Template:Did you know nominations/Ben Maidment


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The result was: promoted by Allen3 talk 10:51, 3 April 2014 (UTC)

Ben Maidment

 * ... that Jersey had points deducted for failing to have Ben Maidment serve a ban during a cancelled friendly?
 * Reviewed: Wankard Pooser

Moved to mainspace by The C of E (talk). Self nominated at 09:36, 12 March 2014 (UTC).


 * Symbol question.svg The following has been checked in this review by Matty.007
 * QPQ taken care of
 * Article created by The C of E on 12 March 2014, and has 1932 characters of readable prose
 * Every paragraph is sourced
 * Dup det found no copyvios
 * Article is neutral
 * Hook is interesting and well sourced. I would link Jersey to Jersey R.F.C., to give context, or give an alt where the nominated article is linked first in the hook. Thanks, Mat  ty  .  007  19:13, 14 March 2014 (UTC)
 * Done that.  The C of E God Save the Queen!  ( talk ) #
 * Symbol confirmed.svg OK dokes, good to go. Thanks, Mat  ty  .  007  19:38, 14 March 2014 (UTC)


 * Symbol possible vote.svg I don't see how this hook makes sense, so I've pulled this back from prep and struck it: how can someone serve a ban during a cancelled match of any kind, friendly or not? The problem was that he didn't serve a ban, and that ban had been planned for a friendly that was cancelled. This is not the same thing. Furthermore, the entire three sentences explaining all this is only sourced at the end, so some of the facts are not directly sourced, and need to be. Further, those sentences need to be copyedited. Please address these issues, including supplying an ALT hook. Thanks. BlueMoonset (talk) 18:59, 15 March 2014 (UTC)
 * Alt1 ... that Jersey were deducted points because of Ben Maidment failing to serve a ban?  The C of E God Save the Queen!  ( talk ) 19:09, 15 March 2014 (UTC)


 * What does "were deducted points" mean? What makes ALT1 interesting? What sport is involved? Hooks need to be understandable by people reading it. Remember rule C2: Don't wrongly assume that everyone worldwide knows what country or sport you're talking about. In this case, it isn't even clear that a sport is involved, much less which sport or that these are (league?) championship points that (I think) will affect the final standings when the season is over. Please try again. BlueMoonset (talk) 19:56, 15 March 2014 (UTC)
 * Alt2: ... that Jersey RFC were deducted RFU Championship points because of Ben Maidment failing to serve a ban?  The C of E God Save the Queen!  ( talk ) 07:18, 16 March 2014 (UTC)


 * Proposing ALT3, since ALT2 still doesn't use the key word "rugby" anywhere:
 * ALT3: ... that Ben Maidment failure to serve a rugby union league ban resulted in Jersey R.F.C. losing two RFU Championship points?
 * This puts Ben front and center, gets "rugby" in there as originally requested, and restores the periods in the team's name (which are used in Ben's article and the team article).
 * Symbol redirect vote 4.svg New reviewer needed to check ALT3. BlueMoonset (talk) 13:23, 21 March 2014 (UTC)
 * Symbol confirmed.svg ALT3 is verified and cited inline. Matty's previous review of newness, length, no close paraphrasing, etc., still holds. ALT3 good to go. Yoninah (talk) 00:29, 3 April 2014 (UTC)