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Serigala Terakhir

 * ... that Last Wolf featured "kitschy kung-fu imagery", gangs, and a "retro 1970s wardrobe"?
 * Comment: Not a self nomination, no QPQ required

Created/expanded by Redyka94 (talk). Nominated by Crisco 1492 (talk) at 06:47, 25 April 2012 (UTC)



Address concerns. --LauraHale (talk) 09:55, 11 May 2012 (UTC)
 * Symbol confirmed.svg New enough. Long enough.  (At time of nomination.)  Article is fully cited where required by WP:MOS (plot summaries need no cites). Image in article has fair use rationale.  Hook is properly formatted.  Fact is as interesting as I think you're going to get with the article.  Article is neutral enough.  :P to QPQ avoidance because of backlog issues but fair enough as not required. Especially when the author has 5+ dyks to their credit.
 * Symbol question.svg Article says: "Jakarta Globe wrote that the film presents awkward visuals, including the retro 1970s wardrobe and the kitschy kung-fu imagery of the gang members." Source says "The movie does, however, present some awkward visuals, including the retro 1970s wardrobe and the kitschy kung-fu imagery of the Black Dragon members and their headquarters,"    This is really close.  Can we put quote marks in the article for the bit that is close? Or get a second opinion that this is not close? --LauraHale (talk) 09:55, 11 May 2012 (UTC)


 * Done — Crisco 1492 (talk) 10:00, 11 May 2012 (UTC)
 * Quote is more extensive: "the retro 1970s wardrobe and the kitschy kung-fu imagery of the" is the bit that is completely the same. It isn't just those words that are word for word. --LauraHale (talk) 10:19, 11 May 2012 (UTC)
 * Quoting that word-for word is ungrammatical. Rephrased a bit — Crisco 1492 (talk) 14:55, 11 May 2012 (UTC)
 * Comment: I looked at this nomination last night, but crashed before I could actually review it. Some points:
 * The hook itself uses those same phrases from the review that Laura notes, and they ought to be quoted or rephrased as well.
 * Although Pahlevi is listed in the infobox as one of the stars and in the Release and reception sections as an award-winner, she (or her character) do not appear in the Plot section. If she's important enough to win a pair of "couples" awards with Bastian and have that mentioned, her role in the film has to be mentioned as well so we know how the two were coupled. (I was confused by this, since Jarot [played by Bastian] is said to be in love with Ale's sister Aisyah, played by Fanny Fabriana, another star. How does Pahlevi's character fit into all this?)
 * The Plot's final paragraph seems unclear in a number of places, and needs a bit of work. Fathir pushes Aisyah and she dies immediately. Is this off a roof? Is it deliberate murder? "After walking a while, Fathir shoots Jarot twice." Is this Jarot walking after the fight with Ale? Fathir walking after pushing Aisyah? Were they walking together after Ale's death?
 * Release and reception section refers to "fire fire". Something needs revising there. Also, both reviews are presented as "bad X, however Y". Can one please use a different structure?
 * That's it! BlueMoonset (talk) 15:22, 11 May 2012 (UTC)


 * Responses below:
 * Done.
 * Should have been best pair, as both actors are male. Added to plot section.
 * Fixed. Yes, off the roof - not sure if it was deliberate, but it's implied by the text. Second one rephrased.
 * Changed.
 * Better? — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:10, 11 May 2012 (UTC)


 * I'm not 100% sure on the fix, and will basically go along with whatever BlueMoonset says. --LauraHale (talk) 23:29, 11 May 2012 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the fixes, Crisco. The changes solved the issues I had with the article's plot and other sections, and I edited a few remaining quibbles I had with the wording. There's one more fairly important point: is director (and author?) Upi Avianto a he or a she? The article here says she, the Upi Avianto article says he, and Google Translate is saying he based on the Waspada article. I had thought that a woman directing this kind of movie might be good for an ALT hook, but if it's a man, not.


 * At this point, like Laura is, I'm uneasy about the hook itself. The Jakarta Globe sentence in the article was more problematic, once I reread the review, so I made a number of changes to it. The problem with the hook is that the 70s retro and kitschy kung-fu are both referring to the drug gang, so to divide it into three separate things, with the (unspecified) gang being one, is strange. Let me think on it a bit more, and see if I can come up with some suggestions later tonight. I'm having trouble thinking outside the box just now. BlueMoonset (talk) 00:31, 12 May 2012 (UTC)
 * Very much a she. Dr. Blofeld (who created her article) must have been basing his work on a Google translation. The Indonesian third-person pronoun "dia" is gender-neutral, so Google can't translate it properly. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 00:43, 12 May 2012 (UTC)
 * ALT1 ... that female director Upi Avianto directed a film about gangsters, drugs, revenge, and betrayal?
 * The ALT1 hook is very much what I was hoping for should Avianto be female, and it's almost there. I think it's important to avoid the director/directed repetition, and also that the name of the film is worth retaining. Since Avianto also wrote it, we have a bit of leeway. The ALT below could be expanded further based on the Jakarta Post link above (which would mean adding a bit from it, along with footnote, to the article), perhaps "[a]n action" or "successful action" before "film" (though I'm not wedded to either)?:
 * ALT2 ... that female director Upi Avianto created Last Wolf, a film about gangsters, drugs, betrayal and revenge? —BlueMoonset (talk) 02:05, 12 May 2012 (UTC)
 * I like ALT2. I'll add what's useful from the JP source. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 08:00, 12 May 2012 (UTC)
 * I've added a bit — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:09, 12 May 2012 (UTC)
 * I like the additions. I'm going to have to toss this back to Laura for final approval, since I had a hand in ALT2 and shouldn't approve it myself. I'll ping her on her talk page and ask her to stop by. BlueMoonset (talk) 03:51, 13 May 2012 (UTC)

Let's go with Alt2. The plagiarism concern appears to be adequately addressed. The hook sounds fine and appears to be supported by the text and sources. --LauraHale (talk) 04:08, 13 May 2012 (UTC)