Talk:Yunnan nuthatch/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: AryKun (talk · contribs) 05:15, 1 January 2022 (UTC)


 * Hey, I'll get to this. AryKun (talk) 05:15, 1 January 2022 (UTC)

Lead

 * Bird doesn't need to be linked.


 * "and it occurs in pine forests at altitudes of up to 4,000 m (13,000 ft)" → Unnecessary, mentioned later.


 * 12 cm → Add convert template.


 * Also mention the weight, perhaps?


 * "It has a fine white eyebrow, distinct when the plumage is fresh, and surmounting a pronounced black eye line." → "It has a fine white eyebrow above a black eyestripe, which is distinct when the plumage is fresh."


 * Could the spelling of gray and the order of blue-gray be made consistent?


 * "This blue-grey bird can be up to 12 centimetres (4.7 in) long, has a distinctive white eyebrow, and exhibits a small degree of sexual dimorphism." → Already mentioned, remove.


 * "It is a noisy bird, producing" → "A noisy bird, it produces"


 * Insects doesn't need to be linked.


 * "and it is generally rare but can be locally common." → This is best mentioned next to the info about conservation.


 * Instead of mentioning each county in the lead, perhaps you could just say "In the prefectures of Yunnan, Sichuan, and Guizhou in southwest China."

Taxonomy and systematics

 * The picture of the protologue adds little value, beside sandwiching text, so it should be removed.
 * Removed


 * Link described.


 * You can remove the middle names in Alfred Woodrow Stanley Wingate.


 * Link the rank Captain to the appropriate page.


 * The next sentence doesn't really make sense, considering that subgenera are groupings below genera, so being in Micrositta and Sitta at the same time isn't an issue. Was Micrositta a separate genus at the time? If not, perhaps just remove " although nuthatch species are now generally grouped together under genus Sitta."
 * Removed


 * "According to the International Ornithological Congress and ornithologist Alan P. Peterson," → Unnecessary, no authority seems to recognize any subspecies.
 * Removed


 * " In 2014, Eric Pasquet and colleagues published a phylogeny showing the relationship between Micrositta species, and found the Yunnan nuthatch to be the most basal species of the group." → Remove, mentioned in next paragraph.
 * Removed


 * "The canadensis group of species includes six species, which are also those of what is sometimes treated as the subgenus Sitta(Micrositta), the Yunnan nuthatch, the red-breasted nuthatch (S. canadensis), the Chinese nuthatch (S. villosa), the Corsican nuthatch (S. whiteheadi), the krüper's nuthatch (S. krueperi) and the Algerian nuthatch (S. ledanti)." → "The canadensis group, which is also sometimes called the subgenus Micrositta, contains six species – the Yunnan nuthatch, the red-breasted nuthatch (S. canadensis), the Chinese nuthatch (S. villosa), the Corsican nuthatch (S. whiteheadi), Krüper's nuthatch (S. krueperi) and the Algerian nuthatch (S. ledanti)."
 * Reworded


 * "believe that the Yunnan nuthatch acts as a link" → "thought that the Yunnan nuthatch formed a link"
 * Replaced


 * "at the same time that it seemed rather close to the canadensis group of which it formed a representative close to the ancestral state, than this either in terms of its distribution and its plumage" → "simultaneously that it was very closely related to the canadensis group, of which it was a basal representative in terms of distribution and plumage."
 * Replaced


 * "In 1957, Charles Vaurie proposed bringing the species of the white-tailed nuthatch (S. himalayensis) closer." → What exactly does this mean?
 * Reworded properly
 * I still can't figure out what this means, but from the source, I think you mean that Vaurie postulated that the white-tailed nuthatch was the Yunnan nuthatch's closest relative. Also, the link in the ref for that is broken, replace it with this.
 * Replaced link and reworded a bit. Your wordings makes more sense. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 2001:4455:1A9:E100:187A:6121:3FA3:9FAD (talk) 11:44, 6 January 2022 (UTC)


 * "species of the group of Sitta canadensis" → "species in the canadensis group"
 * Replaced


 * "cytochrome-b of" → Perhaps remove this, too much detail.
 * Reworded


 * "basic of the species this group" → "basal of the species in this group"
 * Replaced

Description

 * Any other images of the species? One here would be nice.


 * "lower parts" → Be consistent in using either this or underparts, and link here, as this is the first usage.
 * Replaced into underparts


 * I think the measurements are a bit overkill, probably the beak and tarsus measurements can be removed.
 * Removed


 * "It exhibits" → "The species exhibits" We use nouns at the start of a paragraph
 * Replaced


 * "Tail and wing feathers" → "The tail and wing feathers"
 * Replaced


 * "measuring around 12 cm (4.7 in) in length" → "measuring around 12 cm (4.7 in) in length on average" This should also be done for the lead.
 * Replaced


 * The spelling of molt isn't consistent, standardize it to "moult".
 * Replaced

Distribution and habitat

 * "South-West China" → "Southwest China"
 * Replaced


 * You alternate between counties and prefectures here, please mention just the prefectures or all the counties.
 * Replaced


 * "It exists in" → "It inhabits"
 * Replaced

Relationship with humans

 * In relationship with humans → Relationship with humans
 * Replaced


 * "post office" → "postal service", and consider linking to China Post
 * Replaced


 * Cabot Tragopan, Biddulph Podoce, Taiwanese Pirolle → Cabot's tragopan, Biddulph's ground jay, Taiwan blue jay
 * Replaced


 * Add nationality and occupation for Zheng Zuoxin
 * Added


 * The abbreviation for the IUCN is unnecessary, as it isn't used.
 * Removed

Images

 * All the images could use alt text


 * In the caption for the first image, the period should be removed as the caption is a sentence fragment
 * Removed


 * Italicize Pinus yunnanensis