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Tony's Cronies

 * ... that Tony's Cronies included Tony Blair's (pictured) former boss, school friend and office manager appointed to official positions because of their personal friendships with Blair?
 * Reviewed: Magnus Stamnestrø

Created by The C of E (talk). Self nominated at 07:32, 3 May 2013 (UTC).


 * Symbol question.svg Assuming the redirect thing is ok, then it would be good to go, I think. Long enough, hook cited online and very interesting.  There might be a problem with the hookline though, as it appears to refer to three people but from what I can gather, the office manager and the school friend are the same person.  A tweak may be necessary. -- Hillbillyholiday talk 23:52, 18 May 2013 (UTC)
 * OK, how about this? As for the redirect, the rules do say that former redirects count as new articles.  The C of E God Save the Queen!  ( talk ) 07:24, 19 May 2013 (UTC)

Alt1: ... that Tony's Cronies included Tony Blair's (pictured) former boss as well as his school friend and office manager, appointed to official positions because of their personal friendships with Blair?


 * I think the "office manager" part is redundant. Also, I'm a bit concerned that the hookline statement is close to synthesis, maybe it would be better to say "reportedly because of their friendships", or something similar? Hillbillyholiday talk 12:50, 19 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Alt2... that Tony's Cronies included Tony Blair's (pictured) former boss and school friend appointed to UK official positions reportedly because of their personal friendships with Blair?  The C of E God Save the Queen!  ( talk ) 12:59, 19 May 2013 (UTC)


 * Symbol confirmed.svg That seems fine to me now. -- Hillbillyholiday talk 13:02, 19 May 2013 (UTC)