Template:Did you know nominations/Anne Henrietta Martin

Anne Henrietta Martin
Created/expanded by Rosiestep (talk). Self nom at 03:23, 19 May 2012 (UTC)
 * ... that Anne Henrietta Martin of Nevada was the first woman to run for the United States Senate?
 * Reviewed: Blue Gum High Forest
 * Symbol question.svg Recent article, length and photo fine. Hook cited. Did small copy edits. Interesting article and source material. Several suggestions: 1. The lead (or lede) is often without inline citations. However, if part of it is cited, all of it should be. 2. I read all of your source material, and it is ample. But when I read through your article and then tried to match up your facts with the citations that you gave, it became evident that the citations were incomplete, although I do believe that all (or almost all) of the material is there. 3. I encountered confusion when I read your article for two reasons: a) it's not in chronological order. Where career starts (1897) and Anne is made head of the history dept, everything after that should go in that section, even if she did further studying. Also, you have her writing 1944 and 1948 articles in the same breath as moving to England as a young woman. b) In the lead, you mention that she ran for the senate, but you never mention it in the body of the article. Also, in the lead, the phrase "representing Nevada in 1918" implies that she won, which she didn't. 4. Details matter: In ref 1, page is given as 24–. That's not really an option. In this case, you used ref 1 as a citation twice. I found the first fact on p 24 and the 2nd on p 25. If you continued to use ref 1 for only 2 citations (and I don't think that you should), it could be written p 24-25. 5. Similarly, ref 2, for page you wrote 128–. The article is 126-129. And the facts are on 127-128. So, 128– just doesn't work. 6. You cite ref 4 for Anne's father's dates as senator 1876-1878. However, the source material indicates 1875-1879. 7. For ref 5, you gave the URL for "about this book," not the actual page of the book with the source material. And so on. One other thing, for DYK when referring to the article that you reviewed, you link to the nomination, not the article itself. Anyway, in summary, I think that you have the makings of a decent article here, and it's just going to require some detail work. Anne (talk) 06:37, 21 May 2012 (UTC)
 * Hi, Rosiestep. Would you like to continue this nomination? Anne (talk) 15:05, 1 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Hi Anne - Sorry for my delay, but just now am reading your comments; there wasn't a note on my talkpage (or did I overlook it?) and I must have missed seeing this on my watchlist. --Rosiestep (talk) 15:59, 2 June 2012 (UTC)
 * I ce the article; I think all the issues were addressed. --Rosiestep (talk) 17:53, 2 June 2012 (UTC)
 * ALT1: ... that after picketing for suffrage in front of the White House in 1917, Anne Henrietta Martin was sentenced to Occoquan Workhouse before being pardoned by President Wilson? --Rosiestep (talk) 18:04, 2 June 2012 (UTC)

A little excessive this review isn't it Anne?♦ Dr. Blofeld  13:30, 3 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Yes it is, Doctor for a DYK. Anyway &mdash; Symbol confirmed.svg - good to go! --Thine Antique Pen (talk • contributions) 13:54, 3 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Symbol question.svg Nevertheless, I believe it is up to Anne to confirm that her issues, especially with the reference citations, have been addressed. It hasn't even been 24 hours; she deserves a chance to respond, having taken the time to review this in the first place. BlueMoonset (talk) 15:48, 3 June 2012 (UTC)

Just comment about watchlist, Is it all DYK template created, automatically in our (as a creator) watchlist? isn't it Rosiestep? &#42;Annas* (talk) 03:25, 6 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Actually, I don't think it's excessive, just thorough. Trying to be helpful and specific to cut down on DYK noms languishing for weeks in queues. Will start second review now. Anne (talk) 16:47, 6 June 2012 (UTC)
 * It's great to have articles about strong women, but I don't think we should rush articles before they're ready. Despite appearance of ref#6, offline. Ref#5 not working. Article appears improved. Almost half of info in lead not in body of article, but lead not cited. Added 2 citations. Also added 3 inline citations to 1st sent 3rd para career, and deleted 1912 due to disagreement between sources. Fixed page number. I liked both hooks. Thank you for your article. Pictogram voting keep.svg Anne (talk) 18:26, 6 June 2012 (UTC)