Talk:Yulia Lipnitskaya/GA1

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Nominator: 19:36, 14 March 2024 (UTC)


 * @Riley1012 Here you go! Hope everything can beeee addressed! Arconning (talk) 15:01, 28 May 2024 (UTC)
 * @Arconning Thank you so much! I have addressed everything but have some notes below about the image issues. -Riley1012 (talk) 17:39, 28 May 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Arconning (talk · contribs) 14:19, 27 May 2024 (UTC)


 * I will be reviewing this article, comments will probably be finished in the next 72 hours! Arconning (talk · contribs)

Lead

 * Remove source since it's already used in the body.

Early life

 * Yulia Lipnitskaya was born on 5 June 1998, use full name.
 * 5 June 1998, add comma at end.
 * Lipnitskaya was raised by a single mother, Daniela Leonidovna Lipnitskaya, who gave her surname to Yulia. Lipnitskaya's father, Vyacheslav, was drafted into the Russian army while her mother was pregnant, and he chose not to return to the family afterward., could be formatted better to avoid passive voice but that's alright! Your choice to change or not.
 * Lipnitskaya was raised by a single mother, Daniela Leonidovna Lipnitskaya, who gave her surname to Yulia. Lipnitskaya's father, Vyacheslav, was drafted into the Russian army while her mother was pregnant, and he chose not to return to the family afterward., could be formatted better to avoid passive voice but that's alright! Your choice to change or not.
 * Lipnitskaya was raised by a single mother, Daniela Leonidovna Lipnitskaya, who gave her surname to Yulia. Lipnitskaya's father, Vyacheslav, was drafted into the Russian army while her mother was pregnant, and he chose not to return to the family afterward., could be formatted better to avoid passive voice but that's alright! Your choice to change or not.

Career

 * Milan, Italy, Quebec, ISU, hyperlink.
 * Lipnitskaya qualified for the Grand Prix Final in Sochi, Russia, but withdrew due to injury — during training on 28 November, she lost balance on the entry to a spin, split her chin and sustained a slight concussion., change to Lipnitskaya qualified for the Grand Prix Final in Sochi, Russia, but withdrew due to injury. During training on 28 November, she lost balance on the entry to a spin, split her chin, and sustained a slight concussion..
 * She became the youngest Olympic gold medalist under modern rules,, specify the sport since there are younger medalists in other Olympic sports.
 * Her coach Tutberidze said that the Russian media interest was excessive— listening devices were found in the locker room in Moscow and reporters followed both the skater and her relatives., change to Her coach Tutberidze said that the Russian media interest was excessive—listening devices were found in the locker room in Moscow, and reporters followed both the skater and her relatives..
 * compete at 2014 Cup of China, compete at the 2014 Cup of China.
 * In May 2015, Lipnitskaya started working with a new choreographer Marina Zueva, add commas after choreographer and Zueva.
 * finish at 2015 Finlandia Trophy., at 2015 Skate America, add the before years.
 * 1994 Olympic, hyperlink.
 * Insbruck, Austria,, spell as Innsbruck instead and use Innsbruck, Austria as the hyperlink to combine.
 * Skate America and Rostelecom Cup., from Skate America after a recurring injury., add the before competition names.
 * Valentin Piseyev, President of the Russian Figure Skating Federation,, reword to President of the Russian Figure Skating Federation, Valentin Piseyev,, but any is okay!
 * April and that August's announcement did not come as a surprise., maybe add quotation marks or reword as it's a bit informal.
 * finish at 2015 Finlandia Trophy., at 2015 Skate America, add the before years.
 * 1994 Olympic, hyperlink.
 * Insbruck, Austria,, spell as Innsbruck instead and use Innsbruck, Austria as the hyperlink to combine.
 * Skate America and Rostelecom Cup., from Skate America after a recurring injury., add the before competition names.
 * Valentin Piseyev, President of the Russian Figure Skating Federation,, reword to President of the Russian Figure Skating Federation, Valentin Piseyev,, but any is okay!
 * April and that August's announcement did not come as a surprise., maybe add quotation marks or reword as it's a bit informal.
 * Skate America and Rostelecom Cup., from Skate America after a recurring injury., add the before competition names.
 * Valentin Piseyev, President of the Russian Figure Skating Federation,, reword to President of the Russian Figure Skating Federation, Valentin Piseyev,, but any is okay!
 * April and that August's announcement did not come as a surprise., maybe add quotation marks or reword as it's a bit informal.
 * April and that August's announcement did not come as a surprise., maybe add quotation marks or reword as it's a bit informal.
 * April and that August's announcement did not come as a surprise., maybe add quotation marks or reword as it's a bit informal.

Personal life

 * Their daughter Katalina, add comma after daughter and Katalina.

Records and achievements

 * Hopefully add note for 11 December 2011.

Programs

 * Love it!

Competitive highlights

 * Remove image and move to Awards as the image shows the Russian Order of Friendship. Change hopefully.
 * Unfortunately the awards section isn't large enough for the image, it bleeds into the references section if it's placed there.

Detailed results

 * "ISU personal best scores in the +3/-3 GOE System " thingy is great!
 * The images aren't formatted well, hopefully fix the huge gap between the titles and the action sections! Maybe make them side by side at the start then let the results flourish. Example can be found in University of Santo Tomas.
 * Does it look better now? I put the images by the year when the event happened. Unfortunately cant put images at the top because it'll mess up the spacing of the ISU personal best scores in the +3/-3 GOE System table
 * Make the junior results first rather than the senior.

Awards

 * Make a separate section for reference 96. Example: Laufey (singer)
 * Reiterating to move File:Vladimir Putin and Julia Lipnitskaia 24 February 2014 cropped.jpg here instead.
 * See above.
 * See above.

Images

 * Images have proper licenses and have suitable captions.

Refs

 * Conditional pass on sources using TASS. Generally unreliable on government-based topics but since it's about a skater...

Spotchecks

 * Pass.

Misc.

 * No ongoing edit war, neutral and focused on the topic.