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Thermal work limit

 * ... that the Thermal work limit has led to a substantial decrease in incidences of heat illness in the workplace?

Created by Yuchinglu (talk). Nominated by Deadbeef (talk) at 06:33, 14 May 2013 (UTC).

ALT1: ... that the Thermal work limit has led to a substantial decrease in incidences of heat illness in the Australian mining industry?
 * It's long enough and new enough, but it's not very well written at this point. Use of citation templates (Template:cite journal and others) would help clean it up; the formatting is inconsistent, and only reference 3 is done properly (with italicized journal title, article title in quotation marks, etc). At least three paragraphs are unsourced. "Methodology" ends with "into the following working zones.", but nothing follows. Having an inline calculator is handy, but not exactly encyclopedic--I suppose we can let that slide, but we really shouldn't have a manufacturer's link inline. And "There has been a significant reduction..."--sure, but a journal article is cited: certainly that article presents some numbers so we can say something better than the current, rather vague statement. Drmies (talk) 05:07, 15 May 2013 (UTC)
 * I've gone through and addressed your concerns. Please let me know if anything still needs fixed. I would also like to propose an alternative, more specific hook:
 * Symbol voting keep.svg I'll take reference 3 on good faith, since I don't have access to that journal (the 2003 article "Fluid Losses and Hydration Status of Industrial Workers" by the same authors did not have such information or I would have added it). ALT1 is a go. Drmies (talk) 14:09, 16 May 2013 (UTC)