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Smim Payu

 * ... that Adm. Smim Payu, who led Toungoo Burma's that ended the Hanthawaddy Kingdom in 1541, was a former Hanthawaddy minister?
 * Reviewed: Reach Records

Created/expanded by Hybernator (talk). Self nominated at 01:48, 21 July 2013 (UTC).


 * Symbol question.svg Comment. Hook fact is mentioned twice in the lead and the military career section, but it isn't followed by an inline citation and must be addressed. The article looks good otherwise. For the hook, to avoid the form of "that X is Y?", I've proposed the following:

ALT1 ... that Mon admiral Smim Payu switched sides to Burmese Toungoo and led an naval attack that ended his former Mon-speaking Hanthawaddy Kingdom? Alex ShihTalk 01:04, 4 August 2013 (UTC)
 * The citations were there but I've inserted them next to the hook's relevant sentences for better clarity. I'm fine with ALT1. Hybernator (talk) 03:26, 4 August 2013 (UTC)
 * Symbol confirmed.svg Thanks for the clarification. I'll wait for someone else to promote this entry. Alex ShihTalk 04:08, 4 August 2013 (UTC)