Talk:You Don't Know Anything/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 13:25, 13 April 2016 (UTC)

Hi there! I'm Cartoon network freak and here's my complete review for your GA nomination:

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 * Lead
 * link 'American' to Americans
 * The single was released -> It's the second time in a row that you use the word 'released'. Reword the sentence to "The single was made available for digital download."
 * song, influenced by -> song, also incorporating
 * Lyrically the song -> Lyrically, the track
 * "in the wrong" -> this doesn't make any sense.
 * "This Is the Day", it -> "This Is the Day", "You Don't Know Anything"
 * The track received -> It's the second time in a row you use 'track'; try 'recording'.
 * music critics who compared it to the works of My Bloody Valentine.-> music critics. It drew as well comparations to the works of My Bloody Valentine.

❌ This doesn't need to be changed as it is worded like this in several other GA articles
 * Infobox
 * For the recording places, change the style to the style used in Dance (Alexandra Stan song).

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 * Background and composition
 * Andy Chase; production -> Andy Chase. The production
 * Musically, the track is pop -> Musically, the song is a pop
 * record, that is heavy on guitars. -> recording, incorporating guitar sounds.
 * after "This Is the Day" -> after the latter track
 * exclusively in -> exclusively to
 * remove 'heavily'
 * their description -> their review
 * drums,"[4] while -> drums",[4] while
 * Jack Rabid, writing for AllMusic, -> AllMusic writer Jack Rabid
 * also compared it to the works of "MBV". -> drew comparations to the works of MBV.
 * "Ivy have an -> Ivy "have an

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 * Critical reception
 * Unlink 'music critics'
 * also enjoyed the track -> also enjoyed the recording
 * stand out";[4] while -> stand out",[4] while
 * declared the song -> named the song
 * Remove the 'However'.
 * unremarkably."[7] -> unremarkably".[7]

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 * Credits and personnel
 * Place the 'Credits and personnel adapted from "You Don't Know Anything" liner notes[8] and Andy Chase's discography.[9]' atop the topic, like there's done in Dance (Alexandra Stan song) + [8] and [9] should be both at the end of the clause.
 * Change 'Managment' to 'Recording'
 * Replace the semicolons in the following text with normal commas.
 * The Place, New York City; Duotone Studios, New York City; and Compositions, New York City -> The Place, Duotone Studios and Compositions in New York City.
 * I mention what I did here in the previous comment

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 * Josh Grier - legal -> ?? What does 'legal' have to stand for ??

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 * Release history
 * Unlink both Atlantic Records and CD single.

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 * References
 * Ref #3 : "ivy - Discography" -> Ivy discography; thebandivy -> The Band Ivy
 * Ref #4 : "Ivy – Apartment Life" -> Ivy – Apartment Life (album review)
 * Ref #8 : Change the style for the liner notes to that one used in Dance (Alexandra Stan song)
 * Ref #9 : andychase.com -> Andy Chase


 * Outcome: I put this on hold, so I give you 7 days time to solve this comments. Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 13:25, 13 April 2016 (UTC)
 * I fixed all of your recommended changes; feel free to re-review it when you get a chance! Thanks! Carbrera (talk) 23:44, 13 April 2016 (UTC)
 * Well done. Passed the article after I changed some things you forgot to edit. Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 11:56, 14 April 2016 (UTC)