Template:Did you know nominations/David Asante-Apeatu


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The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 13:35, 28 July 2017 (UTC)

David Asante-Apeatu

 * ... that after spending time in Sarajevo, Lyon and The Gambia teaching, chasing criminals and serial killers, David Asante-Apeatu is now the highest ranking police officer in Ghana? Source: this and that
 * ALT1 ... that David Asante-Apeatu, a former inspector of factories in Ghana, oversaw a police operation that led to the seizure of 588 kg of cocaine worth $38 million?
 * Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Drop the Dip

Created by Crosstemplejay (talk). Self-nominated at 12:36, 28 June 2017 (UTC).


 * Oppose The article reads like a CV. Furthermore, the proposed hook is poor. The article doesn't mention teaching, it trivialises police work, and as if that wasn't enough, the hook is essentially telling us that a policeman does police work and has a rank. You don't say. --Dweller (talk) Become old fashioned! 09:39, 13 July 2017 (UTC)
 * Though I do not agree with your assertion that the article reads like a CV, I have reworded certain sections of it and proposed an alternative hook. It is sometimes very difficulty writing an African article to be like a Western article due largely to lack of extensive coverage on penitent issues and individuals. Please go through and offer your opinion. Cross Temple   Jay  16:38, 13 July 2017 (UTC)
 * The article's improving but I strongly suggest you ask someone to do a third-party copyedit - I don't think it's the coverage, more the writing style. I still don't find the hook very 'hooky'. I'll let one of the DYK regulars guide you better on that. I've struck the "oppose" - it seems a naughty word at DYK --Dweller (talk) Become old fashioned! 10:11, 14 July 2017 (UTC)
 * Symbol confirmed.svg This article is new enough and long enough. It is neutral and I have rewritten a couple of sentences to avoid close paraphrasing. I have also tweaked the ALT1 hook which is more interesting than the original. QPQ has been done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:12, 28 July 2017 (UTC)