Template:Did you know nominations/Mining industry of Sudan


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The result was: promoted by sovereign°sentinel (contribs) 06:29, 3 September 2015 (UTC)

Mining industry of Sudan

 * ... that most gold mining in Sudan is done by artisanal miners?


 * Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Calais jungle

Moved to mainspace by Rosiestep (talk), Nvvchar (talk), and Dr. Blofeld (talk). Nominated by Rosiestep (talk) at 17:29, 2 July 2015 (UTC).


 * The source says that there are approximately 250,000 artisanal miners but doesn't mention their contribution to the output. Belle (talk) 01:43, 12 August 2015 (UTC)

Sentence in the text has been changed. In view of review comments. The hook suggestion is modified as
 * ALT1 ... that gold mining in Sudan is also credited to a very large work force of artisanal miners?  Nvvchar  16:06, 21 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Symbol question.svg New enough, long enough, neutrally written, adequately referenced, no close paraphrasing seen. A couple of points:
 * The article does not have a proper lead section. The lead appears to be more of a history and includes numerous statistics that should be moved down to the text. The lead also does not adequately summarize the article, as it only mentions petroleum, gold, iron, and chromite, whereas the body cites a long list of "Commodities". I suggest rewriting the lead as more of an overview and moving the history and statistics down to the body of the article.
 * The "also" in the hook is confusing. It would be better just to state something about the artisanal miners without making it sound like something is missing. Yoninah (talk) 19:23, 1 September 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review. Modified the lead section as suggested. Hook is modified as
 * ALT2: ... that hundreds of thousands of artisanal miners are involved in gold mining in Sudan?  Nvvchar . 01:54, 2 September 2015 (UTC)
 * Symbol confirmed.svg Thanks for changing the lead; it reads much better. ALT2 is fine, though I think a more specific figure would be of greater interest, so I changed "a very large work force" to "hundreds of thousands" per the source, and added a link. ALT2 hook ref verified and cited inline. ALT2 good to go. Yoninah (talk) 09:04, 2 September 2015 (UTC)