Talk:Wyoming-class battleship/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 15:11, 30 July 2015 (UTC)

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 15:11, 30 July 2015 (UTC)


 * No DABs, two dead links.
 * Fixed the DANFS links
 * Images appropriately licensed.
 * Move boilers to power parameter. Shp is duplicated.
 * Fixed - don't think I remembered to clean up the infobox
 * Suggest moving the note entry in the infobox to the header like so: (as built)
 * Maybe it's the sleep deprivation, but I can't figure out how to do this. And Template:Infobox ship begin is not helpful.
 * No hyphen Wyoming-class in the lede. Conversely, add one here: twin gun
 * I do these things to see if you're paying attention. At least that's what I tell myself.
 * --Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 16:11, 3 August 2015 (UTC)
 * significantly more powerful 14 in (356 mm) gun, but it would have entailed significant delays One too many "significant/ly" in close proximity.
 * Fixed the second one
 * and required extensive improvements to accommodate What kind of improvements? Infrastructure? Or ship design things?
 * Clarified
 * Improved deck armor or just more of it?
 * Good point.
 * By 1944, she had been assigned Howzabout "was" in lieu of the passive verbiage?
 * How about "served"?
 * Link fire support and bombardment vessel, mainmast
 * Linked
 * with casemates in the main deck "on", I think, rather than "in"
 * Fixed
 * Can you add a line drawing? More later.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 01:35, 1 August 2015 (UTC)
 * I looked for one when I wrote it, but I haven't been able to find anything.
 * destroyed ventilation system Ventilation or exhaust?
 * Good point.
 * transverse metacentric height Transverse? AFAIK, it's just plain metacentric.
 * You can have a longitudinal metacentric height as well (see here - it's not as commonly mentioned, but Groener usually includes both so I got in the habit of specifying.
 * Watch for duplicate links.
 * Fixed now
 * which was 8 ft (2.4 m) wide High is preferable, I think.
 * Sounds fine to me
 * Arkansas received her reconstruction watch for passive voice--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 04:10, 1 August 2015 (UTC)
 * That's actually active voice. Parsecboy (talk) 12:43, 3 August 2015 (UTC)