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Mark Andrew (politician)

 * ... that Minneapolis mayoral candidate Mark Andrew owns a French fry stand and a s'more stand at the Minnesota State Fair ?
 * Reviewed: Let the Groove Get In

Created by Sutto159 (talk), Bobamnertiopsis (talk). Nominated by Bobamnertiopsis (talk) at 06:11, 30 May 2013 (UTC).


 * Symbol possible vote.svg Article is new enough and long enough and is well supported by footnotes. However, I see issues of close paraphrasing, or worse. For example, the sentence that contains the hook fact (yes, the hook fact is verified) is copied verbatim from the source. It needs a thorough scrub to resolve that. Also, saying that he's a candidate for mayor is a bit too promotional. To resolve that, and make the hook scan a little bit better, I recommend revising the hook to say "that Minnesota politician Mark Andrew owns stands that sell french fries stand and s'mores at the Minnesota State Fair?" --Orlady (talk) 16:45, 6 June 2013 (UTC)
 * I wasn't the originator of most of the article's text, but I'll see what I can do. Bob Amnertiopsis ∴ChatMe! 17:53, 9 June 2013 (UTC)
 * I've fiddled with the article some. Hopefully it's better now. Also, for the eventual promoter's ease of use, here's an official

ALT: *... that Minneapolis politician Mark Andrew owns stands that sell french fries and s'mores at the Minnesota State Fair? Bob Amnertiopsis ∴ChatMe! 22:22, 15 June 2013 (UTC)


 * Symbol confirmed.svg Article seems OK now. ALT is good to go. Full disclosure: I realize that I was once slightly acquainted with the article subject, a few eons ago. --Orlady (talk) 22:46, 15 June 2013 (UTC)