Template:Did you know nominations/Hunting Party (Body of Proof)

Hunting Party (Body of Proof)
Created/expanded by M.Mario (talk). Self nom at 19:19, 15 November 2012 (UTC)
 * ... that Body of Proof episode "Hunting Party" featured two mysteries of separate victims, which combined into one towards the end?


 * ALT1- ... that Body of Proof episode "Hunting Party" was directed by Paul Holahan, known for directing Shark, a show which Body of Proof cast member Jeri Ryan appeared on?


 * Symbol possible vote.svg Article is fine, but I don't like the wording of either of the hooks. The original has a misplaced modifier (it sounds like the victims are combining), and the only citation for the plot is the episode itself – I'm not sure if that's OK or not. Otherwise it would be fine. The ALT feels a bit awkward, but could be rephrased to work better. For example:
 * ALT2 - ... that Body of Proof episode "Hunting Party" was directed by Paul Holahan and featured Jeri Ryan, both of whom had worked on the legal drama Shark?
 * If someone else could give an opinion as well it would be appreciated. Focus (talk) 02:41, 5 December 2012 (UTC)
 * I looked at this but do not think the inline citation is sufficient to support ALT2 - the fact that "Jeri Ryan" featured in "Shark". Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:50, 5 December 2012 (UTC)
 * Pinging nominator to address problem; striking earlier problematic hooks, as ALT2 could be saved if a better inline citation is found to support it. BlueMoonset (talk) 16:48, 15 December 2012 (UTC)
 * This would count as a sufficient source, —  M.Mario  (T/C) 18:58, 17 December 2012 (UTC)
 * Symbol confirmed.svg I have added that reference to the article and I am now happy with the ALT2 hook. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 20:06, 17 December 2012 (UTC)