors, bias, duplication, or simply need tender loving care. We encourage readers to help us fix these problems. The great majority of articles are written primarily or solely by individuals who are not subject matter experts, and may lack academic or professional credentials in the area.") and general legal, medical and risk disclaimers. Efforts to introduce more specialised disclaimers have, to the best of my knowledge, not been successful and appear to be currently ruled out by the policy No disclaimers in articles. Individual article talk pages such as this are not an appropriate forum to discuss Wikipedia-wide topics such as expanding the number of disclaimers - you should raise this at: Village pump (policy) or Village pump (proposals) in the first instance. Introducing a new disclaimer will require consensus from Wikipedia's management and editors and this is a massive task which you should not take on lightly. Nick-D (talk) 07:01, 5 January 2009 (UTC)


 * I am going to take some time to read over and form an opinion on the suitability of the Wikipedia disclaimers. However I pose these questions, if the disclaimer covers bias, why bother allowing people to add the neutrality tag at all.  I feel the wiki editors are afraid that if the neutrality tag were not available we would have a wiki-tabloid instead of a wiki-pedia, but I am not saying that is the case at this moment since I haven't formed an opinion on the disclaimers.


 * Also, what stops us from adding additional warnings anyway. I would seriously doubt that the wiki powers-that-be would interfere with a concensus to add the warning, regardless of their own disclaimer.  A writer can admit that there may be unintentional bias or intentional bias (hopefully for good reason: see my bias against human rights abusers) in their work.  I may be wrong, but now is the time to discuss this point.  After all, would we and should we want to be known as people with "fairness of character" even though people might never know our identities; of course we would and should.

Spinnaker gybe (talk) 03:50, 6 January 2009 (UTC)


 * The disclaimer simply says that some bias will (inevitably) occur within the Wikipedia system. The Neutrality tag is out there for blatant POV pushing and editors with an agenda - of which there are quite a few.  Take, for example, Sino-Indian War.  It reeks of bias - primarily with painting India or China as the "aggressor" and the other as a peace-loving nation that was mercilessly provoked by a barbaric psychopath of a neighbor (ironically, the article floats between one or the other, so it really does look like the article writer has a condition similar to that of Smeagol)  Por exemplar, look at the "world opinion" section in that specific article.  Now THAT is a bias.  That's why the neutrality tag exists.  the disclaimer doesn't deal with that side of bias and NPOV. Cam (Chat) 04:12, 6 January 2009 (UTC)
 * The POV tag isn't just for blatant/deliberate bias, it's also there for unwitting or unconscious or ill-informed POV slants/perspectives, or the absence of both/all points of view on a subject, whatever it may be; this can be subtle, it can be soft-pedalled even when not obvious to the casual reader; but for those who know WWI fairly well, adn the diplomatic build-up to it, this artiicle does have POV problems. That someone can even begin to point them out, as spinnaker gybe has done, is indicative that it's not as NPOV as you might think it is; "watch, and learn" as Meryl Streep's charactder says in Dangerous Liaisons.  And of those two Taylor books I mentioned, if it's Struggle for Mastery you got, your views on European history will never be quite teh same....Skookum1 (talk) 04:19, 6 January 2009 (UTC)


 * I am also forming an opinion on the basis of the neutrality tag as well. Please give me a few days to do so.  I am also trying to get copies of the recommended Taylor books.  Anyone else have suggestions with different POV? 69.31.240.92 (talk) 01:30, 8 January 2009 (UTC)


 * Sorry I keep forgetting to log in. I wrote the above entry. Spinnaker gybe (talk) 01:32, 8 January 2009

Just to provide references to by original bias complaints, here are the WP rules which back them up.

Wikipedia:RS "Statements of opinion Some sources may be considered reliable for statements as to their author's opinion, but not for statements of fact. A prime example of this are Op-ed collumns that are published in mainstream newspapers. When discussing what is said in such sources, it is important to directly attribute the material to its author, and to do so in the main text of the Wikipedia article so readers know that we are discussing someone's opinion."

Wikipedia:UNDUE "Undue weight applies to more than just viewpoints. Just as giving undue weight to a viewpoint is not neutral, so is giving undue weight to other verifiable and sourced statements. An article should not give undue weight to any aspects of the subject, but should strive to treat each aspect with a weight appropriate to its significance to the subject. Note that undue weight can be given in several ways, including, but not limited to, depth of detail, quantity of text, prominence of placement, and juxtaposition of statements."

Wikipedia:Neutral Point Of View "A careful selection of reliable sources is also critical for producing articles with a neutral point of view. When discussing the facts on which a point of view is based, it is important to also include the facts on which competing opinions are based since this helps a reader evaluate the credibility of the competing viewpoints. This should be done without implying that any one of the opinions is correct. It is also important to make it clear who holds these opinions. It is often best to cite a prominent representative of the view."

Wikipedia:Neutral Point Of View "There are many ways that an article can fail to adhere to the NPOV policy. Some examples are: The article can simply be biased, expressing viewpoints as facts (see Wikipedia:POV) While each fact mentioned in the article might be presented fairly, the very selection (and omission) of facts can make an article biased. Some viewpoints, although not presented as facts, can be given undue attention and space compared to others (see Wikipedia:NPOV tutorial#Space and balance). The text and manner of writing can insinuate that one viewpoint is more correct than another. The subject or title of the article can imply a particular point of view. A type of analysis of facts that can lead to the article suggesting a particular point of view's accuracy over other equally valid analytic perspectives. The author's own viewpoint is mentioned or obvious. Alternate viewpoints are compared in persuasive terms."

If you need me to specifically point out the article where these rules are broken, please tell me and I will do so.

I will give you some time to modify the article. Take this as me extending an olive branch to you. How much time do you need? Spinnaker gybe (talk) 20:15, 13 January 2009 (UTC)

I just wanted to say I believe that Skookum1 is right about bias. I provide the WP statement about bias below:

WP:Neutral Point Of View Bias Neutrality requires views to be represented without bias. All editors and all sources have biases (in other words, all editors and all sources have a point of view) — what matters is how we combine them to create a neutral article. '''One can think of unbiased writing as the fair, analytical description of all relevant sides of a debate, including the mutual perspectives and the published evidence. When editorial bias toward one particular point of view can be detected, the article needs to be fixed'''.[1]

No mention of "blatant" anywhere in this statement, Cam. If you want it changed, I suggest you propose an amendment to the wiki board.

BTW. How the heck do you create a link to the WP Standards, please?Spinnaker gybe (talk) 01:46, 14 January 2009 (UTC)


 * Link it! In that case WP:Standards redirects to WP:Wikipedia:Centralized discussion.  Ditto WP:Neutral Point of View and its shortcut WP:NPOV.  Most if not all "WP" pages have shortcuts and generally speaking adding WP: to the start of a key phrase naming a wiki principle and linking it will go somewhere. e.g. WP:RS is the same as [WP:Reliable sources]], WP:V}] is the short cut to "verifiability and so on....And I agree with our comment about "blatant" - that's a subjective term, based on one's context/POV, which is why it's not in teh guidelines you quoted....bear in mind also taht in historiography and in anything, teh arrangement and amount of any one group of facts, neutrally-told, can still have a POV impact depending on how they are arranged and how much there is of one story vs another; even if everything is fully said, it's the order and logic by which they are arranged that's also a comment in POV-ness.  Something neutral sounding quite often ISN'T.  Choices of syntax or idiom have a big bearing on semantics, which isn't something to be as lightly dismissed as people often do.  Consider the quagmire on [[Talk:Tibet but even in othrewise abstract topics this is all the same, and often worse than in more subjective/poiltical topics.   Thucydides explored thse problems in the intro to his History, and in some ways he was one of the only honest historian of the lot in 'fessing up to the inevitable bias that even he, as a medical doctor, would have preferred to avoid....(he was trying to diagnose the caues sof war as if it were a disease...but admitted to his own anti-Athenian bias and then set out on his analysis; trying to be fair but knowing he could not possibly be un-judgmental...)Skookum1 (talk) 02:18, 14 January 2009 (UTC)


 * I've asked some bilingual editors from the linked de and tr articles to come help us with countering systemic bias. If they're willing to pitch in it may help us spot problems.LeadSongDog (talk) 06:04, 14 January 2009 (UTC)


 * Sorry I was busy. I also agree with the initiative above.Spinnaker gybe (talk) 04:55, 22 January 2009 (UTC)

An Outside take
As someone who's specialty is other wars, here is my first take on this article, with more to come.
 * 1) In college it was said that the unification of Germany definitely led the way for WWI, but due in part to the premature removal of Bismarck and the convoluted Triple Alliance and Triple Entente.  A saying that German'y unification was a cause needs to have qualifiers.
 * 2) This article is 164 kilobytes, too large for a good article but this is one of those topics where it's hard to say what to exclude. This is an article where perhaps a consolidated effort by MILHIST (ala T&A) to improve the article is probably needed.  This si a main article for any encyclopedia.
 * 3) The References are a mess. There's a need for more ISBNs, and maybe a way to consolidate references so that fewer cited books are needed?-- King Bedford I  <sup style="color:green;">Seek his grace  04:32, 4 January 2009 (UTC)

May I move your entry to the "How do I flag this article for bias?" Section? I would not want anyone's coments to get lost.

I do have a response to this but I wish for others not to miss it.

Spinnaker gybe (talk) 19:50, 4 January 2009 (UTC)


 * not necessary, spinnaker gybe; they'll see it; new sections spawn all the time, often as tangents off previous sections; just respond here, it makes it easier to find the newer discussions/tangents actually, instead of huge sections (he sez, being infamous for long posts....).Skookum1 (talk) 23:24, 4 January 2009 (UTC)

I ask for some advice from all. How long should I wait before I write a neutrality statement which I suggested for all articles of history? A week if no response? I haven't noticed any objections to the idea so can I go ahead and write up a draft? I am an engineer and cannot claim to any mastery of language. It would contain ideas about bias intentional or unintentional, etc.

Spinnaker gybe 69.31.240.92 (talk) 03:40, 5 January 2009 (UTC)

My problem with a lot of this information in this article is that it is probably taken from a source which itself is tainted. For example, I could probably find a German text used in college which has stated some outlandish claim and enter it as fact in this article. Entering and referencing an opinion is no fact at all. If we are going to write history, what is it we are trying to achieve. In the final analysis, what is important is trying to make each reader make up their own mind what is right or wrong based on the facts. In university courses, good profs try to make you think out of the box and not be constrained by and even question out right what people present to you. I think good and entertaining history is one where the reader is challenged to place themselves in all parties shoes and decide for themselves what were the circumstances, what were the courses of action available, what were the consequences of each option, and what did each party choose and would I have done the same or not and ultimately was it the right choice. In WW1 I see ample opportunities on both sides to have averted this disaster, some more than others but this is only my opinion. However, my point is that we should not be trying to prematurely influence people’s minds with opinion stated as fact, words which have negative or for that matter positive connotations, and references or implications based on future events. In these history articles, facts should clearly labelled FACTS and opinions clearly labelled as OPINIONS.

By the way the following statement: “In college it was said that the unification of Germany definitely led the way for WWI” Is clearly OPINION. Why? First, many different people can come up with many different arguments refuting this statement (see my European Imperialism comment which is clearly OPINION as well). Secondly, it is unfair to state as a cause what any group of people have every right to do by themselves or collectively. The German people have every right to unify if they so desire and these aspirations should not be used as an excuse or a cause of war. It is like saying my right to cross the street at a crosswalk in safety is the cause of me getting hit by a car. ;-) How would you like it if your legitimate actions were blamed for cause WW3 or WikiWordWar1(WWW1) as a matter of fact. Another joke!

As for getting MILHIST involved, I whole-heartedly agree as long as they have appropriate rules for writing and reviewing history.

Spinnaker gybe (talk) 05:34, 5 January 2009 (UTC)


 * I have recently been trying to develop a structure to improve Wikipedia's WWI coverage here: WikiProject Military history/World War I task force/Centenary drive. I wholeheartedly agree this article deserves a lot better.
 * Re the way we work. IMV (informed by quite a lot of experience of military history articles) - We are not really trying to 'do' history of our own. If a situation is complex we should present the facts, and the major opinions in roughly the proportion they are held by 'serious' historians. I think so far I think I'm agreeing with Spinnaker. Referencing is vital in a project like this for all sorts of reasons (credibility, mutual intelligibility, and further learning and discussion. If something is referenced to a reliable source but is still misleading or partial, then the solution is to find alternative points of view in other sources, and rewrite the relvant section as a summary of the available positions, with refences to sources on all sides.
 * Hope this is helpful... The Land (talk) 13:31, 5 January 2009 (UTC)


 * I support this initiative, however the public should be about to comment and express original thought based on the facts. Spinnaker gybe (talk) 01:36, 8 January 2009 (UTC)


 * We have a structural problem to contend with. Virtually all the Anglosphere was on the same side in World War I, so the vast majority of English language sources available exhibit that perspective. Ditto for fr:. The converse is true on de: and tk:, though their citation standards differ from ours. Unless we insist on using only sources that are available in translation this problem will always be with us.  Of course the public can "comment and express original thought", but that's not what WP is for, its an encyclopedia. It only reflects existing thought (at least in article space).LeadSongDog (talk) 20:40, 8 January 2009 (UTC)
 * I'm not sure if I agree with that. The war ended over 90 years ago and there are lots of first-rate books on WW1 written by professional historians which can be used as references. I don't see any reason to assume that historians such as Hew Strachan, Martin Gilbert and John Keegan (to name just three prominent authors of relatively recent books on the war as a whole) are biased because they happen to speak English. Nick-D (talk) 07:27, 9 January 2009 (UTC)


 * Regarding my statement "comment and express original thought", I meant express their views on the talk page. Also, if I were to dislike content in an encyclopedia, I should be able to write the encyclopedia and get a response from a representative.  In this talk section above, someone has been writing about biased sections and gets no response from a representative of the encyclopedia if they get a response at all (I assume this because no-one knows who is ultimately responsible for the article in the first place).  I pity the poor person who takes that job on WP.  Also, who decides when an idea is "existing".  If a historian or a person is the first to think of an idea, shouldn't that be counted as existing even though no-one might agree with it or even comprehend it.  So how many people do we need for the thought to exist.  One, Two, One Trillion...?  Also, how many people have to write a book expressing the thought before the thought exists.  One, Two, One Trillion...? I guess "mein kampf" counts right.  I guess Charles Darwin would be wasting his time in the world of Wikipedia.  I read science books.  As for whether there are enough english speaking historians to provide sources for a balanced article, you would think a good historian would have searched for all these different cultural views already or all they would be mostly writing is propaganda. Spinnaker gybe (talk) 10:02, 10 January 2009 (UTC)


 * Please read FAQ/Overview. If you wish to report anything, instructions are at: Contact us. Again, this is an individual article talk page (one of 2,692,965 at the time I'm writing this) and is not an appropriate forum of the kind of high-level discussion you seem to want to have. Discussions on an article's talk pages should be focused on that article, and general discussions should be held elsewhere. You are wasting your time posting these messages here. Nick-D (talk) 10:13, 10 January 2009 (UTC)


 * Nick-D, you are the one that brought up the WP rules here. I am just responding to your reference to the rules in this discussion.  My original points were on bias in this article and the need to change the wording and content to meet the WP standards, as well as voluntarily impose additional standards above and beyond the WP standards for history articles.  Additional standards are I am sure made for historians and other professions and for good reason.Spinnaker gybe (talk) 10:30, 10 January 2009 (UTC)

I have placed the WP rules which have been broken in the original "How do I flag this article for bias" talk entry. I will give you some time to modify the article. Take this as me extending an olive branch to you. Let it not be said that I did not appeal to your sense of fairness and common decency. How much time do you need? In the mean time, I will try to get in touch with an academic source to obtain the Central Powers viewpoint.Spinnaker gybe (talk) 20:20, 13 January 2009 (UTC)

A Second Outsider's Take
If I may add something to discussion...WP:V says the threshold for inclusion in Wikipedia is verifiability, not truth. Earlier it was stated that ''Just because something is commonly identified does not make the assertion not biased or the truth. For example, the earth was at one point commonly identified as being flat.'' Actually, if the majority of reliable sources say the world is flat, then Wikipedia must also state that the world is flat.

It was also stated that You can still maintain that the earth is flat if you wish, but I should have the right to contest that assertion with evidence of my own. No, actually you don't.  That's called original research and it's not allowed on Wikipedia. To contest something, you must be able to back it up with reliable sources.

I have no idea if the article is biased or not, but if it is and we decide to clean it up, let's follow Wikipedia policies and do it the right way. 216.239.234.196 (talk) 19:52, 8 January 2009 (UTC)


 * The opening paragraph of the item you referenced is "This is a guideline discussing the reliability of particular types of sources. The relevant policies on sources are Wikipedia:Verifiability and Wikipedia:No original research, and additional restrictions in biographies of living people. Wikipedia articles should cover all major and significant-minority views that have been published by reliable sources. See Wikipedia:Neutral point of view." Note and I repeat again, "Wikipedia articles should cover all major and significant-minority views that have been published by reliable sources."  Firstly, this article does not cover any other significant minority view in the opening paragraphs so it is certainly in violation of this guideline.  Maybe they should move the causes section out of the beginning of this article and provide the other significant views in the same paragraph.  Secondly, majority rule is not part of the guideline.  This goes to show that people that pick and choose portions from standards to back up their point and ignore words from the same standard (sentence) should not be writing history or any other WP article as a matter of fact.  As for the original research I refer you to my response in the above main entry.  How many people, books, does it take for it not to be original research.  One, Twenty and does "Mein Kampf" or some other ridiculous book count.  There is one thing we agree upon though, let's do it right.Spinnaker gybe (talk) 10:21, 10 January 2009 (UTC)


 * First, the lead is supposed to be a summary of the article. If something is not in the body of the article, it should not be in the summary.


 * Second, read the article on WP:UNDUE regarding minority view points.


 * Third and most important, you have not provided any reliable sources that support any of your claims. Until you do, it's all original research.  For example, if I were to make the claim that the Declaration of Independence was signed in 1776, I should not add that into an article until I can cite a reliable source that actually states such a thing. If you don't have any reliable sources, go to a library or go to a book store, get some reliable sources on the subject and read them.


 * When selecting your reference material, keep the following policy in mind:


 * In general, the most reliable sources are peer-reviewed journals and books published in university presses; university-level textbooks; magazines, journals, and books published by respected publishing houses; and mainstream newspapers. As a rule of thumb, the greater the degree of scrutiny involved in checking facts, analyzing legal issues, and scrutinizing the evidence and arguments of a particular work, the more reliable it is.


 * Academic and peer-reviewed publications are highly valued and usually the most reliable sources in areas where they are available, such as history, medicine and science. Material from reliable non-academic sources may also be used in these areas, particularly if they are respected mainstream publications. The appropriateness of any source always depends on the context. Where there is disagreement between sources, their views should be clearly attributed in the text.


 * Fourth, as to whether Mein Kampf is a reliable source, note the following Wikipedia policy:


 * Reliable sources are credible published materials with a reliable publication process; their authors are generally regarded as trustworthy or authoritative in relation to the subject at hand. How reliable a source is depends on context. As a rule of thumb, the more people engaged in checking facts, analyzing legal issues, and scrutinizing the writing, the more reliable the publication.


 * If you are unsure if something qualifies as a reliable source, ask at the Reliable sources/Noticeboard.


 * Also, note that I have not offered any opinion as to the validity of your complaints. I'm only explaining to you the process and policies of how to go about changing an article.  (I'm 216.239.234.196 on a different computer.) 67.184.14.87 (talk) 16:37, 10 January 2009 (UTC)


 * OK. If I get a prof from a university or a text used in university to state some basic rules of writing history, I should be able to use the history writing text and the prof themselves as a reference and post these rules at the top of the article?  Are you in agreement with that?  Also, should I be able to write that this article may or may not meet this standard and post a bias warning permanently at the top of the page?  If I get an opinion that this article violates those rules, I should be able to place that professional opinion at the top of the page as well.  Correct?


 * Also do you accept a dictionary, a Discovery Channel documentary, any history book, and any web pages I can link people to as valid references? I add web pages because today, the pages are equivalent to books.  Also can I use Wikipedias own standards and disclaimers to alter the main article.  If this is fine with you, I will proceed on this basis.Spinnaker gybe (talk) 19:54, 10 January 2009 (UTC)


 * Erm, any sources cited would have to be reliable sources per WP: RS. I'd also highly recommend detailing and discussing any changes you want to make here on the talkpage before doing anything. Skinny87 (talk) 20:06, 10 January 2009 (UTC)


 * A permanent disclaimer would not be necessary. when the page reaches a certain standard - usually GA - it is assumed that there are no longer neutrality issues (it should be noted, however, that this page is currently far from GA; in that regards you are correct).  To place a permanent tag also means that this article can never be of an FA standard.  As the article improves, many of the neutrality issues will be eliminated.  The difficulty with the MILHIST flagship articles (ie this one, World War II, Alexander the Great is that to rewrite them would not take a whole lot of time....if you were the only one writing it.  I figure it would take me 2 weeks at the very most to rewrite the WWI article without other editors working on it.  the difficulty is, when User:Oberiko attempted to reshape and rewrite the WWII page, he was hounded by people criticizing his every move at every step of the way.  the case ended up going to the Mediation Cabal (one step below full-out arbitration), and I highly doubt that Oberiko has fully recovered.  For now, a corp of elite editors is holding the nationalist POV pushers at bay.  the difficulty is, seeing what Oberiko went through, there are very few who will go through that kind of stress on the WWI page to rewrite it to bring it up to the standards that it should be held to. Cam (Chat) 05:12, 11 January 2009 (UTC)


 * I don't know who Oberiko is but I recall they spent weeks (months?) arguing over when WWII started. The most ridiculous suggestion was that WWII started on December 7, 1941 which I still can't believe anyone took seriously.  The other problem with the WWII article is that people from various countries try to promote their country's contribution.  You get people from say (I'll make up a country so as not to offend anyone) Ethnicclashistan who will insist their country's 2,000 troop contribution to the war effort was just as important as say, Staligrad.  Just ridiculous stuff.  Articles on the Iraq War are even worse.  67.184.14.87 (talk) 17:52, 11 January 2009 (UTC)


 * Please read reliable sources very carefully. Many or all of your questions are answered there.  But briefly, no, your college professor is not considered a reliable source.  This might seem counter-intuitive at first but no person is considered considered a reliable source.  Only published works are considered reliable sources.  Your professor however might make a great editor for Wikipedia but even he/she must cite reliable sources.  Yes, a text from a university should be considered a reliable source.  I'm not sure about a Discovery channel documentary.  It depends on the website.  If the website is an online companion to a reliable published work, then it's also considered reliable.  For example, Time Magazine's website would be considered reliable.  But be careful, editorials or opinion peices are not considered reliable.  As others have stated, no there should not be a permanent disclaimer.  A temporary one, sure.  Also, as others have stated, it's usually a good idea to discuss your changes here first before making them to the article especially an article like this. Finally, let me close this be repeating my standard disclaimer that I am offering no opinion as to the validity of your complaints, I'm only explaining the process and policies that should be followed in editing a page.  67.184.14.87 (talk) 13:42, 11 January 2009 (UTC)


 * Is a Discovery or History Channel documentary considered a reliable source? I asked this question at the Reliable sources/Noticeboard here .  Their opinions were mixed.  Some thought it was OK, others though disagreed.  Many made the point that highest level of reliability would be published works and academic journals and that with a topic such as WWI, there should be plenty of highly reliable sources without having to resort to using Discovery or History Channel documentaries. A Quest For Knowledge (talk) 15:12, 12 January 2009 (UTC)


 * Anyone else have an opinion on this before I write a response? One thing I would like everyone to think about.  Isn't there a significant minority view missing from this article (the opinion of the central powers) and doesn't this violate the WP rules?  Please see WP:UNDUE.  It seems to me the views of the opposition is missing and the writers of this article have the responsiblity to state that it is missing and try to obtain this view. In my opinion the opposition is due 50% of the opinion space of this article.Spinnaker gybe (talk) 02:34, 13 January 2009 (UTC)
 * that is, of course, making the assumption that our goal here is to promote opinions&mdash;which it isn't. Our job is to create a neutral article concerning World War I, not necessarily ensure that each "opinion" is represented 50/50.  The neutrality is violated if it blatantly favours on side (glorifying British military victories and accusing the Germans of being "filthy krouts" would definitely violate this.  Having one viewpoint analyzed slightly more than another...not so much) but not if we use English-document sources or German-document sources, in that regard the coverage of opinions is somewhat irrelevant. Cam (Chat) 02:58, 13 January 2009 (UTC)


 * Cam, have you read WP:UNDUE? Opinion and viewpoint are synonyms (Reference: WordWeb dictionary and The Concise Oxford Dictionary). I am sure the Germans, Austrians, and other Central Powers have their viewpoints and are allowed to present them in proportional weight according to WP:UNDUE.  Let this be a precursor of things to come because my original bias complaints will be backed up by the WP standards (words with negative and positive connotations are banned by the WP standards by the way).  I'm going to post this paragraph in the original "How do I flag this article for bias" entry so you don't miss it.Spinnaker gybe (talk) 04:04, 13 January 2009 (UTC)


 * Sorry I was busy. I promised I would respond to the assertions above.  I'll deal with them a point at a time.


 * 216.239.234.196 on a different computer says "First, the lead is supposed to be a summary of the article. If something is not in the body of the article, it should not be in the summary."  If the summary of the article ignores a significant viewpoint, it violates NPOV and WP:UNDUE.  Also thanks for pointing out the rules, they were very helpful.


 * 216.239.234.196 on a different computer says "Second, read the article on WP:UNDUE regarding minority view points." I did read WP:UNDUE.  You must have missed the part where they state: Wikipedia:UNDUE "Undue weight applies to more than just viewpoints. Just as giving undue weight to a viewpoint is not neutral, so is giving undue weight to other verifiable and sourced statements. An article should not give undue weight to any aspects of the subject, but should strive to treat each aspect with a weight appropriate to its significance to the subject. Note that undue weight can be given in several ways, including, but not limited to, depth of detail, quantity of text, prominence of placement, and juxtaposition of statements.".  Thanks again for pointing out the rules.


 * 216.239.234.196 on a different computer says "Third and most important, you have not provided any reliable sources that support any of your claims. Until you do, it's all original research."  You got me there, but I am working on it.  It shouldn't be too hard to get from what I am being told.  However, you do have the obligation to state in this article that a significant viewpoint is missing and apply the neutrality tag to the article until you do get it.  See WP:UNDUE above.


 * 216.239.234.196 on a different computer says "Fourth, as to whether Mein Kampf is a reliable source, note the following Wikipedia policy:". After discussion with my peers, I have been convinced Mein Kampf could be used as a valid reference although in limited circumstances.  For example, if Mein Kampf were to describe the sentiments of the German people before and after WWI, it should be allowed. reliable sources also allows it, in limited circumstances.  My point though was that the sources you have given are probably as biased as Mein Kampf is and should also be considered extreme and hopefully later on fringe elements and if found so, should therefore have the same restrictions as Mein Kampf.  I personally wouldn't use Mein Kampf as a reference because it is loaded with nonsense, however it is allowed in limited circumstances.


 * User:Climie.ca|Cam says "A permanent disclaimer would not be necessary". I have my concerns about people writing history when they don't have to be bound by standards historians would have to bound by.  For crying out loud, the writers of this article are not even able to live up to the WP standards.  As for the poor user User:Oberiko, I would not have bothered arguing with you, I would have argued to the WP board to have the page as under construction and moved the entire content to another page not directed from the WWI search to be edited.  I can't believe this page has been allowed to exist in the form it is now.  Elementary and high school students have probably referenced this article in their work when it is not fit for their consumption.  However, I'll give you the benefit of the doubt and see how it turns out.Spinnaker gybe (talk) 05:31, 22 January 2009 (UTC)


 * We can have a discussion of what is a reliable source and what is not some other time. I have my views on that which opposes your own, but we should deal with the core issues first; unless you wish to deal with them now.Spinnaker gybe (talk) 05:31, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Spinnaker, I see a lot of complaining and fussing from you, but no actual action taken in an attempt to 'improve' the article. Why don't you paste this article into a sandbox and get to work, change what you think needs changing (It can't be the entire article after all), and then show it to everyone on this page for discussion? Skinny87 (talk) 07:13, 22 January 2009 (UTC)

Mein Kampf is only a reliable source for Hitler's opinions.  YellowMonkey  ( click here to vote for world cycling's #1 model! ) 07:37, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Even that is questionable. Is it an accurate rendition of his opinions or just the subset of his opinions that he wanted to make public? Did he believe everything he said, or was he (gasp!) prepared to prevaricate? LeadSongDog (talk) 14:01, 22 January 2009 (UTC)


 * I haven't been following this discussion closely due to interests elsewhere and also a house guest this last week, but was it really necssary to block spinnaker gybe simply for being argumentative/questioning. He is a newbie, after all, and has been trying to come to terms with WP:V and WP:RS.  He hasn't done any 3RR's nor been uncivil etc.....what exactly was the rationale for the block?Skookum1 (talk) 14:50, 22 January 2009 (UTC)


 * It is a fallacy that people thought the earth was flat. The curvature of the earth has been recognised for millennia.130.209.6.41 (talk) 09:33, 1 April 2009 (UTC)

Date of World War I
Did the war not start actually on July 28th? June 28th is wrong in this case because on this date Archduke Franz Ferdinand was assassinated but the war did not break out on this day! It was the beginning of the July crisis, but not the start date of the war. World War I effectively began on July 28th 1914 with Austria-Hungary declaring war on Serbia. --217.95.93.152 (talk) 20:54, 8 January 2009 (UTC)
 * I agree, the war didn't actually start until the declaration. Sarajevo started the chain of events leading to war, not the actual war.  TREKphiler  <sup style="color:#1034A6;"> hit me ♠
 * Right. July 28 was the first declaration.LeadSongDog (talk) 13:50, 9 January 2009 (UTC)

War-aims
One of the things I gleaned from Taylor was his discussion of the various war-aims of the Powers; i.e. the goals of the war for each, as obliged to be delivered to them by their allies in the respective alliances. In the case of Tsarist Russia, these included possession of Constantinople and most of Anatolia, which France and Britain et al. would have been obliged to agree with (and had long fought against, e.g. re 1878). Had the Russian Empire survived the war, and the war still turned out the way things did in real-time (as opposed to what-if time), the plan was that Constantinople would have become the capital of the Russian Empire, and correspondingly the city Russified, although implicitly this would have suggested the restoration of the Eastern Roman Empire under a Russian dynasty....I'm not suggesting this be added to the article, and I don't have a copy of Taylor anymore, nor time to read it, but the respective war-aims of each power he details out, the Russification of New Rome and Anatolia (and, I think, Russian annexation of Greece, or at least as a sphere of influence....all of which might have, if achieved peacefully, prevented a lot of the nastiness of the Greco-Turkish War of the '20s...can't remember the Ottoman war-aims, maybe it'll come back to me...;. I can't remember exactly what British and French war-aims were, though they did exact some of them e.g. French occupation of the Rhineland and annexation of Alsace-Lorraine; restoration of Poland was of course on the laundry list...if anyone's reading Taylor or knows the chapter in question, a short section on the war-aims might be worth adding, though of course without hte kind of what-if speculations I've gone into here...Skookum1 (talk) 14:47, 22 January 2009 (UTC)

Background
World War 1 was waged from 1864-1873. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 39rg1s3 (talk • contribs) 00:19, 17 February 2009 (UTC)
 * ...No it wasn't. Look it up in an encyclopaedia if you are unsure. - Znex (talk) 07:44, 18 February 2009 (UTC)
 * That's an interesting assertion. Maybe some cultures have a different idea about what is a world war.  Could you please provide me a source? Spinnaker gybe (talk) 21:47, 18 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Sorry I did not mean to sound rude asking for a source. BTW Welcome.  I am merely asking for a source because you are introducing new facts.  If you were saying the facts in the article support another opinion and should be considered, I would be open to trying to find out whether the opinion should be explored and added to the article.  Regards.Spinnaker gybe (talk) 02:50, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Spinnaker, there's nothing wrong with asking for a cite. You weren't being rude.  Wikipedia is all about verifiability.  In any case, World War I is one of several correct names for this conflict.  For the record, it began in 1914.  No, I don't have a cite, too busy working on fixing another article. :)  As for world wars, some earlier conflicts might be considered to be world wars but the term world war wasn't used back then.  Look up the French and Indian War (American name).  A Quest For Knowledge (talk) 03:30, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * LOL Sorry A Quest For Knowledge, I wasn't asking Znex for a cite, I was asking 39rg1s3 for the cite. I wanted him to expand on the assertion he made about WW1 being from 1864-1873.  Just goes to show, I'm not as wiki-savvy as I should be.  I probably should have mentioned him by name and not indented my entry.  Also I am surprised to learn that some earlier conflicts might be considered world wars by other cultures; maybe it was the known world that they were refering to.  That makes me even more interested in what 39rgls3 has to say. Thanks.Spinnaker gybe (talk) 08:26, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * I didn't realize you'd been unblocked, Spinnaker. Anyway, there have been views by historians that there were previous 'world wars'; though I can't recall them from my BA courses, there are a few who believe the Seven Years War is one, and I think the Napoleonic Wars has also been called one. But 1914-1918 is the best known one, so I think that's the most relevant. Skinny87 (talk) 08:29, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Sorry, I misread the above. In any case, World War I began on July 28, 1914 .  Also, we have an article on World_war which lists some examples of earlier conflicts that might be considered world wars.  A Quest For Knowledge (talk) 13:34, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * I think you're confusing World War I with the Franco-Prussian War (1870-1871, there was fighting that went on after the official conclusion, but not, as far as I'm aware, before the official start). These were two different wars.  And though the earlier war had similar elements to the later war, it is generally not regarded as a World War, because it did not involve a large portion of the world's peoples. 76.111.80.228 (talk) 20:05, 22 February 2009 (UTC)

Allied Powers vs Entente
I notice we use 'Allied Powers' (with Entente bracketted) at the info box. Would we not be better off making more of them being the Entente Powers? Both sides at various times get the terms 'Alliance' or 'Allies' pinned to them (Certainly one of the alternate names for the Central Powers was Triple Alliance), it does create a little bit of confusion. Perhaps this is a US/UK thing, though looking at the web it seems to ignore country lines when this split in names occur. -- Narson ~  Talk  • 18:27, 20 February 2009 (UTC)

Largest War in History
Both the WWI & WWII each say they were the "largest war in history." WWI looks to be 70M, whereas WWII was 100M.

Indeed that was my question to ho could WWI be bigger then the second?NH-obi (talk) 16:48, 9 March 2009 (UTC)

Yee, my nignug, that's exactly what I'm talking about (posted above), niggas. It's a very obvious mistake, coons. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 208.54.7.158 (talk) 21:13, 25 March 2009 (UTC)


 * I've corrected the statement Spacevezontalk 20:16, 27 March 2009 (UTC)

Neutrality Tax Removed. Why?
I see the neutrality tag has been removed. Have all significant viewpoints been added to the article and please show me where; otherwise I will add the tag back. There are also other bias issues I need to bring up.Spinnaker gybe (talk) 11:17, 9 March 2009 (UTC)

Oh BTW, I am reading "The Struggle For Mastery In Europe: Taylor" and trying to find a book by Hamilton and Herwig called "The Origins Of World War 1"; anybody read any of these and do they qualify as references? I am trying to find out the credentials of these authors because I prefer academic works over non-academic ones. A prof recommended reading the Herwig books but for some reason they are hard to find. Spinnaker gybe (talk) 11:38, 9 March 2009 (UTC)
 * If you look it up in the list of references given, you'll see an OCLC link. Following that link you'll find a list of libraries that have it. If you fill in your postcode/zip code/postal code it will sort the list by proximity to you. Near me it shows most major university libraries and a few others. Your milage may vary. LeadSongDog (talk) 13:28, 9 March 2009 (UTC)

My bias issues relate to the July Ultimatum section. Since the July Ultimatum was the "proximate trigger" should not this section appear before the sections Militarism and autocracy, Balance of power, Economic imperialism, Trade barriers, and Ethnic and political rivalries. It is true that these factors contributed to some countries' rationale for war but none of them are specifically a good rationale for war or the cause of WW1. The clear rationale for war should be described first in my opinion. Secondly, the main points of the ultimatum should be detailed in the main text since not doing so and them claiming some points of the ultimatum extreme is clear bias. In my opinion, the sixth point which is inappropriately bolded in the link is not extreme at all; today, the country harbouring the assassins would be obligated to have them tried in the harbouring country, the country victimized or the UN courts. Also it is like saying the FBI should not be involved in the investigation of 911 terrorist; this clearly happens today. Is it OK if I move the section, place the sections listed above under contributing factors, place the ultimatum details under July Ultimatum and remove the "extreme" comment from the article?

Also, the specific rationale of each country involved in the war needs to be clearly documented.Spinnaker gybe (talk) 23:16, 10 March 2009 (UTC)

Could someone please tell me how to add the neutrality tag? The. I was told is not correct. The omission of the above items deem the article be tagged as such.Spinnaker gybe (talk) 23:29, 10 March 2009 (UTC)
 * The MRC Library here in Calgary actually has a copy of Herwig & Hamilton, and I have actually met Dr. Herwig on several occasions. I'll see what I can do about getting my hands on a copy. Cam (Chat) 02:11, 11 March 2009 (UTC)


 * I'm not sure it really makes much difference which order the cause sections are presented in, though clearly the reader will understand the July crisis a little better if it follows the others which set the stage. As far as finding a clear rationale for each country, good luck with that. Even those that did record an official casus belli are unlikely to have recorded their true reasons. Diplomats were, are, and always will be the worlds greatest poker players: their job is to lie, cheat, and steal from people while persuading them they are being fair, reasonable, and cooperative. Even the most naive of statesmen wouldn't believe their diplomats only use those skills on the other guy.LeadSongDog (talk) 03:48, 11 March 2009 (UTC)
 * As far as the NPOV tag it was removed here. The edit comment seems self-explanitory. This is a very high visibility article. If you suggest a concrete change of wording with good references to back it up there will be lots of people here eager to discuss it. The NPOV tag is simply unnecessary. (belatedly signed) LeadSongDog (talk) 00:21, 11 March 2009


 * There is an unsigned entry above so we do not know who wrote it, someone needs to find out how this happened and who wrote it. As for needed references, I refer to the Wikipedia rules Neutral point of view where it states that 1) Opinions are to be clearly stated as such and 2) The article is not to contain any bias. When refering to the rules, I need no further references. Please see the sections "Bias", "Undue weight", "Balance". I am coming to the conclusion that the rules do not matter here.  The unsubstantiated "extreme" comment in the July ultimatum section is a clear violation of this and according to the rules, it is to be removed; also I believe it is missing a reference.  As to their differing reasons for entering the war, their stated reasons should be good enough; this will allow this article to show each country's position for historical significance and properly remove the bias.  If each country's reasons are found to be weak or nonsense, we should be able to find references to opinions stating such.  Why their declared reasons are not in the article, I do not know.  You would think that this would be a fundamental concept of writing history.  As for it being a high profile article, it is better we do our work properly rather that try to cover it up.  I do not agree with your arguments at all.  Please refer me to an admin so I can discuss these issues and find out what the admin's responsibilities are in enforcing the rules and discuss this "high profile" issue?  Remember, Wikipedia is not a soapbox, high profile or not.  BTW, the page is semi-protected so I can't make edits.Spinnaker gybe (talk) 10:35, 11 March 2009 (UTC)


 * I'm laughing my head off! First I was blocked for talking too much.  Now the neutrality tag was removed for talking too little!  Someone please make up their mind what is the appropriate action.  One would think removing the neutrality tag would require proof the issues were fixed, not "(doesn't appear to still be an issue, no discussion on the talk page)"Spinnaker gybe (talk) 10:46, 11 March 2009 (UTC)


 * I seriously doubt that you were blocked for simply "talking too much". A Quest For Knowledge (talk) 12:30, 11 March 2009 (UTC)

In order: "My bias issues relate to the July Ultimatum section. Since the July Ultimatum was the "proximate trigger" should not this section appear before the sections Militarism and autocracy, Balance of power, Economic imperialism, Trade barriers, and Ethnic and political rivalries. It is true that these factors contributed to some countries' rationale for war but none of them are specifically a good rationale for war or the cause of WW1. The clear rationale for war should be described first in my opinion."


 * Why? The lead up to the war should come before the flash point - without the lead up, there is no flash point!

"Secondly, the main points of the ultimatum should be detailed in the main text since not doing so and them claiming some points of the ultimatum extreme is clear bias."


 * How is this bias? Reasons please.

"In my opinion, the sixth point which is inappropriately bolded in the link is not extreme at all; today, the country harbouring the assassins would be obligated to have them tried in the harbouring country, the country victimized or the UN courts. Also it is like saying the FBI should not be involved in the investigation of 911 terrorist; this clearly happens today."


 * Um....UN courts in 1914? — Ed 17  (Talk /  Contribs)  13:32, 11 March 2009 (UTC)


 * Spinaker, I've yet to see you make any helpful edits for this article, despite endless claims of bias and POV problems that apparently infest it. Why don't tou copy the article into your userspace and work on it there? Skinny87 (talk) 14:41, 11 March 2009 (UTC)

If you state an opinion which you have not referenced and not substantiated it is clear bias. If you make this sort of claim 1) it should be substantiated and 2) referenced and stated clearly it is an opinion, and 3) let someone with the opposite significant opinion state their case it is not extreme. These points are clearly reinforced by the rules. I say place the demands and the Serbian response in the main text and let the reader decide.
 * "How is this bias? Reasons please."

The analogy is to make people realize that the 6th demand is not unreasonable at all. Today, it is a common demand when a crime has been committed and if a vice-president or a cabinet minister was assassinated, this would be a legitimate demand. Maybe you missed the "today" word in the same sentence.
 * "*Um....UN courts in 1914?"

Since others have the right to edit the page and remove tags without cause I am now requesting the semi-protection of this page be removed so I can make the edits required. The mediator suggested I simply make edits and short comments. I would place a copy of what the mediator said, but it would be embarrassing people as well as to Wikipedia. No other wikipedia citizen is required to work on an article in their own user space so why would I concede to such a ridiculous suggestion. User:Cam and others have access, I request it for myself. I have contributed to the re-write on User:Cam page as well as the RMS Lusitania page. My comments in the WW1 talk section have resulted in changes to the WW1 article so my contributions have been well documented. You might have a case if these changes were not made or my talk comments were useless, but they have been made and they have been shown to be not useless. QED.
 * "Spinaker, I've yet to see you make any helpful edits for this article, despite endless claims of bias and POV problems that apparently infest it. Why don't tou copy the article into your userspace and work on it there."


 * As for the background info, it is filled with opinions that are not substantiated as well as using quotes from people who made these comments after the war so chronologically, these quotes should placed later on in the article. Would not a referenced statement summarizing the situation in Europe be sufficient without quoting Wilson and Lenin.  An academic opinion would be much more credible and shorter. After reading the first section of "The Struggle For Mastery In Europe - Taylor", I could just as easily add in the section Military Aggression stating as fact who the aggressors were in European wars between 1812 and 1918 and list them as the cause of militarism, imperialism, and ethnic tensions leading up to WW1.  Do you really want me to do that?  As detailed in the book, the constant threats to the German states is outrageous.  Let's get to the meat of the matter and each country's rational for war in which you can include these factors in their statements if you wish.  Otherwise we will be constantly stating opinions rather than what should be presented first, the facts.


 * I'm going to wait for an admin response for a few days before I apply the Neutrality tag. It is unreasonable to think that the bias in this article is going to be properly fixed within a few months or even a year.69.31.240.92 (talk) 23:29, 12 March 2009 (UTC)


 * Sorry, I wrote the above under 69.31.240.92.Spinnaker gybe (talk) 23:32, 12 March 2009 (UTC)Spinnaker gybe (talk) 23:34, 12 March 2009 (UTC)


 * Spinnaker, if it helps, your statement that "The article is not to contain any bias" isn't correct. Sometimes, Wikipedia's policy on neutrality gets misinterpreted to mean neutral or fair to all sides of an issue.  In actuality, we only represent viewpoints published by reliable sources and in proportion to the number of reliable sources that express this view.  Thus, if Austria-Hungry's demands are regarded as extreme by reliable sources, then Wikipedia should accurately reflect this viewpoint.  We do not introduce bias to counter bias in reliable sources.  To do so would be a violation of WP:NPOV.
 * Regarding your statement that begins with "In my opinion...", your opinion on WWI is irrelevant. My opinion on WWI is irrelevant.  The only thing that matters are the opinions of reliable sources.  In a way, writing an article for Wikipedia is simply the process of regurgitating what reliable sources already say on the matter.
 * If you want to make a case that an article is violating NPOV, the only way to do this is by citing specific reliable sources. My copy of the history text book ("Rise of the American Nation", ISBN 0-15-376030-3) describes Austria-Hungry's demands as "harsh" on page 571 and lists the assassination before other causes, pages 571-573. A Quest For Knowledge (talk) 01:32, 13 March 2009 (UTC)


 * This reliable source refers to Austria-Hungary's demands as "severe". A Quest For Knowledge (talk) 15:55, 13 March 2009 (UTC)


 * A Quest For Knowledge, I think we have been through this before. Let's go through the relevent rules and discuss them:


 * WP:SUBSTANTIATE Biased statements (Assertions that are not fact) have to be substantiated either with the facts or stated as being an opinion referenced with a reliable source. I quote the WW1 article - "On 23 July 1914, an ultimatum was sent to Serbia with ten demands, some so extreme that the Serbian reply included reservations and rejected the sixth demand." 1) "Some so extreme" is an opinion and needs to be clearly stated as such. This opinion is equivalent to a biased statement because it requires a judgement call to be made, ie it is not fact. 2) If "Rise of the American Nation" is the source, it needs to be referenced in the article.  3) Any opposing position may be made to refute the biased statement by adding in the article another biased statement supported by the facts or by referencing a reliable source.  I can do this in this article according to the rules because I only have to support it with facts.


 * WP:MORALIZE Basically, this rule is let the facts speak for themselves. I have suggested that placing the Austria-Hungary ten demands and the Kingdom of Serbia response in the main article will do precisely this.  Let the reader make up their own minds.


 * WP:WEIGHT I have quoted this twice before but maybe this rule is misunderstood. I quote "Undue weight applies to more than just viewpoints. Just as giving undue weight to a viewpoint is not neutral, so is giving undue weight to other verifiable and sourced statements. An article should not give undue weight to any aspects of the subject, but should strive to treat each aspect with a weight appropriate to its significance to the subject. Note that undue weight can be given in several ways, including, but not limited to, depth of detail, quantity of text, prominence of placement, and juxtaposition of statements."  An aspect of the WW1 article is the rationale each side declared war on the opposing side.  Since war is usually a 2 sided affair (WW1 - Entente Powers vs. Central Powers, WW2 - Axis vs. Allies) each side according to the rules gets to state their case for war since each aspect is to be given, in the article, proportional space according to the significance to the subject. We don't have 1 sided wars do we?  It's like having a trial and only allowing the prosecution to make their case when it is only proper to allow the defence to make their case as well, even if it is only for historical significance.  The subject demands it! Also when a country joins one side of a war, it is taken to mean the country agrees with the rationale for war of the countries composing the side they have chosen.  If you want to state that Great Britain joined WW1 on the side of the Entente even though they did not argee with Russia's or France's rationale for war, go right ahead if you can reference it, but may I say Great Britain's morales morals will be subject to attack through WP:SUBSTANTIATE.  I disagree with this aspect of WP:SUBSTANTIATE because this is history for an encyclopedia we are writing, not a celebrity piece and history articles should abide by appropriate rules.  I think substantiating the biased statement alone or referencing a source of the biased statement alone is not appropriate; the biased statement should be both substantiated by the facts and referenced by a reliable source.  Referencing nonsense not supported by the facts is still asserting nonsense.Spinnaker gybe (talk) 20:23, 15 March 2009 (UTC)Spinnaker gybe (talk) 20:32, 15 March 2009 (UTC)


 * A Quest For Knowledge, I think we have been through this before. Yes, repeatedly. As I can recall, you were having some difficulties with the other editors of this article .  As a disinterested, neutral party, I decided to try to help out .  But, you were banned for disruptive behavior.  I'm not sure why they decided to let you back in, but here we are again listening to your soapboaxing.


 * Let's go through the relevent rules and discuss them


 * We've already done that ad nauseam. I've provided two reliable sources which can be attributed to.  A Quest For Knowledge (talk) 22:45, 22 March 2009 (UTC)


 * A Quest For Knowledge, I'm just as tired as you are of this, but I'm left with no choice but to request again that I be allowed to make changes to the article. It is clear that the rules do not matter here or they are not understood.  Please remove the protection on the article.  At least I substantiate my positions with facts which I my opinion is much better that providing references that cannnot be substantiated with the facts.  My plan is this.  I will go through and change all the obvious violations of the rules and as I research the subject matter more I will add the missing significant viewpoints.  I am currently writing some background info on the Serbian rationale for assassinations and adding the fact that the Croatians at the time had different ambitions in conflict with the Serbians.  I feel the Serbian rationale is missing.  Maybe we should get a mediator involved?Spinnaker gybe (talk) 09:19, 23 March 2009 (UTC)

(od)Or perhaps you could make your own version in your own sandbox, and link it here, as has been requested innumerable times - perhaps you shouldn't touch this article and instead create your own version in your sandbox, then present it here for viewing? Skinny87 (talk) 18:36, 23 March 2009 (UTC)


 * I'll place the Serbian background in my sandbox, but if there are obvious rule violations in the WW1 as it stands, as a Wikipedian I am supposed to be able to change it or add the neutrality tag until it has been changed, non?Spinnaker gybe (talk) 09:05, 26 March 2009 (UTC)


 * I see the article has been changed. I'll give it a review when I have time to; I'm busy at work so please give me a few weeks.  Thanks. Spinnaker gybe (talk) 23:56, 30 March 2009 (UTC)

A good site to add to the references?
I found this site a few weeks ago, It has TONS of maps about world war 1 and has lots of info, I thought it would be a good referce/external site for this page but I cannot edit this article. The URL for the site is: http://www.tech2classroom.com/Edw11/Edw11.html —Preceding unsigned comment added by Assed206 (talk • contribs) 20:21, 27 March 2009 (UTC)

Missing name of treaty between Russia and Germany expiring in 1890
The article does not name the Reinsurance Treaty (it simply says "which?"). The 1887 Reinsurance Treaty between Russia and Germany was a cornerstone of Bismarck's foreign policy, and Kaiser Wilhelm II's decision not to renew it in 1890 was a key cause of Russia's turning to an alliance with France, which was obviously central to the war. Why is this important historical event not named or discussed in the article? —Preceding unsigned comment added by 129.219.58.22 (talk) 20:33, 29 March 2009 (UTC)

New file File:General Officers of World War I by John Singer Sargent.jpg
Recently the file File:General Officers of World War I by John Singer Sargent.jpg (right) was uploaded and it appears to be relevant to this article (or a suitable subarticle) and not currently used by it. If you're interested and think it would be a useful addition, please feel free to include it. Dcoetzee 08:15, 8 April 2009 (UTC)