Talk:Yoko Matsuoka (writer)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Viriditas (talk · contribs) 02:06, 27 December 2023 (UTC)


 * Thanks for picking her article up . I look forward to working with you to improve it. SusunW (talk) 17:27, 28 December 2023 (UTC)

Criteria
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it well written?
 * A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
 * B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
 * 1) Is it verifiable with no original research?
 * A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
 * B. Reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):
 * C. It contains no original research:
 * D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
 * Earwig's Copyvio Detector: 15.3% (false positives)
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
 * B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
 * 1) Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Review complete: This is an amazing article. Thank you so much for the time, effort, and research you put into this.  I think with some restructuring and refocusing you will get it to featured status.  Although I have left many notes up above, and emphasized the potential for taking material out of existing sections and placing them in new or existing ones to improve readability, the only major reason I have put this article on hold is because I am confused by this statement (I have also noted it above): "The goals of the club were to fight against traditional subordination of women, work for women's socio-economic independence, and to oppose militarism, including mobilizing women to support war." I think this might be a simple typo, or alternately, perhaps something I have failed to understand in my reading.  The club was pacifist and opposed militarism, so mobilizing women to support war didn't make sense to me. I think the context makes it clear you intended to say "the club opposed militarism including the mobilization of women to support war", although even that kind of formulation is confusing to me.  Once that is fixed, rewritten or clarified, I will pass this article.  Again, thanks for such an incredible look into a slice of history that has been ignored for too long. Viriditas (talk) 06:30, 2 January 2024 (UTC)
 * Thank you so much for your comprehensive review. As always, I enjoyed working with you to improve the article. I may at some point decide to take her to FA and if so, will take on-board the restructuring you suggest. I think I clarified the troublesome sentence above and answered the remaining point, but if not, please ping me and I'll respond. It truly was a joy to research and write her article. To me, her life adds so much our understanding of the events that took place in her era and how they impacted the people trying to live through those times. I appreciate your help in improving the article very much. SusunW (talk) 15:47, 2 January 2024 (UTC)
 * It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
 * 1) Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Review complete: This is an amazing article. Thank you so much for the time, effort, and research you put into this.  I think with some restructuring and refocusing you will get it to featured status.  Although I have left many notes up above, and emphasized the potential for taking material out of existing sections and placing them in new or existing ones to improve readability, the only major reason I have put this article on hold is because I am confused by this statement (I have also noted it above): "The goals of the club were to fight against traditional subordination of women, work for women's socio-economic independence, and to oppose militarism, including mobilizing women to support war." I think this might be a simple typo, or alternately, perhaps something I have failed to understand in my reading.  The club was pacifist and opposed militarism, so mobilizing women to support war didn't make sense to me. I think the context makes it clear you intended to say "the club opposed militarism including the mobilization of women to support war", although even that kind of formulation is confusing to me.  Once that is fixed, rewritten or clarified, I will pass this article.  Again, thanks for such an incredible look into a slice of history that has been ignored for too long. Viriditas (talk) 06:30, 2 January 2024 (UTC)
 * Thank you so much for your comprehensive review. As always, I enjoyed working with you to improve the article. I may at some point decide to take her to FA and if so, will take on-board the restructuring you suggest. I think I clarified the troublesome sentence above and answered the remaining point, but if not, please ping me and I'll respond. It truly was a joy to research and write her article. To me, her life adds so much our understanding of the events that took place in her era and how they impacted the people trying to live through those times. I appreciate your help in improving the article very much. SusunW (talk) 15:47, 2 January 2024 (UTC)
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Review complete: This is an amazing article. Thank you so much for the time, effort, and research you put into this.  I think with some restructuring and refocusing you will get it to featured status.  Although I have left many notes up above, and emphasized the potential for taking material out of existing sections and placing them in new or existing ones to improve readability, the only major reason I have put this article on hold is because I am confused by this statement (I have also noted it above): "The goals of the club were to fight against traditional subordination of women, work for women's socio-economic independence, and to oppose militarism, including mobilizing women to support war." I think this might be a simple typo, or alternately, perhaps something I have failed to understand in my reading.  The club was pacifist and opposed militarism, so mobilizing women to support war didn't make sense to me. I think the context makes it clear you intended to say "the club opposed militarism including the mobilization of women to support war", although even that kind of formulation is confusing to me.  Once that is fixed, rewritten or clarified, I will pass this article.  Again, thanks for such an incredible look into a slice of history that has been ignored for too long. Viriditas (talk) 06:30, 2 January 2024 (UTC)
 * Thank you so much for your comprehensive review. As always, I enjoyed working with you to improve the article. I may at some point decide to take her to FA and if so, will take on-board the restructuring you suggest. I think I clarified the troublesome sentence above and answered the remaining point, but if not, please ping me and I'll respond. It truly was a joy to research and write her article. To me, her life adds so much our understanding of the events that took place in her era and how they impacted the people trying to live through those times. I appreciate your help in improving the article very much. SusunW (talk) 15:47, 2 January 2024 (UTC)