Talk:Yoga in advertising/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Vortex3427 (talk · contribs) 04:23, 12 December 2022 (UTC)

I'll review this. EDIT: I might be a little slow and will add review in segments.
 * Many thanks. Chiswick Chap (talk) 05:43, 12 December 2022 (UTC)


 * Sources all reliable or/and appropriately used.
 * Yoga teachers and studios increasingly sought to indicate their status with certificates of yoga teacher training and membership of professional organisations Is there any way you can source this information to an informational article? The current source is a page where Yoga Alliance instructs third parties on how to use their logo and is probably not a suitable citation.
 * Reworded and added citation.


 * first-generation yoga brands such as Iyengar Yoga being joined "and first-generation [...] were joined." Additionally, are these "brands" or "styles" (as the articles seem to say) of yoga?
 * Edited.


 * "mass-marketed to the general populace" Any reason for quotation marks to be here?
 * Attributed the quotation.


 * Other uses, on products unrelated to yoga, "Other uses for products?"
 * Done.


 * Dewikilink commercialisation of yoga as it just redirects to this page.
 * Done.


 * Link first instances of feminist, patriarchal capitalist consumer culture and materialism
 * Done.


 * Should Blaine explains that be there? It seems like a statement of fact.
 * It's an attribution, so the claim is not in Wikipedia's voice.


 * The image of Carl's Jr.'s breakfast foods might not be particularly relevant. I see that there was a comment about this in the edit history, but I'm not sure. I see there was a discussion about this before on the talk page. I'll revisit this later, but for now I'll strike it out.
 * It is exactly the point that the product is hardly yogic; caption rewritten to make this clear.


 * Amidst a stressful family life with a wailing baby and a clueless husband who relies on her for childcare, a businesswoman who has checked into her hotel room Seems unnecessarily lengthy. Maybe "In an advertisement, a businesswoman with a stressful family life..."
 * Done.


 * Blaine comments on the sexism implicit in the scene, and states that Commenting on the sexism implicit in the scene, Blaine says...
 * Done.


 * All images properly licensed.
 * Noted.


 * Before reading the article, I looked at the images. I found this caption ("Yoga has been used to sell lingerie, promising women the body of a Victoria's Secret model, over images of Lindsay Ellingson.") to be hard to understand without context. It could be split into two sentences, reading "|Yoga has been used to sell lingerie. A 2013 campaign featuring Lindsay Ellingson promised women the body of a Victoria's Secret model."
 * Done.

That's all from me! Ping me when you've responded to all of these. — V ORTEX  3427 (Talk!) 05:26, 12 December 2022 (UTC)
 * : all done to date. Chiswick Chap (talk) 10:21, 12 December 2022 (UTC)
 * @Chiswick Chap Thanks! Now passing. — V ORTEX  3427 (Talk!) 12:20, 12 December 2022 (UTC)