Template:Did you know nominations/Henry Brown (New Zealand politician)

Henry Brown (New Zealand politician)

 * ... that within a year of settling in New Zealand, Henry Brown (pictured) family lived right where the First Taranaki War was fought?
 * Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Transformers G1: Awakening
 * Comment: Recently expanded

Created/expanded by Schwede66 (talk). Self nom at 19:29, 22 July 2012 (UTC)


 * Symbol possible vote.svg Length and history verified. However, there is one paragraph that ends without a footnote, and I have duly tagged it. Furthermore, the hook could stand to be improved. At the very least it could be rephrased:
 * ALT1: ... that, within a year of settling in New Zealand, Henry Brown (pictured) family were living in the middle of the First Taranaki War?
 * But the problem here remains that the article doesn't quite say this outright, and frankly I don't think that's all that catchy as a hook ... a lot of other European settlers in colonies lived in what soon became war zones. So I propose instead:
 * ALT2: ... that Henry Brown (pictured) family stayed on their land during New Zealand's First Taranaki War, since as a minister's family they were considered tapu by the Māori? Daniel Case (talk) 04:37, 9 August 2012 (UTC)


 * Thanks for the review. Technically, the article should have been ok as it was ("A rule of thumb is one inline citation per paragraph", and there were two in that paragraph), but I have managed to find that reference again (I had read it, added the fact, but had closed the source before I had added the ref) and have added it. As for ALT2, adding the word 'initially' would probably be closer to the fact. I've made other changes to the hook (I like your suggestion!) and thus provide it as ALT3.
 * ALT3 ... that Henry Brown (pictured) family initially stayed on their land during New Zealand's First Taranaki War, since a minister's family was considered tapu by the Māori?  Schwede 66  18:57, 9 August 2012 (UTC)
 * Symbol confirmed.svg Alright. Good to go. Daniel Case (talk) 03:30, 10 August 2012 (UTC)