Talk:Young Girls/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 19:59, 19 June 2016 (UTC)

Can you please wait until a discussion regarding the first review is finished? Thank You so much.
 * I thought the last review was abandoned? Carbrera (talk) 20:55, 19 June 2016 (UTC)
 * It was, move on with this review. Disregard my previous comment. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 21:00, 19 June 2016 (UTC)

Infobox

 * Is there anything known about the "Recorded" parameter?
 * If you want I can add the studio where it was recorded, but that's it. I have the liner notes of the album and it doesn't state the year, month or day. I have seen many interviews regarding this songs and nothing.


 * Rest is good

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 * "fifth and overall single" --> just "fifth overall single"?

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✅. I just reworded the last part of the first issue in this paragraph. Not sure if you want more? MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 09:48, 22 June 2016 (UTC)
 * ""Young Girls" charted in some countries, along with the released of its parent album, such as South Korea where it succeed by peaking a the top position," --> Reword please
 * Remove "sometimes" in between "was performed live" and "including on..." please
 * Nope! That works great! Thanks, Carbrera (talk) 18:02, 22 June 2016 (UTC).

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 * Please insert a comma immediately after "During a MTV interview"
 * Link "MTV" to its respective article please
 * "He feels that anyone can easily relate to the record..." --> Shouldn't it be in the past tense, as in "He felt that anyone can easily relate to the record..."?
 * Rest is great

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 * Please link "North Hollywood" and add "California" immediately following it, plus with a link to it

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 * Please remove the quotation marks before and after "Unorthodox Jukebox" and replace it by italicizing the album name
 * Link "iTunes" to its respective article please

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 * "The "pop anthem" is also influenced by a groove from Mars' debut studio album, noticeable on the backing vocals,[16]" --> Any groove in particular worth noting?
 * The reviewer is stating the groove is from "Doo-wops" he doesn't use such words, so I really can't add it here, otherwise WP: Original Research. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 09:58, 22 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Gotcha. Carbrera (talk) 18:02, 22 June 2016 (UTC)

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 * "are in the vein..." --> Isn't it "are in vein..."?
 * ✅. Neither, actually it is "in the same vein as". MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 10:01, 22 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Cool. Carbrera (talk) 18:02, 22 June 2016 (UTC)

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 * Please link "critics" to the article for "Music journalism"
 * Please insert a comma in between "Mars' performance on Saturday Night Live" and "it became available..."
 * "it became available on studio version..." --> "it became available as a studio version..."

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 * Shouldn't it just be "Paste's" since magazine isn't technically part of the title?

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 * "at number 102..." --> "at number 2..."
 * "it debut in France..." --> "it debuted in France..."

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 * "After its release as an official single, on November 26, 2013 in Australia, it was the most added track to radio stations, on the following week.[8][34]" --> Can you reword this?
 * "the record was certified Gold..." --> "the record was certified gold..."

Live performances and covers

 * Nada enchilada ;)

Music video
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 * Insert a comma in between "On December 12, 2012" and "it was reported for the first time..." please

Track listing

 * Good!

Credits and personnel

 * Flawless!

Charts and certifications

 * All good here! :)

Release

 * Good as well

End of GA Release:
Good work @MarioSoulTruthFan! Just some minor changes before passing. Contact me here by @PINGing me with any questions, comments, or concerns. Thank you very much. Good luck and cheers! Carbrera (talk) 22:56, 21 June 2016 (UTC).
 * amended the issues, please take a look at the re-wording and some questions I left. Thank you. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 10:26, 22 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Thank you for your quick feedback. Will be passing now, congrats! Cheers, Carbrera (talk) 18:02, 22 June 2016 (UTC).