Template:Did you know nominations/Finn M. W. Caspersen

Finn M. W. Caspersen

 * ... that in 1982 financier and philanthropist Finn M. W. Caspersen (pictured) drove incoming New Jersey Governor Thomas Kean and outgoing governor Brendan Byrne to an inauguration party in a four-horse carriage?
 * Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Leo Erdody
 * Comment: I count 199 characters including spaces, ellipsis and ?. Hook sourced by fn4 - Cohan, William D. "The Shot Heard ’Round the Clubs", Vanity Fair (February 2010).

Created by ColonelHenry (talk). Self nominated at 20:03, 2 November 2013 (UTC).


 * Symbol question.svg Detailed article on excellent sources. The cited hook seems longish, - can we simply say (in the hook, not the article) something like this (provided that the cute detail goes to the article)?
 * ALT1: ... that in 1982 financier and philanthropist Finn M. W. Caspersen drove in period costume the new and the former New Jersey Governor to an inauguration party in a four-horse carriage? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 10:36, 21 November 2013 (UTC)
 * Thanks, I agree with the text as proposed for ALT1. ALT1 is more direct and less cumbersome as a hook. I removed the "(pictured)" parenthetical, since Wereith says we can't use Caspersen's photo (since removed) on the main page.--ColonelHenry (talk) 15:29, 21 November 2013 (UTC)
 * Will you take the "costume" detail to the article? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 15:45, 21 November 2013 (UTC)
 * I added it to the article before making my comment above on 15:29--ColonelHenry (talk) 17:13, 21 November 2013 (UTC)
 * How is this:
 * ALT2: ... that in 1982 financier and philanthropist Finn M. W. Caspersen drove the new and the former New Jersey Governor to an inauguration party in period costume in a four-horse carriage? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 15:47, 21 November 2013 (UTC)
 * Either ALT1 or ALT2 is fine. I don't see much of a shade of difference between the two...which ever you prefer.--ColonelHenry (talk) 17:13, 21 November 2013 (UTC)
 * Symbol voting keep.svg Offline sources accepted AGF, - the prep builder can pick or tweak, --Gerda Arendt (talk) 17:19, 21 November 2013 (UTC)