Template:Did you know nominations/Shammi (actress)


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The result was: rejected by BlueMoonset (talk) 18:13, 21 April 2014 (UTC)

Shammi (actress)

 * ... that veteran Indian actress Shammi was initially employed by Johnson and Johnson for 100 rupees per month?
 * Reviewed: Development of Grand Theft Auto V

Created by Sortlips (talk), Ethically Yours (talk). Nominated by Ethically Yours (talk) at 09:20, 31 March 2014 (UTC).


 * Symbol confirmed.svg Hook short enough and catchy, article long enough, new enough. Hook is cited, though I corrected the URL for the hook so it goes directly to the proper page and you don't have to click back to find the information.


 * Symbol question.svg However, this article has some core problems: it really needs a serious copyedit before it's ready for prime time on the main page.  There are punctuation and grammar issues, some awkward phrasing ("to be directed actor from Aurat, Harish.") and usage issues (such as using "Nargis Rabadi" instead of just "Rabadi" and overuse of first names instead of last names) The article is also somewhat underlinked.  As it appears a more experienced editor nominated this from a basic article created by a new editor, I will give this a few days for the editors to do some cleanup,  It's a very interesting article and well worth the work to get it up to par.   Montanabw (talk) 07:05, 1 April 2014 (UTC)
 * ✅ Thank you Montanabw for your invaluable suggestions. I have copy-edited the article myself, wikified it and now it looks in a good shape. All clear and I guess it's ready to pass.  Ethically  Yours! 09:24, 1 April 2014 (UTC)


 * Symbol confirmed.svg Much better! Good to go!   Montanabw (talk) 17:54, 1 April 2014 (UTC)
 * Symbol delete vote.svg This article has significant paraphrasing issues. Compare for example "In the sixth standard, she and her sister went to a school where the fee was Rs 11. Tatas had a wooden toy factory in the colony itself and she had her asked for jobs there. The wooden factory couldn't give young children a job but they told the sisters to work there for two to three hours after school and in return, they would pay their school fees. Her sister joined Johnson and Johnson as a secretary after she finished her school and later Rabadi also worked there after her matriculation" with "In the sixth standard, my sister and I went to a school where the fee was Rs 11. Tata's had a wooden toy factory in the colony itself and my sister and I asked for jobs there. They couldn't give us a job but they told us to work there for two to three hours after school and in return, they would pay our school fees. My sister joined Johnson and Johnson as a secretary after she finished school and I also worked there after my matriculation" - these are nearly identical. Nikkimaria (talk) 02:34, 2 April 2014 (UTC)
 * I pinged the nominator about this,, s/he will be in a better position to fix this than the creator, who I think has a bit of a language barrier. If you see any other significant issues, maybe flag them here.   Montanabw (talk) 23:13, 2 April 2014 (UTC)
 * Symbol delete vote.svg Based on additional close paraphrasing issues found by Nikkimaria, I am withdrawing my approval of this article. I'm very sympathetic to the editors of this article, but unfortunately at this time I don't personally have the time to help sort out these concerns.  Ping me and Nikkimaria when the article has had another whack taken at it and maybe we can re-assess.   Montanabw (talk) 03:33, 4 April 2014 (UTC)