Template:Did you know nominations/Philip Slier

Philip Slier
Created/expanded by Doug Coldwell (talk). Self nom at 12:50, 28 November 2012 (UTC)
 * ... that Philip Slier wrote 86 letters to his parents that were hidden and not discovered for over 50 years with parallel stories of Nazi-controlled Netherlands much like Anne Frank's diary?


 * Reviewed - Maison Novelli

Date, length, and refs check out yet there are some questions: Why so many headers/subsections in a relatively short article? Seems unnecessary, actually distracting and disruptive, to have camps and yellow star being redirected to a main article. Why do it if they are linked inside continuous prose about Slier's biography? Also, while it's interesting to include the comparison to Anne Frank in the hook, somehow the phrasing/word choice seems awkward. Unfortunately can't seem to come up with an ALT at this time. Any suggestions? Djflem (talk) 23:23, 4 December 2012 (UTC)
 * Djflem - thanks for the improvement to the article of removing the sub-headers. Looks much better.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:24, 5 December 2012 (UTC)


 * ALT1 ... that much like Anne Frank's diary, the hidden letters of Philip Slier discovered more than fifty years after his death reveals the story of Nazi-controlled Netherlands  through a personal perspective?
 * ALT2 ... that much like Anne Frank's diary, the hidden letters of Philip Slier discovered more than fifty years after his death reveals history of Nazi-controlled Netherlands  through a personal perspective?
 * ALT 3 ... that much like Anne Frank's diary, the hidden letters of Philip Slier discovered more than fifty years after his death offer a contemporary perspective of Nazi-controlled Netherlands revealed through personal narrative?

Looks good to go. Added an ALT 3. Djflem (talk) 16:16, 5 December 2012 (UTC)