Template:Did you know nominations/Yezi


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The result was: promoted by Montanabw (talk) 22:52, 20 May 2016 (UTC)

Yezi

 * ... that Yezi auditioned at LOEN Entertainment after her singing and dancing videos became the most popular videos on social networking site Cyworld?


 * ALT1:... that K-pop girl group member Yezi did not have much public recognition before competing in Unpretty Rapstar 2?
 * Reviewed: Space Station Silicon Valley

Created by Random86 (talk). Self-nominated at 07:53, 2 May 2016 (UTC).


 * I prefer the first hook, although I'd fix the grammar a bit to clarify that the two videos were the most popular videos on the social networking site. Maybe something like "after her singing and dancing videos became the most popular videos on the social networking side Cyworld". Moreover, I'm uneasy about how the original hook leaves out the trainee who first watched her videos and then brought her to the entertainment company's attention; at the moment, the original hook sort of implies (if I'm reading it correctly) that the social networking site itself (i.e. the company running the site or something) had a direct influence on the entertainment company. Maybe we could try something like "after it noticed two of her videos, which were the most popular videos on the site Cyworld?" Of course, then it would be 136 characters, and I'd prefer it to be shorter. Anyway, as it stands, it's fine, but there's a little room for improvement. APerson (talk!) 01:35, 20 May 2016 (UTC)


 * , thanks for the review. I edited the first hook, and how about this new one:
 * ALT2:... that Yezi auditioned at LOEN Entertainment after the agency noticed her singing and dancing videos, which were the most popular videos on Cyworld? –Random86 (talk) 03:46, 20 May 2016 (UTC)
 * Symbol confirmed.svg ALT2 looks great. APerson (talk!) 12:49, 20 May 2016 (UTC)