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Canis Minor

 * ... that the mythical owners of Canis Minor have included Orion, Icarius and Tobias?
 * ALT:... that among the mythical owners of Canis Minor were Orion, Icarius and Tobias?
 * Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Honeypot Wood

Created/expanded by Casliber (talk). Self nom at 04:38, 27 May 2012 (UTC)


 * Pictogram voting keep.svg The article is long enough, well-sourced, and has been expanded more then fivefold (from 1082B to 5679B) in the last five days. Hook sources are unavailable online and are assumed on good faith. A rewrite for the hook is suggested to avoid ambiguity. Cinosaur (talk) 06:05, 27 May 2012 (UTC)
 * (wow, that was quick!) errr, I don't see the ambiguity...can you please clarify? happy to tweak just not sure what/how yet. Casliber (talk · contribs) 06:49, 27 May 2012 (UTC)
 * Is the perceived ambiguity too ambiguous? :) Anyhow, I thought it ambiguous to say that "mythical owners have included X, Y, and Z", because it sounds like the mythical owners have done the act of inclusion of X, Y, and Z themselves. This is how I initially read it, particularly misled by the perfect continuous tense "have included", until I reached the end of the sentence and understood that X, Y, and Z were simply among them, which was the hook's intended meaning. The suggested ALT above attempts to fix this and simplify the hook. Regards, Cinosaur (talk) 07:15, 27 May 2012 (UTC)