Talk:Your Diary (video game)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: PresN (talk · contribs) 02:24, 6 October 2015 (UTC)

I wanted to review this article since it's been sitting in the queue for so long. Unfortunately, there are some severe structural issues with it; I'm going to list them below and place the article on hold, but hold off on doing a more in-depth review for e.g. grammar until they're fixed.
 * The Lead and Gameplay sections are alright; the problems start at Plot. Namely, that it's not really there- the plot section as it is covers the intro to the game but not the rest of the plot. That would be a blocking issue for any video game article, but is especially a problem for a visual novel.
 * The characters section starts talking about Your Diary +, but that game version is never discussed beforehand.
 * In fact, Your Diary + and Your Diary +H are only explained (briefly) in the very end of Development, even though they're talked about beforehand in the section. They really should have been introduced in Gameplay, and the differences expanded on in Development.
 * The Manga section doesn't discuss at all how the linear manga plot relates to the branching vn plot.
 * Reception is alright, though it's basically just one review of one version of the game.
 * Really, that's a problem throughout the article- there's just not a lot of detail or depth. The reader gets a very brief overview of the game, a bit of the plot, mentions the previous credits of the designers and the release dates, adds release dates of the music and manga, and one review. There's just not a lot of content. I was actually a bit surprised when I saw who nominated this article, because I've seen more in-depth articles that you've written.

Anyways, while I suspect that some of these issues may not be solvable in a short time span, I'm willing to give it (and you) the benefit of the doubt, and put this article on hold for a week rather than fail it. If you can get some of these bigger issues fixed, I'll come back for the smaller details. -- Pres N  02:24, 6 October 2015 (UTC)
 * It's been a week, and no progress has been made or discussed here. As such, I'm going to have to fail the GA review. Feel free to renominate the article whenever the above issues have been addressed. -- Pres N  19:24, 12 October 2015 (UTC)