Talk:Ya Soshla S Uma/GA1

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 20:14, 27 September 2016 (UTC)

Soon... Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:14, 27 September 2016 (UTC)

Lead

 * is a song recorded → is the debut song recorded
 * who went under their Russian name → known under their Russian name
 * Russian album → Russian language album
 * It was written → The recording was written
 * Remove comma after "Elena Kiper"
 * The single premiered on 19 December 2000 as the lead single from the album. → The track was made available for purchase on 19 December 2000 as the lead single from the record.
 * the songs original story → the song's original story
 * by Kiper → Kiper had
 * and the English language adoption → and the single's English language adoption
 * it is about → it delves on
 * link "music critics" to music journalism
 * Many critics highlighted as → Many reviewers highlighted it as
 * tracks, and complimented the production. However, most of the reviews refused to acknowledge the content and focus more on the group and lesbian image. → tracks and complimented the production, although most of them focused on the group's and the song's lesbian vibe.
 * was successful → experienced success
 * and sold → and selling
 * Additionally, the song was a huge topic and success through airplay stations in Russia, Ukraine, Poland, and Czech Republic. → Additionally, "Ya Soshla S Uma" impacted mainstream radio stations in Russia, Ukraine, Poland and Czech Republic.
 * where it featured t.A.T.u. in school girls outfits behind an iron-wired fence, and kissing each other. → and portrayed t.A.T.u. wearing school girl outfits and kissing each other behind an iron-wired fence.
 * in Russia → in Russian media
 * set commas before and after "All The Things She Said"
 * an caused controversy from several publications and media outlets. → and further caused controversy.
 * To promote the single → In order to promote the single
 * and appeared → and it was included

Infobox

 * CD Single → CD single
 * Electronic music → Electronic
 * Universal Music Russia → You never name full names of labels in infoboxes; thus change to "Universal"
 * Original cover/cassette adapted cover → Original and cassette-adapted cover

Background and composition

 * See also: All The Things She Said → overfluous; remove
 * the Russian children → remove "the"
 * bad behavior → erratic behavior
 * Then, Russian → Subsequently, Russian
 * Him and his → He and his
 * to the group → for the group
 * procedures. She then recalled → procedures, with resulted in recalling
 * woke up → waking up
 * the words "Ya Soshla s Uma", which is "I've lost my mind" in Russian language → the phrase "Ya Shoshla s Uma", which translates as "I've lost my mind" from Russian language
 * She had told → Kiper had told
 * this is where Shapovalov conveyed the theme of lesbianism through the song, and its English language counterpart "All The Things She Said". → this led to Shapovalov conveying the theme of lesbianism through the song and its English language counterpart, "All The Things She Said".
 * of Kiper's → of Kiper
 * all made by her → all thought by her
 * Elena Kiper, and → Kiper (unlink name)
 * the groups manager → the group's manager
 * Shapovalov composed the track → He composed the track
 * released; the original version, and an → released—the original version

Release

 * set comma before and after "Boris Renski"
 * to the Russian public → for the Russian public
 * The single premiered → The recording premiered
 * CD Single → CD single
 * enhanced videos; the music video and the "behind the scenes". → enhanced videos (the visual and behind-the-scenes footage)
 * Russia, which included → Russia, and featured
 * on the CD single → from the CD single
 * groups signing → group signed a contract
 * it was re-issued → the "Ya Soshla S Uma" was re-distributed
 * with their single → with their song
 * set commas before and after the song's title
 * premiered as a radio single → it was sent to radio stations
 * Europe; in January → Europe. In January
 * second b-side track to the CD Single → second B-side track on the physical release
 * You may rename "Katy Perry controversy" into simply "Controversy"
 * Remove "and songwriter" as it's overfluous
 * Remove commas surrounding "Katy Perry"
 * the her single → her single
 * Remove "they believed"
 * and said that the song's → and said that the recording's
 * Unlink band name
 * against Perry → against the singer
 * and Perry's label's → and her labels

Reception

 * as one of the groups → as one of the group's
 * the girls vocal abilities → the girls' vocal abilities
 * vocal performances → singular please
 * the groups vocals and "emotion" → the band's vocals and emotions
 * has also achieved → has achived
 * In 2001, "Ya Soshla S Uma" → That same year, "Ya Soshla S Uma"
 * Russia; they performed the song that same night → Russia, with t.A.T.u. as well performing the track the same night.
 * song writing award → Songwriting Award
 * and won the second time → and went on winning the second time
 * peaking there → charting there
 * remove comma after "50,000 units

Music video

 * See also: All The Things She Said → remove please
 * Image > A shot of t.A.T.u. members Julia Volkova (left) and Elena Katina (right) in school outfits, who run around a corner and find a vast Khodynka Field in Moscow. → A shot from the music video, portraying band members Volkova (left) and Katina (right) wearing school outfits, and running around a corner to find a vast Khodynka Field in Moscow.
 * music video to → music video for
 * For preparation of the video, both Volkova and Katina had to cover themselves in dark-tanning lotion and required haircuts. → Preparation for the visual consisted of both Volkova and Katina covering themselves in dark-tanning lotion and getting haircuts.
 * shooting majority of the scenes → shooting the majority of the scenes
 * in order to shot scenes of traffic whilst the girls where also in the camera → in order to shot frames of traffic until the camera changed its focus on the girls again.
 * The video was then broadcast → remove "then" + broadcast for the first time
 * As always, I prefer editing the synopsis myself before passing article
 * :Ya Soshla s Uma" → please write the name correctly
 * the English version of → remove
 * as Shapovalov did not shoot a version with the girls singing in English. → this can be understand even without writing this sentence; remove please.
 * kissing and critics → kissing, and critics
 * of the video to → of the video for
 * for the Russian entry of 2000 → among the Russian nominees of 2000
 * groups first nomination → group's first nomination
 * Russia, similar to the reception → Russia similarly to the cultural impact
 * MTV Russia with the English version → Remove "with the English version" as it doesn't make any sense
 * link gay rights to LGBT rights
 * sexual references, but according to Jon Kutner writing in his book 1000 UK Number One Hits, the idea of school girls behind an iron fence courted controversy nevertheless. → sexual references. According to Jon Kutner, writing in his book..., the idea of school girsl behind an iron fence courted controversy nevertheless.
 * success sa les → commercial success
 * Second para > remix version by → remix version produced by
 * I prefer editing the rest of this section by myself before passing as it included many word repetitions and stuff like this, which would uncomfortably to write out here.

Promotion

 * the groups → the group's
 * Poland, amongst other → Poland among other
 * Parts of "Ya Soshla S Uma" was used during the groups Truth Tour at → Parts of... were used during t.A.T.u.'s Truth Tour in
 * where it was used as the closing number to the concert. → were it served as the concert's closing number
 * The single was included on the groups → The single was additionally included on the group's
 * show; Temnikova played as Volkova → show, with her also impersonating band member Volkova.

Credits and personnel

 * Remove "CD" from "CD liner notes".
 * Moscow, Russian → Moscow, Russia

Charts and sales

 * Source, which I have btw archived, only specifies the song as a hit, but does not say that it peaked atop the Russian Singles Chart. Thus, this statement should be accompanied by ref no. 20 as well.
 * Russian Singles Chart (NFPF) → Russian Singles Chart
 * Certification table > Remove "NFPF"
 * Add a None in place for the "Certification" section of the table

Outcome

 * This is perhaps one of your best music articles. It reads so fluent and beautifully! I've put this for 7 days in order to allow edits to the article. Don't forget to ping me when you're ready with this or have any questions concerning the review. Best regards, Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:52, 3 October 2016 (UTC)
 * Thank you very much for your time! All adjustments have been completed! CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk &middot;&#32;contribs} 04:34, 13 October 2016 (UTC)
 * Gladly passing! Congrats, Cartoon network freak (talk) 11:11, 13 October 2016 (UTC)