Talk:Yoga nidra/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Mike Christie (talk · contribs) 19:06, 10 September 2022 (UTC)

I'll review this. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 19:06, 10 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Many thanks. Chiswick Chap (talk) 20:12, 10 September 2022 (UTC)

Images are appropriately tagged. Earwig finds no issues; the overlap it does find is with a wiki that has evidently copied part of the article.
 * Noted.


 * The Godefroy PDF (FN 8) is hosted on myreussite.com. I can't tell if the site is reliable, but if it's just hosting the PDF then what makes Godefroy reliable?
 * We aren't relying on Christian Godefroy for anything more than a quotation from Boyes, but he was a published author of self-help books.


 * What makes the following reliable sources?
 * revue3emillenaire.com -- appears to be a blog
 * It's the website of a regularly published magazine, they are up to number 144 now.
 * healthysuccessreviews.com -- the link is broken and the site is down, at least temporarily; this archive about page doesn't give enough information for it to be clearly reliable.
 * Added archive link.
 * OK, but why is it reliable? Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 14:15, 11 September 2022 (UTC)
 * OK, cited YJ directly; it's modern yoga's journal of record.


 * yoganidranetwork.org -- seems to be a blog
 * Uma Dinsmore-Tuli is a well-known practitioner and spokesperson on yoga. She is discussed in detail in Theo Wildcroft's book Post-Lineage Yoga.
 * OK -- it's about what the posters of the blog believe, so it's a reliable source for that. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 14:15, 11 September 2022 (UTC)


 * I think the lead could be expanded by a sentence or two.
 * Done.


 * Lots of short paragraphs in the first couple of sections; can any of them be joined?
 * Done.


 * In Satyananda's eight stages, sankalpa appears to show up twice -- perhaps giving an English word for the second occurrence, as you've done for the first occurrence, would resolve this?
 * Satyananda had it in there twice, i.e. it was practised twice in every session. I've repeated the English translation.
 * I made the same edit to the text. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 14:15, 11 September 2022 (UTC)


 * The "Earlier practices" column in the table doesn't appear to be sourced -- as far as I can tell the source for the notes column doesn't always apply.
 * The material is carefully paraphrased from Ref [2]: EP#1 covered in its section on "Preparation". EP#2 covered in "Resolve". EP#3 covered in "Rotation of consciousness". EP#4 is blank. EP#5 covered in "Feelings and sensations". EP#6 covered in "Visualisation". EP #7 as per #2.
 * And I see 2 is cited in the title; I think I missed that. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 14:15, 11 September 2022 (UTC)

Spotchecks:
 * FN 22 cites "Based on this work, the Surgeon General of the United States Army endorsed Yoga Nidra as a complementary alternative medicine (CAM) for chronic pain in 2010": I can see it was endorsed as a CAM, but I can't find support for "Based on this work" -- can you provide a page number? And maybe add pages to the citation; this isn't easily verifiable as the document is not short.
 * Removed the phrase, added page range.


 * FN 13 cites "This state of consciousness is different from meditation, in which concentration on a single focus is required.": the source says it's different but doesn't talk about a single focus being required for meditation. That's not controversial but I imagine it's easy to cite, so I would add a cite for that.
 * Added.


 * FN 8 cites "In the book, Boyes makes use of relaxation techniques including the direction of attention to each part of the body": verified.
 * Noted.

-- Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 20:35, 10 September 2022 (UTC)

Just the one source question left. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 14:15, 11 September 2022 (UTC)

Last fix is good; passing. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 14:37, 11 September 2022 (UTC)