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Hubert von Goisern

 * ... that Austrian musician Hubert von Goisern (pictured) absolved a concert tour on a river boat and met the Dalai Lama?


 * Reviewed: Clathrina canariensis

Created/expanded by De728631 (talk). Self nom at 17:02, 18 November 2012 (UTC)


 * Symbol confirmed.svg. The hook is pretty much interesting and the article is new and long enough. The hook is ready to go. — Tomíca (T2ME) 23:48, 28 November 2012 (UTC)


 * Symbol possible vote.svg The hook is problematic in a couple of ways: first, "absolved" is not the right word in that context (and I can't determine what was intended), and second, "river boat" is never explicitly mentioned in the article, and the phrase can have a special meaning (that is, a boat specifically designed for river traffic, which I'm not sure is supported by either article or sources. I've struck the hook; please propose an ALT hook for consideration. Many thanks. BlueMoonset (talk) 04:40, 29 November 2012 (UTC)


 * Well, here's an alternative:
 * ALT1: ... that Austrian musician Hubert von Goisern (pictured) literally embarked on a concert tour by boat on rivers across Europe, and also met the Dalai Lama?
 * De728631 (talk) 12:51, 29 November 2012 (UTC)


 * Symbol confirmed.svg I'm not terrifically fond of "literally embarked", but that's what he actually did: set out by boat on a concert tour (travelling by boat and giving concerts from the deck of a boat to people on shore); I have added a comma and an "also" to separate the tour and the Dalai Lama, as the latter-mentioned meeting occurred years before the boat tour. BlueMoonset (talk) 21:58, 29 November 2012 (UTC)
 * Thank you, I was also tempted to separate the tour and the Dalai Lama. It makes sense. And I do like the "set out by boat" phrase in your comment, so to be on the safe side I'm proposing
 * ALT2: ... that Austrian musician Hubert von Goisern (pictured) set out by boat on a concert tour on rivers across Europe, and also met the Dalai Lama?
 * De728631 (talk) 22:52, 29 November 2012 (UTC)


 * Symbol confirmed.svg Confirming that ALT2 is fine, and the wording better than ALT1. Thanks! BlueMoonset (talk) 15:56, 30 November 2012 (UTC)