Talk:Zavier Simpson/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 07:58, 14 April 2018 (UTC)

Reviewing this as part of a GA sweep. Comments will appear soon. MWright96 (talk) 07:58, 14 April 2018 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
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Lead

 * Try and start every other sentence in the lead with "Simpson" instead of "he"
 * Fixed.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:21, 17 April 2018 (UTC)

Early life

 * "he worked out for between 1 and a half and two hours" - one
 * O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:35, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
 * "On December 15 Simpson broke two-time Ohio Mr. Basketball Greg" - a comma is needed between "15" and "Simpson
 * O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:37, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
 * "On February 2 Simpson posted 65 points against Fremont Ross." - same as above
 * O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:37, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
 * "On September 9, 2015, 'Xavier Simpson committed to Michigan." - Simpson committed to playing college basketball for Michigan.
 * Thx.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:39, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
 * "Simpson earned the 2015 Ohio Associated Press Division I Player of the Year as a junior and the 2014 Ohio Division III state championship as a sophomore" - These two awards needed to be swapped so the are in chronological order
 * Fixed.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:42, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
 * Scout.com, Rivals.com and 247Sports.com need to be wikilinked
 * O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:44, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
 * "were all named to the 2015–16 Associated Press Ohio high school Division I boys basketball all-state 1st team." - 2015-16 Associated Press Ohio High School Division I Boys Basketball All-State 1st Team.
 * O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:47, 17 April 2018 (UTC)

Sophomore season

 * "Simpson posted his career high 16 points in contest against top 5 rated opponents" - rewrite to Simpson posted a career-high 16 points it contest against his top 5 rated opponents.
 * I think you may have posted some sort of typo because it seems better to me as it is.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:56, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
 * Okay MWright96 (talk) 18:30, 18 April 2018 (UTC)
 * Wikilink AP Poll and Coaches Poll the first time both are mentioned
 * O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:59, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
 * Link steal, rebound and assist too Steal (basketball), Rebound (basketball) and Assist (basketball, respectively for those unfamiliar ith basketball
 * Done.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:03, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
 * "Although Simpson averaged only 7.3 points per game for the season," - I believe just would be better than "only"
 * O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:06, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
 * "as the game was the championship game of the 2018 Big Ten Conference Men's Basketball Tournament." - reword this sentence so it reads as as they contested the championship game of the 2018 Big Ten Conference Men's Basketball Tournament
 * I have clarified the statement, which must have been confusing.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:09, 17 April 2018 (UTC)