Template talk:Did you know/Hanna Zemer

Hanna Zemer

 * ... that Hanna Zemer, who became the first female editor-in-chief of a major Israeli newspaper, had survived imprisonment in two Nazi concentration camps?
 * Reviewed: Dacian bracelets
 * Comment: :Alt1: ... that Hanna Zemer was the first female editor-in-chief of a major Israeli newspaper?

Created by Epeefleche (talk). Self nom at 21:53, 3 August 2011 (UTC) Please add a comment and signature (or just a signature if endorsing) after each aspect you have reviewed:

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 * Length, format, content rules: Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:53, 11 August 2011 (UTC)
 * Source: Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:53, 11 August 2011 (UTC)
 * Interest: I prefer the original, but both are passable. Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:53, 11 August 2011 (UTC)
 * Image suitability, if applicable: None. Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:53, 11 August 2011 (UTC)
 * ALT hooks, if proposed:

Article
 * Length: Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:53, 11 August 2011 (UTC)
 * Vintage: Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:53, 11 August 2011 (UTC)
 * Sourcing (V, RS, BLP): Overly sourced. Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:53, 11 August 2011 (UTC)
 * Neutrality: Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:53, 11 August 2011 (UTC)
 * Plagiarism/close paraphrasing: This shows a couple of lines that should be rewritten (excluding the monstrously huge blockquote) Crisco 1492 (talk) 10:31, 11 August 2011 (UTC)
 * copyvio (images): None. Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:53, 11 August 2011 (UTC)
 * Obvious faults in prose, structure, formatting:

Comments/discussion:
 * Symbol possible vote.svg After the paraphrasing is fixed this should be fine. Crisco 1492 (talk) 10:31, 11 August 2011 (UTC)
 * Also, could you cut back on the in-text citations? No need to cite every sentence. (Journalism career in particular) Crisco 1492 (talk) 10:36, 11 August 2011 (UTC)
 * Striking overcitation comment per discussion with nominator via email. Rephrasing request still stands. Crisco 1492 (talk) 15:34, 12 August 2011 (UTC)
 * I re-phrased per suggestions a couple of days ago. Best.--Epeefleche (talk) 06:43, 13 August 2011 (UTC)
 * Symbol confirmed.svg Rephrasing checks out. Crisco 1492 (talk) 10:40, 13 August 2011 (UTC)