Talk:Zong massacre/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 23:52, 26 January 2013 (UTC)

I'll be glad to take this review--or at least as glad as possible with the grim subject matter. In the next few days I'll do a close readthrough, noting here any issues I can't immediately take care of myself, and then go to the criteria checklist. Thanks in advance for your work on this one! -- Khazar2 (talk) 23:52, 26 January 2013 (UTC)

Initial readthrough
On a first pass, this looks like very strong stuff: well written, sourced, and organized. I don't anticipate any serious problems in this being promoted to GA.

A few points where the article could use more clarity:
 * "The crew could not have known that the island was at that point in the possession of France" -- who would the crew have assumed the island belonged to--indigenous peoples, Spain... ? A bit of historical context would help make the issue clear.
 * "At this point, James Kelsall claimed that there" -- ambiguous-- does this mean "this is the point that he claimed this" or "James Kelsall later claimed that at this point"?
 * "responds to the story of an enslaved African" -- in what way does the novel respond to this story? Would it be accurate to simply say the novel "tells the story of..."?

Other points:
 * If The Slave Ship is notable enough to have its own article, it seems worth including a sentence or two in the text that the event inspired this painting.

Take a look at the above and let me know what you think. Again, thanks for your work!