Template:Did you know nominations/Save The Bay

Save The Bay
Created/expanded by Luciferwildcat (talk). Self nom at 01:06, 11 January 2012 (UTC)
 * ... that Save The Bay was instrumental in preventing San Bruno Mountain from being demolished to create 27 miles (44 km) of landfill in San Francisco Bay? (see ALT1)


 * Symbol confirmed.svg New: yes. Length: definitely OK. Article generally seems good and sourced. The hook has a wording problem - landfill sounds like it should be measured in cubic metres (or cubic feet) - it has a volume, not a length. The hook leaves the reader confused (not curious) as to whether it's a 43km by 43km area of the bay, or 43 sq. km, or even 43 cubic km. The article itself makes the meaning clear. So a slight rewording, and using shorter, snappier words, and using Template:convert, is enough to improve the hook. Although this is not the simple English wikipedia, it's still better to use simpler words, if the meaning is essentially the same, so i also replaced "demolished" by "destroyed". I propose ALT1. Boud (talk) 21:05, 16 January 2012 (UTC)


 * ALT1: ... that Save The Bay helped stop San Bruno Mountain from being destroyed to create landfill along 27 mi of San Francisco Bay?