Template:Did you know nominations/Károly Ferenczy

Károly Ferenczy
5x expanded by Biruitorul (talk). Self nom at 18:13, 26 October 2011 (UTC)
 * ... that Hungarian painter Károly Ferenczy had three children, each of whom became artists in different media?
 * ALT1:... that although Hungarian painter Károly Ferenczy was not religious, he depicted Bible scenes in some of his work?
 * Reviewed: Ghenadie Petrescu
 * Pictogram voting keep.svg Length good. Date good and size of prose expansion >5x. Prefer original hook, AGF for original hook sourcing (subscription needed to access Oxford Art Online.)  Reads well, lead section should be expanded per MOS:LEAD. Copyvio check run, clean. (not able to check against paywalled sources) Nice expansion.  The Interior  (Talk) 18:13, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Note to queue-maker, several good PD images associated with this article if you are short on noms w/images. The Interior  (Talk) 18:21, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Grammatically, should be "each of whom", no? - Jmabel &#124; Talk 21:46, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Grammatically, not sure. But "each of whom" does sound better.  The Interior  (Talk) 21:54, 29 October 2011 (UTC)

Close paraphrasing concerns. Example: "His works from this period feature the use of a unifying pearl grey tone that binds together the pale tints and lends a gentle, pensive mood to the whole composition" vs "Ferenczy’s works of this period is characterized by the use of a unifying pearl grey tone that binds together the pale tints and lends a gentle, pensive mood to the whole composition". Nikkimaria (talk) 16:08, 10 November 2011 (UTC)
 * Is this the only problematic sentence, or does this article need a major rewrite? The Interior  (Talk) 05:43, 11 November 2011 (UTC)
 * Major rewrite - that was a particularly egregious sentence, but fairly large swathes of the article are minimally paraphrased. If you or any other reviewer would like a copy of the subscription source in question, let me know. Nikkimaria (talk) 14:08, 11 November 2011 (UTC)
 * I've responded on the talk page. For the reasons I've outlined, I think this is a case where some tweaking can address any outstanding issues, and I'd be grateful if you could point out your other objections over there. - Biruitorul Talk 20:50, 11 November 2011 (UTC)
 * Nikkimaria, maybe you could email the text, that way I know what we're talking about. The Interior  (Talk) 21:47, 11 November 2011 (UTC)
 * Done. Nikkimaria (talk) 01:49, 12 November 2011 (UTC)

Agree major rewrite in order. The article has gone to the copyright problems noticeboard, so I think there is little chance of passing this. The Interior (Talk) 02:26, 16 November 2011 (UTC) :Note: Please hold this for the meantime, the author has requested interest in rewriting. The Interior (Talk) 20:51, 16 November 2011 (UTC)
 * Author does not have time for rewrite per comment on my Talk. Please remove as closed. The Interior  (Talk) 05:29, 18 November 2011 (UTC)