Talk:Zangeki no Reginleiv/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 08:07, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

Will be reviewing this article as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 08:08, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * "though the concept was pitched before the Wii's launch." - pitched to Nintendo

Gameplay

 * "Each ascending difficulty is unlocked upon clearing a mission on ther next lowest. - typo
 * "The game is broken into missions," - divided can be used
 * "Gameplay take place" - takes place or occurs
 * "the player selects up to two weapons for the character" - the character to use
 * "but others allow either Freyr or Freyja to be used.[6][3][7]" - refs in numerical order please
 * Wikilink health to Health (game terminology) and magic points to Magic (game terminology)

Development

 * "Nintendo producer Hitoshi Yamagami was wary of such a large pitch, so agreed" - so he agreed
 * "but as the team got to grips with the Wii hardware," - try to avoid idioms such as the one highlighted in bold per MOS:IDIOM
 * "Illustrator Haccan, who designed the main characters, was brought in as art director Masatsugu Igarashi liked his human character designs." - director because Masatsugu Igarashi

Release

 * "It was re-introduced under its official title in November 2009. The game released in Japan on February 11, 2010." - how about merging these two sentences and shortening them accordingly?
 * "or trail version of a game." - typo; should be spelt as trial
 * Wikilink Virtual Console

Reception

 * "with initial sales of nearly 23,000 units" - almost
 * "praised the implementation of Wii MotionPlus and the general flow of gameplay, " - of the Wii MotionPlus
 * "to justify its use of Wii MotionPlus" - same issue as above
 * "In a lost of ancitipated Wii titles," - think you mean list

Reference

 * Should not Siliconera in Reference 2 be listed as the work and not the publisher to be in line with other formatting of that title in the article?

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address/query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 17:22, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I think I've addressed all your above concerns. The Haccan bit needed rewriting, as Igarashi was the art director, but the way it was phrased because didn't communicate it properly. --ProtoDrake (talk) 17:51, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 18:26, 27 April 2020 (UTC)