Template:Did you know nominations/Animal aggression

Animal aggression
Created/expanded by Brambleberry of RiverClan (talk). Self nom at 16:12, 28 September 2012 (UTC)
 * ... that a family in Whitehorse, Canada was afraid of animal aggression to the point where they walked their children to school fully armed?


 * Pictogram voting keep.svg Very long, well-cited, completely new article. The hook is OK and is confirmed by an off-line reference, which is AGF. --Peter I. Vardy (talk) 15:19, 4 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Okay, thank you. I haven't had internet access in three days, so sorry for any lateness. Brambleberry of RiverClanmeow 19:26, 4 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Symbol question.svg The hook isn't quite confirmed in the article. While the hook says "a family", the article is much less specific, merely saying "parents", "children", and "juveniles". Reading the article, I thought this could have been a group of parents guarding their children -- several families, not just one. If the original, offline source refers to a single family in Whitehorse, then the article should make it clear that only one family was involved. If it refers to more than one family, then the hook needs to be modified. BlueMoonset (talk) 22:31, 4 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Sorry; when I reviewed this, I thought that "parents" and "their children" was near enough to "a family". I'm sure this can be easily adjusted. --Peter I. Vardy (talk) 08:06, 5 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Thank you for bringing this to my attention. It has been fixed. Brambleberry of RiverClanmeow 21:14, 5 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Suggesting a slightly different wording for clarification:
 * ALT1: ... that a family in Whitehorse, Canada, was so afraid of animal aggression that the parents went fully armed to walk their children to school? —BlueMoonset (talk) 20:36, 6 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Pictogram voting keep.svg for ALT1. The ext of the article has been modified to make the hook fit closer, and the new wording is more concise. --Peter I. Vardy (talk) 10:08, 7 October 2012 (UTC)