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Charles Henry Bond, Waitt & Bond

 * ... that in addition to co-founding the Waitt & Bond cigar manufacturing company, Charles Henry Bond was also an art patron who provided funding to Geraldine Farrar?
 * Reviewed: Daniel Dougherty

Created by Hirolovesswords (talk). Self nominated at 23:00, 21 January 2014 (UTC).


 * Symbol confirmed.svg (part 1) – Waitt & Bond first: the article is obviously long enough. It establishes part 1 of the hook about its founding, backed up by sources. I did not find any copyright issues, but there are some gaps I would like plugged:
 * The article is too short for the number of sections in it. Suggest that some sections be merged.
 * I think it's important to mention in the lead and in the body just exactly why the company is notable.
 * The article omits the legal form. It was 'formed' in 1870, yet there were stockholders only later. Thus need to mention it was incorporated in 1902 (or whenever).
 * The role of the unions seems a bit abrupt, it should be mentioned that it was in the grips of the unions (called "bulwark of the unions" according to One Cigar) --  Ohc  ¡digame! 12:49, 25 January 2014 (UTC)


 * Symbol confirmed.svg (part 2) – Charles Henry Bond: the article is obviously long enough. On-line scanned source substantiates the hook about his sponsorship of Farrar. I did not find any copyright issues, but I have the following suggestions:
 * As with the W&B article, the article is too short for the number of sections in it.
 * 'Personal life' section contains five paragraphs/sentences, each starting with "Bond". Merge them and/or jumble them up a bit so that this looks less odd. --  Ohc  ¡digame! 13:29, 25 January 2014 (UTC)


 * Suggest ALT1: ... that Charles Henry Bond, co-founder of cigar manufacturer Waitt & Bond, was also an arts patron who sponsored Geraldine Farrar? --  Ohc  ¡digame! 13:37, 25 January 2014 (UTC)


 * I have made changes to both articles that address most of the concerns here. I have no objections to the alternate hook. --Hirolovesswords (talk) 19:58, 25 January 2014 (UTC)