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Gravity Bone

 * ... that the free-to-play video game Gravity Bone uses id Software's Quake 2 engine and incorporates music by Asian filmmaker Wong Kar Wai?
 * Reviewed: Jennifer Lopez and Marc Anthony Collections
 * Comment: 5x expansion (1727 characters to 9038 characters)

Created/expanded by Hahc21 (talk). Self nom at 00:55, 12 December 2012 (UTC)


 * Symbol question.svg First thing I noticed was that there was no inline cite to support Wong Kar Wai as the composer. Second, there was no inline cite to support the Quake 2 engine being used, only a sentence later saying the Quake 2 engine is free. Also, each direct quote needs an inline cite immediately after it, not a sentence or two later. (There are a lot of these that need inline cites.) Otherwise, the expansion from 1727 of readable prose on December 10 to 9047 on December 12 meets the 5x requirement. Referencing is good. I was unable to find any plagiarism. The hook is okay to use if there's a removal of either "id Software's" or "Quake 2"—those two possessives do not work at the same time. Here are some options:
 * "...uses Quake 2 engine..."
 * "...uses id Software's Quake 2 engine..."
 * "...uses the Quake 2 engine..."
 * "...uses id Software's id Tech 2 as the engine..."
 * "...uses id Tech 2 as the engine..."
 * These fixes should be easy enough. I expect the nomination will pass. Binksternet (talk) 00:25, 23 December 2012 (UTC)
 * I will add the inline citations, and have chosen one of your suggestions :) — ΛΧΣ  21  02:44, 23 December 2012 (UTC)
 * Okay, take your time. Happy holidays! Binksternet (talk) 18:13, 23 December 2012 (UTC)
 * Nudge and reminder. But don't rush. Binksternet (talk) 19:06, 28 December 2012 (UTC)
 * Done :) — ΛΧΣ  21  18:13, 29 December 2012 (UTC)
 * Symbol confirmed.svg Article is ready for DYK. Binksternet (talk) 14:33, 4 January 2013 (UTC)