Talk:You Are the One (Argentine TV series)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 03:26, 22 January 2013 (UTC)

This has been waiting too long for a review, so I'll take a shot at it. Wizardman 03:26, 22 January 2013 (UTC)

Here are the issues I found:
 * The lead should be expanded.
 * "and ending January 9, 2007, and during its broadcast averaged 26.9 points overall rating." and ended; the last part is confusing as worded.
 * The second reference is a deadlink, and for that matter isn't needed, it can just be removed.
 * "The telenovela was produced by Pol-ka over a premise of Adrián Suar." Should be reworded. Did Suar create the concept or the show itself? Later sentences seem to make it sound like either.
 * "As it is customary in the production, he formulated it nearly six months before the premiere" The first part doesn't seem necessary, and it worded a bit oddly.
 * "This was a "rich man, owner of a company with unspecified business and former Formula 1 racer falls in love with a poor girl looking for work in his emporium"." Quote is unsourced.
 * "The scripts were requested to Ernesto Korovsky and Sebastian Parrotta," huh? Did the two request a script, or did Suar request to send them a script?
 * "The relationship between the two had surpassed the professional level, so Facundo Arana had spontaneously offered a guest appearance on the Russian series A ritmo de tango starred by Natalia Oreiro" Can just say Arana, also I'm confused as to what this has to do with the article.
 * "As in the aforementioned Muñeca Brava," avoid self-referencing the article
 * "The character of Natalia Oreiro," could be simplified and just say "Oreiro's character". Same with Arana in the next paragraph.
 * "The story begins with a fight of the female boxer Esperanza Muñoz," reword. The voice throughout this article is off actually, making this difficult to read.
 * "Despite the success, the telenovela tried several risks in the creative and production fields, most times with successful results." If it was successful, then despite's a bad word choice.
 * The last airings paragraph needs a cite.
 * "With an average 26,8 points of rating Sos mi vida ended as the most watched fiction in the television of Argentina so far;" sentence needs rewording, format feels backwards here.
 * The article needs a top-to-bottom copyedit.

I only skimmed after the Premise due to my difficulty actually getting through that section. Solely due to the length of time this has waited for a review I won't fail the article immediately, but I suggest you allow me to do so so that you can take the time and address everything, since I was surprised as how rough the prose was, right now it's not close to GA standards. Wizardman 04:33, 22 January 2013 (UTC)
 * Re-reading it over again, I am going to fail it per the above. It'll need some time to get near GA status. Wizardman  01:03, 23 January 2013 (UTC)