Template:Did you know nominations/Haus Cumberland

Haus Cumberland

 * ... that in 2011, a major fire occurred in the attic of the Haus Cumberland (pictured) in Charlottenburg, Berlin, breaking down the left side of the roof?
 * Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Snow mold

Created/expanded by Thine Antique Pen (talk). Self nom at 17:00, 11 October 2012 (UTC)


 * Symbol confirmed.svg 2657 characters, QPQ okay, meet guidelines (references/citations/neutrality). Hook fact is sourced by a non-english site, but a simple Google Translation looks fine.  Theo polisme  21:03, 11 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Symbol possible vote.svg The hook fact "breaking down the left side of the roof" is not supported by an inline source citation after the sentence where it is given, as required by the rules. Furthermore, the immediately succeeding sentence, about the dome, is incomprehensible. Both of these things need to be fixed before this nomination can proceed. BlueMoonset (talk) 05:10, 18 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Done. Thine Antique Pen (talk) 15:41, 18 October 2012 (UTC)
 * I think there's a language issue here. Revisiting this section, I can't tell whether "breaking down the left side of the roof" or "broke down the left side of the roof", means that the fire caused the left side of the roof to collapse (fall in), or that the fire ran down the left side of the roof or engulfed the left side? This is unfortunately unclear. The following sentence is now incomprehensible in a new and different way: "The dome of the first courtyard, made of galvanized steel, of the collapsed." What does "of the collapsed" mean? It makes no sense in English. Did the dome itself collapse, did the courtyard? Or did something else happen? Perhaps you can get assistance from a Wikipedia colleague on rewording this section. BlueMoonset (talk) 02:55, 20 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Copyedited. Thine Antique Pen (talk) 17:04, 25 October 2012 (UTC)
 * I had to make a few additional changes for clarity and conciseness. Is it still factually correct? BlueMoonset (talk) 06:34, 28 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Yes. Thine Antique Pen (talk) 16:22, 4 November 2012 (UTC)
 * Striking original hook, and proposing revised ALT1 to reflect the recent clarifications in the article:
 * ALT1: ... that in 2011, a major fire occurred in the attic of the Haus Cumberland (pictured) in Charlottenburg, Berlin, causing the left side of the roof to collapse?
 * Symbol redirect vote4.png New reviewer needed for ALT1 hook. BlueMoonset (talk) 00:18, 5 November 2012 (UTC)
 * Symbol confirmed.svg I'm happy with ALT1 and I concur with Theopolisme's review. I've made a few minor tweaks to the article but otherwise it looks good. Prioryman (talk) 09:15, 6 November 2012 (UTC)