Talk:Zackray/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Namcokid47 (talk · contribs) 18:30, 2 October 2020 (UTC)

I've looked over this and your other articles relating to eSports players, and honestly I think I'm going to just fail these. I've been hesitant to do this for a while as I wanted to see if somebody else would take these, but it looks like that isn't the case. None of these articles I think are good enough to be GAs (some I don't think are even notable enough to have an article to begin with). They don't pass the GA criteria for a multitude of reasons - for Zackray, in particular, here's why I've decided to fail it:

These articles need a lot of work if they want to be GAs. I would definitely have somebody go and copyedit all of these, and replace all the unreliable sources with ones that are usable. Namcokid 47  (Contribs) 18:30, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) Many of these sources are very dubious and I don't see them as being reliable. EventHubs is listed as unreliable on WP:VG/S, I have no idea what The Game Haus is, and Hotspawn.com seems dubious.
 * 2) A lot of the writing is not good. While it's better than some of the others, it's still got a lot of choppy sentences and unnecessary information (like, do we really need to know the release date for Super Smash Bros. Ultimate?)
 * 3) How come the lead is so short? There's quite a lot of info in the article yet the lead just one paragraph and a few additional sentences.