Template:Did you know nominations/Mary Jane Veloso


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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:13, 11 June 2015 (UTC)

Mary Jane Veloso

 * ... that Mary Jane Veloso was sentenced to death for importing 2.7 kg of heroin into Indonesia?


 * ALT1:... that the execution of domestic worker Mary Jane Veloso will occur at midnight on April 28, 2015?
 * ALT2: ... that public figures who called for the release of Mary Jane Veloso included personalities such as Manny Pacquiao, Eve Ensler, Anggun, and Erwiana Sulistyaningsih?
 * ALT3: ... that Mary Jane Veloso was supposed to be executed together with Andrew Chan, Myuran Sukumaran, and Rodrigo Gularte but was spared by a last minute 'miracle'?
 * ALT4: ... that the mother of Mary Jane Veloso believes her daughter was spared by a 'miracle'?
 * ALT5: ... that the Change.org petition to have death row convict Mary Jane Veloso released had reached 250,000 signatures?

Created by Shhhhwwww!! (talk). Nominated by Roches (talk) at 11:43, 27 April 2015 (UTC).

Article is new enough (created 4/27). Hook is short enough and interesting enough. However, when you eliminate headings and footnotes, the article is 1,500 characters. Of that, about one-third (500 characters) is made up of a list of famous people calling for her release. IMO the list of celebrities should be discounted as constituting narrative text. For this to qualify for the main page, there really ought to be at least 1,500 characters of true narrative text. Please see if this can be expanded a bit. The execution is scheduled for tomorrow. Whether or not that happens, there should be ample material with which to expand this over the next few days. Cbl62 (talk) 16:15, 27 April 2015 (UTC)
 * Symbol possible vote.svg Thank you for expanding the article so that it now exceeds 1500 characters. However, the newly-added alt 3 hook is problematic in that (i) the assertion that she was saved by a "miracle" is not set forth in the article (DYK requires the hook fact to be found in the article), (ii) the "miracle" assertion appears be non-factual (the article says she merely received a temporary stay of execution to allow her to testify against another), and (iii) the portion of the new hook detailing the persons with whom she was scheduled to be executed seems unremarkable. Perhaps another hook? Cbl62 (talk) 10:47, 29 April 2015 (UTC)
 * Sorry for interrupting your conversation, but I would want to suggest a hook, if I may:
 * ALT6: ... that Mary Jane Veloso, a name which can also mean marijuana drug, was convicted for allegedly smuggling heroin, another kind of drug?
 * There are no citations nor mentioning in the article but I believe it'll be easy to add/fix that. Good luck! 001Jrm (talk) 23:11, 8 May 2015 (UTC)
 * On second thought, my alt might offend others... but I'll just let it stay there just in case it's not....:/ 001Jrm (talk) 02:04, 9 May 2015 (UTC)
 * ALT7 ... that Mary Jane Veloso was granted a last minute stay of execution to provide evidence against her alleged trafficker?
 * Symbol redirect vote 4.svg New review request to check the last three hooks. Fuebaey (talk) 19:11, 1 June 2015 (UTC)

On the basis that it was previously passed for everything but the hooks, it is ready to go with ALT7 (ALT5 has tense issues: "had reached"; ALT6 claims that Mary Jane Veloso is another name for marijuana which I don't think can be right; I do think it would be another name for a drug called marijuanaveloso if that is ever produced though) Belle (talk) 11:25, 10 June 2015 (UTC)