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Ferdinando Sardella

 * ... that Ferdinando Sardella doctoral thesis on the "forefather" (pictured) of the Hare Krishna movement received the academic award for "outstanding research in religion"?
 * Reviewed: Drama dari Krakatau

Created by Cinosaur (talk). Self nominated at 10:02, 20 January 2014 (UTC).


 * Symbol possible vote.svg The article is new and long enough. Hook is cited inline in AGF for Swedish language. QPQ review is done. Following issues need to be cleared:
 * The image is ©-free but is not included in the article.
 * The lede says he was the director of the Forum for South Asia Studies, however after the inline sources he is the coordinator. IMO, those positions aren't the same.
 * The first and second sentences of the section "Academic background" are taken almost verbatim from the source cited. Moreover, "Duplication Detector" bot finds many matched phrases, i.e. with Ferdinando Sardella, Senior lecturer, History of Religions.
 * The sentence for the hook fact on "outstanding research into religion" was repeated in the article unnecessarily. Removing wouldn't risk the prose limit for DYK eligibility. --CeeGee 20:18, 5 February 2014 (UTC)
 * Oops! I see now that the nom was reviewed earlier, see User talk:Cinosaur. However, the correspondence doesn't show on this page. Mysterious! Maybe, someone can explain what's going on. --CeeGee 20:28, 5 February 2014 (UTC)


 * CeeGee, the nomination wasn't reviewed earlier—it looks like someone was just giving off-line advice to the nominator. Yours is the only review so far. However, I'm puzzled by your use of the "again" icon for your nomination. That should only be used if you're calling for a different reviewer. The icon is supposed to show the current review status: given the severity of the issues you've found—close paraphrasing is by definition significant—I'd use the slash icon. The question mark is only used when there's only one or two minor issues. BlueMoonset (talk) 00:08, 6 February 2014 (UTC)
 * BlueMoonset! Thanks a lot for your comment and your very useful advice on reviewing details. I changed my earlier reviewing mark accordingly. The nominator has let me know he's gonna take action soon. --CeeGee 07:52, 6 February 2014 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the thorough review, CeeGee. Addressing your comments (numbered above and here for convenience):
 * Included image, with caption.
 * Sardella was both the director of FSAS and its coordinator until February 1, 2014. Included sources for both former positions, fixed the lede, cited with quotes in refs.
 * Dry academic sources leave very little room for rephrasing, but I've done my best.
 * Removed the tautological "outstanding research into religion" clause, merged Awards with Academic background.
 * Anything else? Regards, Cinosaur (talk) 09:06, 6 February 2014 (UTC)
 * Article includes the image of hook now. However, IMO its quality won't qualify it to appear on the main page.
 * Lede is corrected.
 * I reworded the first two sentences of the said section because there was still close similarity. Other issues were cleared.
 * Repeated info removed.
 * The newly added navboxes are superfluous. None of them refers to Ferdinando Sardella. I recommend to remove them.
 * Symbol confirmed.svg Good to go now. --CeeGee 13:50, 6 February 2014 (UTC)