Template:Did you know nominations/William Orr (Australian politician)

William Orr (Australian politician)

 * ... that William Orr was a gold miner?
 * Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Group of Monuments at Mahabalipuram (one only)

Created/expanded by Bonkers The Clown (talk), Crisco 1492 (talk). Nominated by Bonkers The Clown (talk) at 14:33, 9 April 2013 (UTC).


 * How's ALT1: ... that William Orr hunted ore? — Crisco 1492 (talk) 14:50, 9 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Also sounds good but... You might want to see Template:Did you know nominations/William Orr (trade unionist) :) ☯ Bonkers The Clown  \(^_^)/  Nonsensical Babble  ☯ 15:00, 9 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Oh my. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 22:26, 9 April 2013 (UTC)

I'm not sure if I'm reading the rule (1c) about this correctly? I can see this meets expansion as it's x2.56 having gone from 822 characters up to presently 2110. However, it appears to have had a source prior to the expansion - I thought it had to be unsourced? In anticipation of receiving the go ahead about the rule, below are some general review points:
 * The third paragraph in the section 'Career' has "partially financed" between two sentences and needs to be sorted out.
 * I have checked with earwig and duplication detector and found no concerns; the article is not a stub and has inline citations to each paragraph.
 * If you are going for the original hook, which is 34 characters long, a ref needs to be placed immediately after the sentence (I'm guessing the first sentence of the initial paragraph under the 'Career' section?);
 * The ALT1 hook is just 28 characters - would that be covered by the same sentence?
 * If as suggested you combine this with William Orr using the 68 character hook suggested by Crisco (that William Orr hated trade unions, but William Orr organised them?) it is covered here by ref #8 in the last sentence of the final paragraph in the 'Career' section.
 * Hopefully we can clear up the unsourced question above and clarify what is happening about combining the two nominations? Of course, everyone has then got to try and sort out putting the two nominations together!  SagaciousPhil   -  Chat  14:49, 21 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Statement sure is convulated! Hold on, let me go straighten my head first by grabbing some mocha... ☯ Bonkers The Clown  \(^_^)/  Nonsensical Babble  ☯ 14:59, 21 April 2013 (UTC)


 * Confirming that as the article was originally sourced, it needs to be a 5x expansion to 4110 prose characters; it currently has 2110, meaning another 2000 need to be added. Is this going to be feasible? BlueMoonset (talk) 15:29, 21 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Symbol delete vote.svg No updates seen on this article since April 10. If adding content doesn't happen soon, this nomination will have to be declined. —♦♦ AMBER  (ЯʘCK)  14:58, 25 April 2013 (UTC)